Growing Strong

Growing Strong

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In the world of Lenessia, your life is decided on your 18th birthday. Nobles and peasants alike wait eagerly for their special day: the day where their class is chosen.

Born to a simple family of farmers, Ian belongs to one of the lowest castes in society. His future is bleak - his father was a farmer, his grandfather was a farmer, for Lenessa's sake his whole family have been farmers for as long as they can remember. But Ian holds on to his hope, the dream that he could be one of the few who receive a heroic class and skyrocket through the echelons of society.

Fate is not so forgiving, and Ian is quickly dismissed as simply another low tier farmer. If Ian wishes to achieve his childhood dreams, then he has only one choice. Growing Strong.

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TheDangerousDino
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STYLE

Definitely has a unique structure and flow to the way it's read, sill easy to understand though

 

STORY

Whoa. It's. Awesome. I don't know how long it took to write but it's extremely solid and interesting for a story about a farmer. At this point my only complaint in this section is that I want more written ( which isn't really a complaint)

 

GRAMMAR

If there was a mistake at any point in the story I didn't catch it.

 

STORY

Predicted an out of the norm class. Didn't predict the story and substory following before and after.

 

CHARACTER

I don't really find Ian all that interesting, he reminds me a lot of common MCs like Naruto and Goku. Hard working, determined, kind of idiotic and generally positive.

N0d0ns
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Style: I am not a big fan of the style of the writing, but it does what it needs to do in an easy to understand and clear fasion. Also, try to avoid info dumps like when you were explaining the differences between the two possible areas that he could end up sailing to.

Story score: I like the premise for this story a lot. I am all for stories that take an inexperienced youth that tries to find his own path. The only thing I can really say about the story thus far is to try to set up some of the events a little better.

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

Grammar score: nothing to complain about. It is good and does not have enough mistakes to take away from the story.

Character score: character seems pretty dumb and naive right now which I like because he is literally a farm boy. Not any notable characters thus far to comment on.

Spoilers from here on out.

Some things that I don't really like about the story thus far is how strong the protag already is. The protag, with only a few weeks worth of training, not even combat related training, is capable of taking out seasoned warriors with years of combat experience and decent classes to boot.

An example is when he fought against the fire mage guardian duo. You explained how this combination of classes is one of the best combinations possible. You also went on to explain how they have spent years battling with one another so their synergy is top notch as well. I don't think that protag should have been able to defeat them, at least, not unless you are planning for the demons or whatever is going to be trying to destroy humanity is insanely strong as well. The only thing about that though is that if the demons are going to be that strong, then I really dont see humanity having much of a chance against them. 13 heros can only do so much when the rest of humanity can hardly take on a farm boy that does not even know how to fight or to properly use his powers. Even if that said farm boy has legendary powers.

I would recommend having the captain,or maybe a mercenary, be a bit of a badass and coming to save the protag at some point in that fight scene. It seems like a fair bet that if some random pirates are going to have classes that literally butcher through the other soldiers that the merchant ship would have some sort of defence against said insane pirates. With the protagonist keeping the main big bad duo occupied, you could have whatever badass you designated clean up the rest of the battle. After said badass does so he could then save the protag.

 

Spaceric
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STYLE - The style is good and is very good to remind readers or details that may have been missed like stats and stuff

STORY - EXCELLENT LOVE IT 100%

GRAMMAR - None that take away from the story

CHARACTER - Good protagonist so far, looking forward to seeing him develop

MaxOsnes
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Review as of Chapter 14

Style: No special style which works best for what I like to read. While I was reading everything flowed well and nothing felt disjointed.

Grammar: While reading I didn't notice any mistakes that distrated me from my reading.

Story: The implications of future story to come are interesting, but have yet to reach that point. So far the story has been seperated into small shorter stories which could have used a little more fleshing out. Simply put they move a little fast. Even while saying that I still enjoyed reading them.

Character: I like the main character even though he's a quintessential-

Spoiler: Spoiler

 Most of the characters could use a little more fleshing out, but it's early in the story. My only gripe is a personal one not a bad written character one which involves the main character's mother.

Spoiler: Spoiler

 Overall: I've really enjoyed what is available so far, and I can't wait for more. The unique class is interesting and I always love the parts when characters train and improve their Status Menus.

Flychiken
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I will not be suprised if this end up on the first page of rankings.  Very strong start and an intereting concept.

Some critisism: The author needs to show and not tell so much.  Sometimes, it is better to hint at something rather than just tell the reader everything, especiallly in regards to developing characters.

Guy Normus
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"Self-intelligent"

 

Honestly, what? Just think about what's wrong with that phrase; I doubt I really need to tell you. That asinine phrase is repeated seemingly dozens of times. The level of thought that went into that repeated phrase choice does a remarkably good job of indicating the quality of the novel, though, so that's nice:

 

In short, a junkfood novel. You won't remember it after reading it, but you won't get too irritated at the lack of quality as long as you don't pay too close attention to the actual content.

The prose is relatively straightforward and the vocabulary rather unvaried, but that's par for the course of junkfood novels, so not necessarily a bad thing there. The grammar's not too shabby though, so that's a plus. Nowhere near perfect, mind you, but quite good by RRL standards

The characters are... bad, frankly. Two-dimensional at best. That's about all there is to it; not a single one is memorable and even the MC reads more like a proxy for whatever shennanigans the writer feels like vicariously experiencing; I don't think he has a single character trait beyond 'wants to adventure' as of chapter 13. Most characters get a single, overt character trait, say their piece to make the scene, then the story moves on to the next stage. Couldn't tell you a single thing about the MC's family besides the facts that there are a couple siblings and his parents thought he was gonna be a farmer. That's about all there is to them, really.

The story is simply nonexistent. As I said, the story plays out in something resembling scenes, but it's told in a way that they all happen immediately sequentially. I'll elaborate (I'm using different vocations to avoid directly giving away how the story goes): So, the MC starts as a farmer and wants to be a hero, yeah? Cool! He gets his super-MC-powers from His Holiness the Writer and heads out to adven- just kidding! His parents told him he was gonna farm, so he does. Oh well, guess we'll get to watch while he explores his abilities and develops bonds with- gotcha! He's gonna go be a gardener for some old folks in an institution. Guess he's gonna be in some kind of schooling phase; neat. So he gets there and- haha! Gotcha again! He's actually a pirate!

Do you see what I'm getting at? The writer picks up a toy (setting), gives it a look-over, sees something shiny in the corner of the room, and tosses his toy aside before we even see what he can do with the thing or get to know more than one or two character names (not even the characters themselves, lol). It's like the whole story is a transition between developments, rather than development itself. No characters are significant thus far, but maybe 13 chapters isn't enough to introduce a recurring character that has a personality? I dunno.

Heck, the most recent villain's singular character trait was "insane." That's it. Nothing else. No goals, no insights, nothing. Just a bad dude who was crazy about killing, and apparently had been doing it with his pal (literally only described as 'tough;' he doesn't say a single word for the couple chapters he's in) for awhile. The villain before that? Greedy and ruthless. That's the entirety of his character; he had some money (that he'd gotten from nefarious means) and was a brute about killing and taking what he wanted. That was it; he got resolved shortly after we got that nugget of information after all his buildup and nicknames. Oh, yeah, he smiled. That was another trait (I guess?).

 

Just don't read this if you're looking for story, characters, or engaging use of the English language. Basically, read it for increasingly large numbers of stats for an empty, self-insert MC told with functional grammar.

One star for the interesting premise, half-star for passable grammar, half-star for the laughs at "self-intelligence." 

 

Celsica
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As of chapter 12. A great start, enjoyable characters, a bit of a glance of a larger plot in the background...

The author obviously has his basics down. The game elements are not too obstructive either. It's just a question of seeing if the author can maintain the quality. There's an antagonist now,  we just need side characters now hopefully.

A slight note, the MC, a farm boy, just killed quite a few people by now, but there wasnt much in terms of internal dialogue. A clear opportunity to comment and explain the MCs mindset and character missed.

Overall I hope it continues at this pace, it's great!

Minion Number Q
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Not bad, but not good either

As of chapter 15 there is nothing I can point to in the story as being outright bad. But also, there is nothing to keep my interest. The main character is bland and doesn't really have a personality. We haven't seen enough of the world itself to be interested in that. And the premise of the story is less interesting than the summary makes out.

The summary gave the idea that the main character would break conventions and become strong despite having a low farmer class. That would have been interesting, to see them find ways outside of the class /skills /stats system to become strong. 

Instead we just get a main character with an overpowered class handed to them (possibly due to divine intervention). Unfortunately that makes this story the same as many other LitRPG stories  with little substance to keep interest  

Wise old penguin
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*Picks nose* Yea it's decent

Okay, first... what's up with people picking a single tree as the cover for their novel, it even looks the same as Dr#g#nf#ll: #nch#ntm#nt and Th# Br##th #f Cr##tion. We get it you're lonely, but why'd you have to resort to greenpeace levels of subtelty?

Characters are one trick ponies.

Style is boring and VERY repetitive.

Grammar is bland and the autor invents words in a way that suggests he's got english as a second language (not really a downside, more like a nod of recognition).

Don't think too much of my review on this novel, I just skimmed it, because the cover had me asking what's up with all the trees.

Alicja
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For now at chapter 15.

 

This title is my favorite from my current library.

Since previous chater 22 days ago i was thinking about it every few days and

now that there is 15 chapter i'm so happy i decided to write review.

It's rare (my 1st review) so it show how much i love it.smile