Eldritch Night

by hammbody

Original HIATUS Adventure Fantasy Horror Grimdark LitRPG Magic
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

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Eldritch horrors descend from the sky to consume the world. Only a last-minute intervention by a mysterious Hegemony of Worlds saves Earth, albeit temporarily. Skills, levels, and battles with twisted monsters are part of the new reality the survivors will have to face.

Augustus Finn is a young man driving home when the new system is imposed. He is thrown directly into danger as a twist of fate places him in an area designated, by the automated systems of the Hegemony, for the containment and disposal of eldritch energy - areas also known as dungeons. Without the aid of tutorials, or the orientation areas commonly known as "newbie zones," Augustus will have to make his own way to survive in unforgiven circumstances.

He will face monsters, aliens, other humans, and his own darkness as he struggles to grow strong enough to face the countdown to the apocalypse. 

 

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Author's Note: The rewritten version of Book 1 is here: https://www.royalroadl.com/my/fiction/19458

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter One: Day Breaks, and Night Falls ago
Chapter Two: At Night Crept ago
Chapter Three: A Widow Fled ago
Chapter Four: From Looming Monarch's Dread ago
Chapter Five: Debrief ago
Chapter Six: Mind and Body ago
Chapter Seven: Daybreak ago
Chapter Eight: New Growth ago
Chapter Nine: Sticks and Stones ago
Chapter Ten: Of Class and Men ago
Chapter Eleven: All Aboard ago
Chapter Twelve: Shore Leave ago
Chapter Thirteen: Words of Blessing ago
Chapter Fourteen: Homecoming ago
Chapter Fifteen: Revelations ago
Chapter Sixteen: Night Turns to Day ago
Chapter Seventeen: Pickman’s Daughter ago
Chapter Eighteen: The Band Sets Outs ago
Chapter Nineteen: Conflict on the Bridge ago
Chapter 20: Song of Battle ago
Chapter 21: Dark Revelations ago
Chapter 22: Truth from Madness ago
Chapter 23: Banter and Bombs ago
Chapter 24: Aftermath ago
24.E ago
Chapter 25: Smoke on the Water ago
Chapter 26: So Long, and Thanks for All the Fish ago
Chapter 27: One of Many ago
Chapter 28: Descent ago
Chapter 29: Trapped ago
Chapter 30: The Fisher Man and the Sea ago
Chapter 31: Into the Fore ago
Chapter 32: Flowers of Change ago
Chapter 33: Out of the Breach ago
Update ago
Chapter 34: Isolation ago
Chapter 35: Questions ago
Chapter 36: The Fruits of Despair ago
Chapter 37: Fuel on the Fire ago
Chapter 38: Family Ties ago
Chapter 39: Eye of the Storm ago
Chapter 40: Chains that Bind ago
Chapter 41: Fruits of the Earth ago
Chapter 42: Sky Meets Earth ago
Chapter 43: Kiting with Behemoths ago
Chapter 44: A Pound of Flesh ago
Chapter 45: Growth ago
Chapter 46: Volatile Responses ago
Chapter 47: Overt Operations ago
Chapter 48: Pearls of Thought ago
48.R Not a Chapter ago
Chapter 49: Charge of the Dark Brigade ago
Chapter 50: Ave Maria ago
Chapter 51: Leveling Earth and Sky ago
Chapter 52: Apotheosis Horizon ago
52.5 ago
Chapter 53: Fingers of the Dead ago
Chapter 54: Our Lady, Who Art in Hell ago
Chapter 55: Darkness Before Dawn ago
Chapter 56: Hubris, Slayer of Gods ago
Chapter 57: Dreamscape ago
End of Book Update and Acknowledgements ago
Changelog ago
Epilogue ago
I've Been Away, but I'm Back (Not a Chapter) ago
Eldritch Night: Book Two ago
Chapter Two: Bonds of Gold ago
Chapter Three: Split Custody ago
Chapter Four: Tides ago
Chapter Five: Motion ago
Chapter Six: Shadows at Dusk ago

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knightenemy
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I read until my eyes bled and my girlfriend broke up with me. I joined up with a bunch of my fellow fans in a small coastal village where we dressed in robes and forcibly spread the good word of the Eldrich Night. Some of my fellows grew strange mutations such as tentacle or fish faces or odd limb replacements after successfully chanting Ph'nglui mglw'nafh Cthulhu R'lyeh wgah'nagl fhtagn to celebrate our new converts. In other words I think I have accidentally become a servant of the great ones after reading this novel. I consider this story a great success for the great ones and an example of a glimpse into the great truths of existence.

TheGreatOne
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Seriously, give this a try- you won’t regret it

I’ll start off by saying that I’ve read so many lit-RPGs on this site that I’m quite tired of them, but this story’s summary managed to catch my interest anyway, so I gave it a try. I don’t regret it.

Style- Very well written story with vivid descriptions that immerse you into the MC’s perspective. I feel like the great style of this story alone gives this novel a major edge above other lit-RPGs. 

Story- Obviously writing a lit-RPG on RoyalRoadL and staying original at the same time is near impossible, so I won’t fault this story for giving off Change: New World vibes towards the beginning. Actually that’s probably a good thing, now that I think about it. Regardless, the story starts off quite entertaining, drags a bit around chapters 3 and 4(at least comparing to its own immediate start), and takes off faster than a rocket after that. As of this review, chapter 6 is the one most recently released, and I kid you not: if the story continues like this, it will become one of the best rated on this site, hands down.

Grammar- Not much to say here. I didn’t see any grammar errors so far and the story is very easy to read.

Character- All the characters feel real, fleshed out, and interesting in general. However, there are some moments where I couldn’t relate with the MC or felt that the interactions between characters could have been better. 

Overall, if someone who sick and tired of this genre(me) is looking forward to reading this story to the end, then most likely you will enjoy it a lot. You won’t regret checking out this story.

God_is_Good
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Absolutely wonderful, fast-paced and entertaining

This story is a rollercoaster ride of adventure, danger, and suspense, and had me on the edge of my seat for every word.  It follows a boy named Gus (Augustus) as he navigates a game style world and fights for his own life.

The style is fresh and original, although a lot of times the pace was a little too fast and I felt like you needed to step back and go into a lot more fleshing out of the characters, the setting, and the plot.  Your descriptions were really good, but I think that if you took more time to focus on the characters and what you are bringing out of them in each scene, it would make your writing a lot stronger.

The grammar is fine, although I try not to judge based on that.  It's far better than most grammar on this site, and I rarely saw mistakes.

The story itself is my favorite part.  It's really gripping and suspenseful, making me want to cling to every word and find out for myself what is going on and what is going to happen next.  The plot is amazing, and the story is fresh and original despite being a very common genre.  I look forward to continuing reading the next chapters and seeing for myself what happens next.  

The characters could use a little fleshing out- there were times where Gus's behavior felt a little irrational and wasn't really backed up.  But he is an extremely unique character who is not in any way OP, who has quirks and flaws just like anyone else, which I greatly admire and commend the author for.  

n0x
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Good switch on a nice theme

So, another world is invaded by a game system and the MC starts of in a dungeon.

As a nice switch, the MC is neither caught up in the dungeon nor clears it, but leaves and starts of closish to everybody else.

It’s a slightly overdue take on the ghost hound, new world etc theme, that I really like.

Solid English and story telling so far. 

I’m quite excited to see some world building and more explanations on the system. Maybe see some characters, but its still early. The build up seems nicely paced, it could be a little slower, but that’s just my preference (and hope to avoid incredibly OP MCs for as long as possible :)).

Keep up the good work, oh great author sama. This feels like I’ll enjoy it, for as long as it lasts.

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PKondrat
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Definitely one of the top new novels on RR.

Great novel so far. The world is your typical "real world is turned into a game world" scenario. Or at least a world with game like elements such as levels and status screens. Where the author seems to subvert the trope is by adding elements of sci-fi and and horror.

The MC seems real and consistent and is in no way OP. I hope it stays that way.

I don' think the writing is perfect but I didn't catch any errors. 

An over all great work, and I hope to see it trending.

Note: I wrote this review at chapter 4. The novel is up to 11 chapters now and it has gotten even better. It has also gone in a completely different direction than I thought. It is nice to be surprised.

A small criticism, the first few chapters, everyting until after the BMS feels like prologue. 

Zedred
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Eldritch done right

The story follows the adventures of Gus, a man who when the apocalypse started, had the bad luck of seeing the horror that is an eldritch God.

The style is good, with descriptions of places and emotions that manage to immerse you in the story, better than most other stories out there. 

The story itself isn't the most original but managed to stand out because of not having an unnecessary overpowered class or cheat for it's MC, besides it also manages to portrait eldritch beings as that, not just mass of tentacles, but abominations. 

The grammar is very good, I haven't seen any obvious error. 

The characters feel "real" And aren't just there for the MC but have their own motivation and Personalities, bonus points for not having the MC being an edgy teenager or master strategist, and for making a true eldritch mage. 

Aapjuh
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didn't get me hooked, its a log.

i'm leaving the story now that i read through all available (31ch), the story doesn't manage to get me hooked, alot of it is a games combatlog and the mc is a little to much center of the universe(s).

the story side of this story is lacking, the captain and pat don't question finn about his time among pacekeepers getting a valuable human pov about would-be-allies, we see nor hear of interactions from the population toward the strange blue alien, no stoll through the compound to see how the population's daily lives are like, etc.
its a interaction log, e.g its feels like this: 13 apr 2018 11:45, asked pat about friends and family | 13 apr 2018 15:20, pat returns with a titbit of info | 13 apr 2018 19:30, man send by pat tells titbit of info. etc.
we basicly jump from scene to scene in order to continue the skill-log, e.g.
minor-interaction (20 words or less) > scenery change (20 words or less) > skill-log info dump (remaining chapter) > minor-interaction (20 words or less) > scenery change (20 words or less) > skill-log info dump (remaining chapter) AKA (meeting captain > move inside tiny room > skills and stuff > tiller comes > move to tiller office > skill and stuff)

the story elements that we do get seem to rate humanity way to high in the grand scheme.
its quite easy to imagine this system as a huge and complex structure, countless levels, paths, combination, deviations etc. yet its writen a little shortsighted, if you can imagine that then you should be able to imagine that any aspect of humanity is nowhere near top of the totempole. so howcome anything that is far above humanity has any interest in a microbe called finn.

his 'skipped tutorial' gimmick is flawed as said before, the system is huge and has power beyond imaginable for humans, yet the system overlooked a lifeform that started inside a dungeon, yes but you missed the part where the dungeon is a quarintine zone bla bla, yet the system functions inside of it, can give skills and info(analyze) to finn while hes inside? but couldn't give the tutorial somehow?

also a spider-monster of level 24, the product of millions of year of evolution, who lives and dies by its skill in venom-spray, is unable to kill a lvl 1 human with countless of venom sprays, yet said human learns the skill and facemelt monsters before lvl 6 relatively easy with single use.

Bluemanar88
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This book is recommend to all members and beyond

I'm goig to start by saying that this is one pretty good book one of the books that i regret not having an infinit number of chapters to read from its just that much of an iteresting story. Hammbody (the author) did one good job developing a main character although somtimes rather emotionless, but thats to be expected of a man on the verge of becoming crazy, (at least thats the way i see him, as a broken man) a man that has yet to fully become awar of the situation he is in that he constantly distracts himself from the bizarre earth that now exists.

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

IronMaiden
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Ground Floor of Something Great

I found this novel on Wattpad (where I find lots of guilty pleasures), but the author seems to have stopped posting there. I was very pleased to find that Hammbody had a lot more chapters on this site and I've binged them all within the last couple days. I actually hadn't even heard of this site until recently, but I can't wait to get my eyes on all of the other goodies on here.

I've messaged the author a few times on the aforementioned other site, and he is very pleasant and I can tell that he takes feedback and is trying to grow and most importantly seems to be having fun with his writing. Eldritch Night is just that, a fun romp that I can't put down.

Sometimes something just vibes with you, like it was targeted right at my brain. This is one such story.

Even better, the novel seems to be improving as I go along. The auther really has true talent, and I feel like I'm getting in on the ground floor of something great. I'm actually hoping he publishes so I can throw some money his way. HB, I hope you keep writing, and maybe even tries new stories in the future.

Mechagaston
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Similar to Other Stories But Stilk Great

Let get this out of the way quickly. There are a lot of similarities between this story and the stories Randidly Ghosthound and The New World. That however is not a bad thing. The stories all have a well written sustem that uses paths. They have strong fairly inteligent main characters that end up starting in dungeons. Then again how many stories out there that involve people being summoned into other worlds with a cheat skill. What I see this all as is a new sub genre of litrpg. If Hammboy just made another run of the mill isekai novel no one would accuse him of copying. 

 

This is a well written post apocalypse litrp. It is not perfect but I still love it.