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"Will there ever be a world of peace?"

This question rings across the continent for generations, until it is heard by one.

This tale follows, the one who will usher the world into an era of prosperity and peace.
The only one who is capable.

The ambitious, the illustrious.

Minamoto Yama.

 

 

 

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Kazushi Tetsuo

Kazushi Tetsuo

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6ixSageItachi
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I really like the ninja story, there aren't very many and there aren't any done like this. There are only a few chapters so far but it's really interesting and compelling. Nothing bad to say so far, hope you keep it up!

FlowingTime
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Good english, nice flow to the story. Has that "embrace the dark" to see the light type of thing going which was a nice twist to the usual and had a really nice intro to the world. Only a few chapters so can't say much but has potential!

KamenTiger
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I fully read up to the end of Ep 2 Pt 2, and it has been such an interesting read since the prologue! I can really feel the time and the story move forward. The world has become so easy to imagine with the use of details, and the character introductions were so well done! I can already feel the sweetness and sibling complex of the twins. I'll definitely keep up with the story and I'm so excited to see Yama's journey!! 

lemuelmoo
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I like the prologue and how it transits to Chapter 1. You really gave alot of thought to your idea and I see that you did do extensive research into what you want to do.

I think a few more chapters more will give a better idea of what you want your readers to experience. Keep at it!

 

Demonicsemens
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Very immersive story, you really know how to grab the readers attention. 10/10 would read it again! I definitely would recommend others to read this also.

LolDesu
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It's been a lot to read since the beginning so I'm taking a break at Episode 5, and everything leading up to that point was really interesting. I was able to really imagine the world and the fights thanks to the time you take in detailing the fights and surroundings. There are a few grammatical errors but nothing that takes away from the story heavily. I also like the characters, my favorite being Aori right now, I can really tell she keeps everything together, excited for more!!

ArcanePunkster
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Its Okay, But I Have Issues With It...

Reviewed at: Episode 9: The Halcyon

Seeing as there's not much to go by, I can't really say much.

The grammar is good except for a few hiccups here and there, and the style is interesting.

However, I'm getting too many vibes of Naruto at the moment with the ninja clans, jutsu, hidden power within the MC, and jutsu styles I found it hard reading this and trying not to think of it as a Naruto story. At the moment the connection between the ninjas and the Demons, Goddesses and Spirits are so slim that it doesn't help distinguish this story to be its own thing.

If you release a few more chapters then maybe I'll be able to get a better understanding of this story and where you're trying to go with it.

REVIEW UPDATE

Since I got back to reading this I realized that the couple of chapters I've has given me more insight into the world-building that has been established here. As I mentioned before I felt the established lore was a thin line and I had trouble from differentiating this story from so many already popular manga/light novels out there.

However, reading the last few chapters has given me a better insight into how society and social hierarchy works here, and the more in-depth description of the Gods and Goddesses of this world and their origins allowed me to get a better sense of the world that the main cast is in. It also gave me that bit more appreciation into how much the writer truly planned out this story so far deliberately giving you hints as you continue reading.

My only problem is really the main cast of this story they're (in my opinion) your typically stereotype characters you'd see in a lot of shonen manga. This isn't a bad thing as clearly people like these tropes as they still do to this day. But, it would be nice to see a fresh light on it to see something different for a change.

This is one of those web novels you'll have to stick around and read for some time to really get something out of the story. However, I'd say the first eight chapters should be enough for any fan of this genre to pique your interest.  

Dupi
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I was just looking through stories to past the time, and I'm glad I found this gem. I like how your portrayal of the characters, the base conflicts and backgrounds for them as well. I'm interested to see how it goes from here.

Alphadragon
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 👍👍👍👍☺ nice story 

Small grammar mistakes 

Can improve plot line in beginning