Shattered Soul

by GhostReaper

Original HIATUS Adventure Fantasy Mystery Tragedy Female Lead High Fantasy Magic Mythos Non-Human lead Reincarnation Strong Lead
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Scorned by the humans of earth, the Shadow Walker and telekinetic Sarah Marie Johnson was executed as a traitor to the human race. After her death she meets the seraph Tavariel, who explains to her that since her birth her soul had been shattered.

The young Moon Elf princess Linea has always been different. Never as strong as her siblings, but magically gifted, she soon had to bury her hopes to become a Void Hunter. Instead focusing on a path to become a healer, she performs a ritual to strengthen the bond to her goddess. Unexpectedly her ritual is hijacked by Tavariel, who guides her to the place, where someone awaits her.

This is the story of two parts of a soul, which were never meant to be divided.

This is their journey.

 


 

Hello everyone,

this is my first attempt for a story on my own, so if you find any mistakes feel free to point them out. I have a rough outline were my story will lead, but ultimately I have not fleshed out the whole story yet.

The current release schedule is one chapter every sunday. This can subject to change and occasionally chapters can be delayed.

If you got any questions regarding my story, feel free to contact me via comments or messages.

 

WARNING:

This story is mature and is only recommended to an audience older than 18. There is tragedy involved and if you can not handle certain topics like character death, suicide, rape (or any consent-based sexual activity), racism or violence, you are advised to skip this story. There will be, however, no depictions of rape . If it should happen, it will be "off-screen".

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Chapter Name Release Date
Arc 1 - Chapter 1 - Death Shall Set You Free ago
Arc 1 - Chapter 2 - The Plea of a Princess ago
Arc 1 - Chapter 3 - The Grand Design ago
Arc 1 - Chapter 4 - Meeting a Goddess ago
Arc 1 - Chapter 5 - An Inner Dialogue ago
Arc 1 - Chapter 6 - Nora ago
Arc 1 - Chapter 7 - The Calm before the Storm ago
Arc 1 - Chapter 8 - A Trip to the Temple ago
Arc 1 - Chapter 9 - Falling Out ago
Arc 1 - Chapter 10 - Alandis ago
Arc 1 - Chapter 11 - A Feast to Remember ago
Arc 1 - Chapter 12 - Looming Shadows ago
Arc 1 - Chapter 13 - Sarah's First Story ago
Arc 1 - Chapter 14 - Call of the Void ago
Arc 1 - Chapter 15 - The Lost Countess ago
Arc 1 - Chapter 16 - War Council ago
Arc 1 - Chapter 17 - Taldirian Resolve ago
Arc 1 - Chapter 18 - A Chosen Secret ago
Arc 1 - Chapter 19 - Angel of Blades ago
Arc 1 - Chapter 20 - Desperate Measures ago
Arc 1 - Chapter 21 - Behind the Blockade ago
Arc 1 - Chapter 22 - Family Meeting ago
Arc 1- Chapter 23 - The Battle of Avandir ago
Arc 1 - Chapter 24 - Welcome to the Empire ago
Interlude 1 - Lalana ago
Arc 2 - Chapter 1 - Deception shall set you free ago
Arc 2 - Chapter 2 - Burning Revenge ago
Arc 2 - Chapter 3 - Trust ago
Arc 2 - Chapter 4 - Madame Maria's Palace ago
Arc 2 - Chapter 5 - Connections ago
Arc 2 - Chapter 6 - An Unexpected Visit ago
Arc 2 - Chapter 7 - Epiphany ago
Arc 2 - Chapter 8 - Alliance ago
Arc 2 - Chapter 9 - Reconnaissance ago
Arc 2 - Chapter 10 - Into the Arena ago
Arc 2 - Chapter 11 - An Imperial Wedding ago
Arc 2 - Chapter 12 - Defiance and Submission ago
Arc 2 - Chapter 13 - Monster Unleashed ago

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bloo233
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Awesome story, this reads a lot like an actual high fantasy story you can find in a bookstore. I could tell the effort the author put into the world building here. It's interesting to read about and it gives me the 'begining of an epic adventure' kind of feel. Only 11 chapters in, but that was enough to totally captivate me.

Grammar wise, I had no problems reading the story. Couldn't even tell that english wasn't your first language.

 

I hope to see more!

Endless Paving
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I am just a voice in your head

(Chapter 17, four-ish days per update)

A great story so far about two or more people who are the same person. They are in the same body as well, for convenience. Some words are slightly misspelled into the kind of words that actully are words despite being the weongs ones. Not all readers will notice this as much as others, and only some will really be bothered to care. The story style is a normal young adult style thriller with the sudden fantastical world, personal revalation, and ominous hordes thing. It’s not too generic since it has some interesting mind/soul finickery, but people without patience for that type of plot will have to miss out on the fun. The highest recomemdation from me is the characters, as they are very engaging and well defined for how far I am in the story already. We’ve got all the good feels: anxiety, guilt, trauma, determination, happiness. All that good stuff, not those stupid characters that never juggle their feelings and work on a one-track emotion. Dynamic feelings.

Lordmod
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Really GOOD with potential promise to reach great

As far as I have read, chapter 24, the author is really good at writing! I am especially happy, that he doesn't shy away to also include rather dark themes for fear of losing followers. To draw a realistic picture of a world in the middle ages it is only natural to also include the darkness these times consisted of.

Those things are also included in Game of Thrones, and this series is liked by many especially because the author doesn't create a rainbow world but a reality. So whoever starts reading this should also be prepared for death and that things actually can go wrong.

The story has dept, the character developement is good and the grammar is as far as I can tell almost as good as a native speaker, but since I am not one myself I am qualified to judge it. But the point is, you understand everything and can get immersed in the story.

I give it 5 stars for now, since so far it is in my opinion as good.

MaiMee
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really really good

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Nothing to write. No grammar mistakes found—though I haven't looked for it. There isn't really enough chapters to write anything concrete. I'd like to see a lesbian/yuri/GL/whatever you call it tag if the story really goes that way though. 

crusaderbond
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A good story written about my personal hell

I assume since the mc's are fragmented pieces of a soul, they always felt like something was missing or whatever. I really like the story but the thought of having to share a body with someone else gives me chills. 

 

It's very good though, give it a go!

mars
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Grammar:-

This story has wonderful grammar with barely any mistakes the few there are (hence the score) are mostly minor spelling mistakes eg using shot instead of shoot, not much else to say since it does everything else well in regards to this.

Style:-

It does well with it’s prose occasionally stumbling where it feels long winded at times and condensed in others, for the most part however it knows what it’s doing and does it well.

Characters:-

Every character shown so far has either been 3 dimensional or shows that they have depth further than what it seems from side characters to random prostitutes, they may not all be likeable but they certainly have character not to mention their own stories.

Story:-

Not much to say here it has a place where it is, it has a place where it’s going and a place where it was, there’s drama and battle, pain and hope the only negatives i have on this are where it seems that most male characters don’t have much involvement or good in them otherwise I won’t fault it for not having romance, it’s not necessary. Otherwise it just feels that there’s not much progress when it comes to the shattered soul but there is still story progression and good story at that hence it still deserves its score.

Overall just a good read, as of Arc 2 Ch9

Wille1412
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I like this novel a lot, I wouldn't say the story is amazing, but it's definitely good, and best of all, it feels fresh. I have never read a story like this before, and I must say that I am enjoying it.

Sinder
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Echoing BLOO233

Up to chapter 16, easy to read and enjoyable!