A Dungeon in Space

A Dungeon in Space

by Vorchin

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Somewhere in the vastness of space there lies a lonely world orbiting a small lonely star. On this world there lies a country known as the United States of America, and in this country there lives a lonely man. One day this man went to work as usual just like any other day, of his boring and repetitive life. However life had different plans for him that day. As this man was driving to work as per usual, there was another driver who perhaps was not quite paying attention to where he was driving, and unfortunately hit this lonely man, in this lonely world, around the small lonely star. And that was the end of the lonely man’s existence and the beginning of a new one.

Picture Taken By NASA's Spitzer Space Telescope, and is a picture of the Westerhout 5 Nebula.

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Tekknos
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 Really like the idea of a machine space dungeon. almost see it making a death star like planet(minus the big gun)(for now) with an army of ships in space. wink hint hint lol will love to see where this goes.

 

BinLox
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Pretty decent, with an interesting premise. Worth a read.

Soopersoop
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space dungeons = AWESOME dungeons

i love the idea of space dungeons as well as his machine theamed dungeon cant wait for more

Lucasnox
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Has promising premise, but quickly fails

another story where someone thought of an interesting premise and has no idea what to do with it afterwards, so many stories that start with a fun idea but it never follows through with that idea just turns generic low level royal road dungeon story that has no idea what to do with the story

 

also main character has emotions, is classic reincarnated human soul as dungeon, then spends a month unlocking the emotions it already obviously had

 

gg, author really thought that through didnt they (obvious sarcasm)