When the Passivity Precept takes over the world it snuffs out all brutality, leaving its MMO-like Violence Simulator as humanity's only source of physical violence. Knowing how much she can make from selling epic gear, Grace Winston enters the simulation and discovers that it's more than just a game. Somewhere in there are the answers to who started the fire that killed her father.
For far too long, Lorevinel Silvercat has been stuck as the Ravenborn clan’s free-roaming prisoner. They’ve held a grudge against his clan and have used him to vent their hatred. Having planned his escape for several years, he has everything ready, but he needs a specific artifact from the Rogues Guild to finally start his journey.
Will Grace find her answers? Will Lore gain his freedom? Can these two unlikely people, both alien to each other, find common ground and work together while dealing with an unasked for soul bond?
ToS is a Lite LitRPG (meaning very few stats with a focus on story). Expect cursing, sexual tension, descriptions of breeding dungeon rats, and a little gore.
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There are lots of creative departures in this fast-paced tale. As I write this, there are only five chapters currently posted, so it's early days yet—But, this is a story worth adding to your 'read-me' stack Now, so you don't lose track of it later.
I enjoyed the brisk pace of the opening—which gets us into the world-space where the GameLit aspects come to the fore. The events occurring IRL are interesting as well, and I hope more is revealed about the MC's life earth-side in coming chapters.
The author is deft at communicating a lot of depth with very few brushstrokes.
I do hope this one fulfills it's early promise and makes it all the way to publication—so I can buy the ebook—so the author will write more.
There are very few errors in spelling or grammar—so we are spared that annoyance. My only complaint is I've finished the chapters available, and want more!
I really like this writer's voice (or style, if you prefer) and I hope you will too.
This was really a joy to read (though perhaps joy isn't the best word to use for a book like this?). Characters are amazing, the concept is unique, and the author's voice is just really nice.
As a LitRPG, the skills are damage computation are always a bit finicky, but I like how the author handled this one with some skills being harder to learn than others. For me, that's +1 style points.
The story is awesome. It's hinted that the MC is going to be forced to confront her deepest, darkest fears, which is always the mark of a good narrative. It's also done in a way that makes sense from a lore standpoint, which I think is a plus.
The grammar is pretty on-point, aside from a missed comma here and there or a slight misspelling. Also, I'm interpreting the miner/minor thing as being a pun, because I think it's pretty funny, intentional or not. (This doesn't affect the review just thought I'd throw it out there)
Oh my god, the characters are amazing. MC has PTSD and it's really drilled in that even the idea of fire terrifies her. This is further compounded by both the spells she has to learn and the fact that defeated enemies burst into flames. Other MC is basically held in slavery when the system in supposed to prevent it, and despite his seductive-ness he clearly has some trauma regarding that. They're trying to stop crushing on each other, and Lore really gives some good points on how the concept of soulmates can devastate peoples' lives. Idk, that part probably could have gone into the story category but whatever.
Style 4.5/5 - Good style, nothing to really criticize about, and the tone feels fairly neutral. Communicating through two characters was a very interesting choice, and it was done very well. (Side note, won't post this: Very dumb moment for me was when I realized the green shiny box meant that the story was being told in that person's point of view, I was very confused going from chapter 1 to 2 (I'm not a very smart person))
Story 5/5 - Very interesting, many underlying plot points, many questions were raised for me as I read the novel (not in a bad way!). There's a lot of set up when it comes to the character's backgrounds, a lot of past issues, struggles, and many questions that they seek to find the answer to. I really like characters with history, and both the female and male MC's have history in spades...
Grammar 4.5/5 - I spotted a few things I thought were mistakes, a few might be part of the author's writing style, but it does not affect the story at all. (Side note, won't post this: I'm sorry if you disagree with this and feel free to talk to me if you disagree with this grading, I have a very odd sense of grammar from years of writing only lab reports on only reading engineering textbooks and translated novels (👍≖‿‿≖)👍)
Character 5/5 - I mentioned this in the story part, I adore the two main characters, they have secret pasts and insecurities, very 3D, I very much likes it.
An interesting new take on System Apocalypse, where benevelont aliens take over and all violence is relegated to the PPVS, a FIVR game.
It's well written and the world building has quite a few twists over the standard.
I didn't notice a lot of editing issues, either.
Yeah nice story. Only thing that really ticks me off so far is the way damages are dealt. I mean come on... cutting an ear off is 25 damages and slicing a throat is 9 damages...
Characters and the story seem fine so far, but the story isn't long enough to really judge that. I usually really like virtual reality novels which have some focus on the real world.
Really good style and grammar, no problem understanding what is happening, good description during the action scenes.
Another good point of your story is these little texts before a chapter indirectly giving information about the system. These are well done and actually interesting.
Well that's all i can think about right now. Thanks for writing this story, it is enjoyable.
Pretty quick read (most posts are less than 2500 words). Author does a good job world building without bogging down in extraneous details that don't really move the story forward and keeps a good pace throughout. There were a few times it felt like it jumped a bit but not to bad. Definitely worth the read. Hopefully she'll get to the second book someday.
The story is told in the first person narrative switching the point of view of two distinct yet somehow connected characters, which I found very interesting to read. The lack of present tense made me uneasy at first, but I got used to it after the second chapter. In my opinion, the present tense is more useful to move the story forward while the past tense is better to explore the character's past, but this isn't really a big issue, just a difference in style I guess.
I loved the characters so far, they have an interesting personality which helps to move the story forward.
There were a few grammar errors but nothing really big that stood out, in general, the writing is quite good.
I was going through a rough time when I started reading this story, but the humor, interesting worldbuilding, and lively characters made my day a lot better, and that is the kind of story that it's definitely worth reading.
A great LitRPG, where the world becomes an MMORPG enacted by alien hippies. The story swirls around two persons: a shut-in with PTSD from fire, human Grace, who lives with her (some could say) good-for-nothing uncle and want to learn about her father's death, and Lore, an elven bard, who lost his home in... uups... no spoilers! Read it! and is held h.... No! No spoilers! Bad!
Anyway, you have two amazing MC who are somehow connected.
Style: First-person past tense. A fantastic style, which I am a sucker for. Classical nice blue RR boxes with System communication. Really well-thought math, with some hard-to-figure skills. (It must be brutal to keep track of it... even with proper sheets.)
Grammar: Perfect, for what I have seen. If there are some errors, it's so miniscule it's unnoticeable.
The story is gripping and interesting. There are many plot points and unanswered questions that just make you stay out of sheer curiosity about what happens next.
Character: Well-crafter and thought-out characters. There are a minimum of props. Everyone feels alive, and especially the cheeky System is funny. I just love cheeky systems...
Overall an amazing addition to RR, with good flow and a few curveballs. Way to go!
For readers who enjoy slow burning romance, magical item assisted heists, and learning cultural details about other races/worlds.
Grammar is well done with only a scattering of typos/mistakes (thank you!), and the story is interesting with the twists, bouncing between the real world / virtual world, and all the little exchanges in the notes section that lets us see how the real world is doing with Passivity Precept (as can be expected, some humans are good with this and some aren't coping well).
Character-wise, both Lore and Mia are wonderfully fleshed out with their backgrounds causing current day problems, goals that sometimes align and sometimes don't, and how each of them think about the same item. A dark dress? Lore explains why not, Mia explains why yes, and reading their relationship is lovely. The only fault I really felt was in style, when chapters became a little less wordy, HOWEVER, I will happily favorite, follow, and recommend this fiction for others to read!
It's a very fun fantasy story that combines classic D&D-esque characters, a litrpg/game system, and reality.
The whole world is suddenly taken over by beings who do not like violence. They understand that humans tend to like violence though and so they enact a system where were can be violent to each other. And it's basically a huge MMO.
But more then that- they know all of our secrets. And one can either play the game for fun, or do find out what we seek.
Grace lives with her deadbeat uncle and makes most of her cash in MMOs. So when the world becomes a giant MMO, and she can learn about how her father died, she goes along with it.
And that's just the beginning.
It's a very good story, fast paced and well written. We switch POVs between Grace and Lore, an elf bard, and learn more about them and the system. Grammar's good, story's interesting, and I like the characters.