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A crew of 5 aboard a spaceship bound for home.
With 72 hours until earth, the crew receives their final message: "We are very sorry to hear about the death of your crewmate. Their name shall be recorded in our halls, rest assured, and they will get proper respect.”

Together, ALL 5 receive the message.

A lot can happen in 72 Hours...

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Hey guys, new author here. I plan to release 1-2 chapters a week, and I'd welcome any feedback you could give me! And sorry about the size of the first few chapters- my word length will try not to go below at least 2k after chapter 2!

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AndrewIsntCool
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Story - 5 People on a spaceship, 3 days before arriving back at Earth, get a message offering condolences for the dead crewmate. All of the people onboard are alive and healthy. Weekly updates follow Ollie as he tries to uncover the mystery.

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An interesting plot, and great start

Reviewing as of chapter 2.

The premise is a little different to what I usually see her on royal road - and I'll be interested to see how the author takes it. Grammar is pretty good, and hopefully we will see some more development of the characters at a later stage. Good luck, I'll look forward to seeing more! 

LiterallyALemon
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First, the Plot

The plot centers around a single protagonist who is trapped on board a spaceship with 4 other crew members. When one of them is announced dead, and all people seemingly alive, the crew starts to suspect each other. 

Characters

Overall, the characters are fairly faithful to their introduced personalities. However, our MC does undergo a bit of a change (for a valid reason), and in my opinion his new personality seems more like a way for the author to make him not as much of the bland person he was before. 

Grammar

Grammar is fairly consistent, quite high quality in comparison to other works on the site. 

 

The story does seem to be drawing to a close quite soon- So perhaps all those readers who want to read something ongoing for a long time might not want to start this. But if you're up for a fairly quick read, with a somewhat decent plot, then I can reccomend this

LightningShadow7
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This story is very good! Not a lot of writers go for the mystery type of story but this one really excecutes it in a great way. There's only minor issues with grammar and the story seems at a bit of a fast pace with Mason dying really early and a somewhat weird reaction from Oliver about his best friend he knew for forever's death. The somewhat fast pace is a bit of an issue but otherwise I really enjoyed this story, I can't wait for it to finish

kungfujasper3526
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interesting premise and suprises all around.