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Goldie had his whole life planned out for him. He worked in his father's shop day in and day out ever since he was little. Once his father passed, he vowed to become the greatest Merchant the town of Flousshire has ever seen!

He was well on his way towards achieving his lifelong dream, when it all came crashing down. However not all personal tragedies lead to a sad ending.

His life as an NPC was over. It was time move on to bigger and better things. It was time to make a name for himself, no matter the cost.

The cover art is an edited version of a picture within the public domain.

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 I had to stop reading in chapter 1 because of your punctuation. However, I'd like to read it when it's edited. Please message me then.

Also, what's "gemeen"?

 

Examples of your punctuation style + corrected:

"He lies!", he screamed.

"He lies!" He screamed.

"What?", he asked.

"What?" he asked.

"There", he pointed.

"There," he pointed.