Eldritch Night

Eldritch Night

by hammbody

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

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Eldritch horrors descend from the sky to consume the world. Only a last-minute intervention by a mysterious Hegemony of Worlds saves Earth, albeit temporarily. Skills, levels, and battles with twisted monsters are part of the new reality the survivors will have to face.

Augustus Finn is a young man driving home when the new system is imposed. He is thrown directly into danger as a twist of fate places him in an area designated, by the automated systems of the Hegemony, for the containment and disposal of eldritch energy - areas also known as dungeons. Without the aid of tutorials, or the orientation areas commonly known as "newbie zones," Augustus will have to make his own way to survive in unforgiven circumstances.

He will face monsters, aliens, other humans, and his own darkness as he struggles to grow strong enough to face the countdown to the apocalypse. 

 

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Author's Note: The rewritten version of Book 1 is here: https://www.royalroadl.com/my/fiction/19458

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter One: Day Breaks, and Night Falls ago
Chapter Two: At Night Crept ago
Chapter Three: A Widow Fled ago
Chapter Four: From Looming Monarch's Dread ago
Chapter Five: Debrief ago
Chapter Six: Mind and Body ago
Chapter Seven: Daybreak ago
Chapter Eight: New Growth ago
Chapter Nine: Sticks and Stones ago
Chapter Ten: Of Class and Men ago
Chapter Eleven: All Aboard ago
Chapter Twelve: Shore Leave ago
Chapter Thirteen: Words of Blessing ago
Chapter Fourteen: Homecoming ago
Chapter Fifteen: Revelations ago
Chapter Sixteen: Night Turns to Day ago
Chapter Seventeen: Pickman’s Daughter ago
Chapter Eighteen: The Band Sets Outs ago
Chapter Nineteen: Conflict on the Bridge ago
Chapter 20: Song of Battle ago
Chapter 21: Dark Revelations ago
Chapter 22: Truth from Madness ago
Chapter 23: Banter and Bombs ago
Chapter 24: Aftermath ago
24.E ago
Chapter 25: Smoke on the Water ago
Chapter 26: So Long, and Thanks for All the Fish ago
Chapter 27: One of Many ago
Chapter 28: Descent ago
Chapter 29: Trapped ago
Chapter 30: The Fisher Man and the Sea ago
Chapter 31: Into the Fore ago
Chapter 32: Flowers of Change ago
Chapter 33: Out of the Breach ago
Update ago
Chapter 34: Isolation ago
Chapter 35: Questions ago
Chapter 36: The Fruits of Despair ago
Chapter 37: Fuel on the Fire ago
Chapter 38: Family Ties ago
Chapter 39: Eye of the Storm ago
Chapter 40: Chains that Bind ago
Chapter 41: Fruits of the Earth ago
Chapter 42: Sky Meets Earth ago
Chapter 43: Kiting with Behemoths ago
Chapter 44: A Pound of Flesh ago
Chapter 45: Growth ago
Chapter 46: Volatile Responses ago
Chapter 47: Overt Operations ago
Chapter 48: Pearls of Thought ago
48.R Not a Chapter ago
Chapter 49: Charge of the Dark Brigade ago
Chapter 50: Ave Maria ago
Chapter 51: Leveling Earth and Sky ago
Chapter 52: Apotheosis Horizon ago
52.5 ago
Chapter 53: Fingers of the Dead ago
Chapter 54: Our Lady, Who Art in Hell ago
Chapter 55: Darkness Before Dawn ago
Chapter 56: Hubris, Slayer of Gods ago
Chapter 57: Dreamscape ago
End of Book Update and Acknowledgements ago
Changelog ago
Epilogue ago
I've Been Away, but I'm Back (Not a Chapter) ago
Eldritch Night: Book Two ago
Chapter Two: Bonds of Gold ago
Chapter Three: Split Custody ago
Chapter Four: Tides ago
Chapter Five: Motion ago
Chapter Six: Shadows at Dusk ago

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Lucasnox
Overall

Now that enough chapters are out

Like a lot of stories on royal road this starts out pretty good and promising but after the initial premise its like the author has no idea what to do next and falls into all the usual bad tropes

 

thats why most reviews for stories when there are less than ten chapters tend to be very postive artificially inflating its rating and what the readers see in reviews

 

but now we start to see the slump after the initial burst of creativity, the power scales are all messed up, the MC is just stupid and not in a realistic way, plot armor and god powers abound making this your avarege Overpowered main character with no personality and suffering from everything most bad webnovels/lightnovels suffer from

earthdrake
Overall

befitting of the eldritch.

The story is nice, it took the randidly ghosthound approach mixed with a bit of cthulu to mach and created an interesting mix.

Pros: fast pacing, original-esque theme, good grammar (it gets better).

Mhe’s:
Fishing riddles and eldritch riddles: it’s a con if they end up nowhere, is a pro if well used.
Fast paced action: it’s good when is explained, not so much when is not

Cons:

Lack of detail and excess of detail: sometimes the story jumps and you end up bot lost (when climbing he eats on a cave that he never found, the battle with the octopus) other times there is just too much (the bridge battle has too much and too little for my taste).

No throttle: so from trapped in a dungeon, to climbing in somewhere, to again spider food but not, then the protectors, travelling, the town, etc. Even when the MC is safe and the pace could slow down it doesn't to keep you on your toes. IRC he stayed about 10 days (4 unconscious and 6 conscious with the protectors) however that was resumed to 2 conversations, 1 training session and the tallying scene in his spartan bedroom (about 2 chapters). 

So basically, a nice novel trying to improve, it shows promise and the author is changing, adapting and improving. My main issues arewith the first few chapters and a few scenes or choices from the mc that are questionable, some things that aren’t explained but all in all it’s a good novel and it gets better.

 

SamPenn
Overall

nice POV + Description really take me there man

the choice of 1st person and the vivid description really give me a feel of what the MC is experiencing coupled that with the "Analyze skill" give me a sense of what the main character is up against overall im really interested in what comin up ;D

Melcontent
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This is actually one of the best litrpg books on this website. I did expect a bit more horror but overall it isn't bad.

Plot: the author pulls out the apocalypse dice and rolls up lovecraft. The main character, Gus gets caught in a dungeon and then ends up fighting in the same dungeon. Add in another apocalypse on top of the first one.

Yeah, the world is ruin but it can always get worse.

The game system reminds me of a lot of So I'm a Spider, so what? Skills evolve from other skills and you can easily become god king. This is by design the monsters get weird and strong pretty early. But it doesn't feel that the characters are too strong.

I am picky about what books I read. Too many grammar errors, too much unrealistic story telling and I have to put it down. As I have read this a few chapters shy from the ends I can tell you it is worth a look at.

My main problems is that I think the author jammed a big twist and he didn't make me care or know enough about that character. Also the book is in first person perspective.

Koinzell
Overall

I don't get the appeal, the MC isn't very interesting, neither are the characters around him, the only interesting part of the story is the eldritch part

BeetleJuice
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A carbon copy of Randidly Ghosthound

This is written at the time of chapter 28 and there'll be spoilers in here up until then.

If this wasn't a different account to the guy who wrote Randidly Ghosthound (RG for short), I'd be thinking that the author was exactly the same.

Let's start off with the MC. The similarities between the two are staggering.
Both started off in a dungeon (which should be impossible in both cases). Both needed someone else to save them from it. Both then had that someone else train them, the only difference being that these guys are a faction whereas the one in RG was a single person. Both have an external force helping them out and giving them an edge over everyone else. Both also have something trying to control them (that same something probably being the reason they started out in a dungeon in the first place).

The 'system' is pretty much a carbon copy. You gain skills in exactly the same way (not that that really means anything since most litRPG fics on here are the same in that aspect). Feats here are Paths in RG. The descriptions of them are written in exactly the same style. The way to progress in Feats are exactly the same as how RG does it with Paths (when you level a skill, you get a point that you can use to put into whichever Feat you want). Even the way the MC looks and analyses Feats and chooses which ones to pick next is exactly the same as how RG's MC does it. The way the 'system' let's the MC know that something is wrong (talking about that corruption Feat) is the same as RG's method (that heretic Path). I wouldn't be surprised if the 'system' sent stuff to take out the MC because of that corruption the same way RG's 'system' did because of heretic.

The 'bad guy' plot is different though. The 'bad guy' wants to destroy the world and the 'system' is there so you can level up and take it out and... oh no, wait, that sounds familiar too...

Even the writing style is almost identical to RG's author's writing style, that being the reason why I'd think the author is exactly the same if this wasn't a different account. This is why the style and grammar score are so high because they're both well done. The characters around the MC are all authentic and don't revolve around him, there's a nice mix between humor and seriousness and not much, if any, spelling or grammar errors.

The story and character score are so low because they're basically a copy-paste of Randidly Ghosthound, just with a bunch of renaiming.

In summary: if you want a few extra Randidly Ghosthound chapters every week, then this is for you.

Jknott
Overall

The system reminds me of the system in legend of randidly ghosthound. The opening is fairly similar. Sadly i lost interest in the book.

rctsj
Overall

Made me write a review, so ehh

This fic reeks of impatience and wanting to get to the good bits story-wise as quick as as possible. It could use an additional 5 chapters of length just focussing on characters and their thoughts to properly make them characters rather than what they are now. It feels like you want the story to be similar to a puddles' storyline, but chomping at theb it left you making jumps progression-wise that I consider to be unwise. 

cheers mate

DrBuller
Overall

This is a story with mention of themes some might find a bit disturbing. Which is fair, seeing as not everything made sense. Parts are closer to rants for me, and the names did make my brain hurt. Not because they had any kind of energy or anything. I just had a hard time figuring how to pronounce them.  +1 for that though.

Story is good yet I feel no need to say that. Most should have known that already. 5/5

TyTheAussie
Overall

My only critique , I want to read book 2 , and I have been waiting over a year :P 
Hopefully the author will start writing book 2 of the series again soon .
But I am no longer hopeful :P 
But you never know. With COVID keeping everyone indoors, it may be the perfect time to write again.