Azarinth Healer

There is no crisis to be resolved, the mc is op but not to the point where she will have to step forward to save the world. This is more the easygoing, slice of life of a battle-junkie grinding out her skills and levels from the system.

I actually prefer stories that are just about batttle junkies (or other eccentrics like crafting-maniacs or mad-scientist), which this story seems to be. It;s not a tense story about a hero with the weight of the world on thier shoulders, not about offending young masters and then exterminating their clan, not about facing the entire world. Its not just a humourous slice of life without any action either, though I find it funny.

This is the simple adventure of a slightly op battle-junkie type girl. The fighting scenes are great and entertaining. The slice of life is light, funny and refreshing. The system is grindy, straightforward and(for her)power progressive(fast).

Edit(36 chapter): Changed score after reading detailed reviews abit(especially oinos and ninetails). Though I have a different view on scoring, the minor errors are there, though not very impactful to the quality of the work and are becoming rarer. MC will hopefully pick up interesting long-term companions/side characters soon.

Edit: I think I'm kinda dumb to just realise she has a job that treats magic like qi. She literal has most the skills qi cultivators do.

Fuck off mate this is better than like 98% of everything on RR.

Competantly written, little to no mistakes, characters thatr have CHARACTER!!(something all too rare on RR) and pretty good world building (show not tell , no aweful word-wall of exposition) MC not too over/underpowered has a cool "special" gimmiky thing but the way she gets powerful with that is with hard work not handouts, and even then, any fights that are given a bit of detail are fairly close and downright brutal.

8/10 fuck you author, this is something special and you know it.

Pretty damn good. Read it.

I’ll go through the points then:

Style is food with lots of description and nice system for the stats. Though I’m still not sure why this is a score as every book is different and every author writes differently, you just get used to it. Though I suppose different styles can work better for different genres. This works but it’s nothing special.

Story is okay but I’m really not that picky. The world is interesting though and has nice twists here and there. Otherwise it’s more of the normal litrpg stuff; fight, level, fight, level. At least the fighting is interesting as the mc isn’t op.

Grammar leaves much to be desired for me as I’m a slight grammar nazi, (I at least try not to bother people with it!) but it’s leagues above the worst I've read. (Where I literally find myself recreating the sentences in my head because it’s so terrible) This doesn’t really matter as much as one might think, as your brain itself is excellent at not caring. Once you’re in the reading groove you stop noticing it.

The characters then. The mc is interesting and unlike other books I’ve read, where it tells you how the mc has progressed and developed on a mental level, this one does so much less and leaves many things unsaid. You spot them if you read closely however as they are often told through character description and actions. The mc herself is one of the better and more interesting I’ve seen but mostly it’s how the character progression is done that I like it so much. The humor is olso good.

It's absolutely wonderful, I love the idea of warrior healers, and I keep imagining a story on it and then BAM I found this brilliant depiction of what a unique warrior healer would be like. The humurous tone throughout the story also makes it easy to read, and I'm someone who like skipping over the more boring descriptors, but the author just keeps things interesting throughout - love it!

I like this one quite a bit.  Keep writing and I will follow along. Thanks for bring brave enough to put your book out there.

Review as of chapter 22.

First of all let me say this: the novel is fun, and it doesn't surprise me that it got so many positive reviews from RRL readers. If you want a fun LitRPG with a good power trip with a female protagonist who is a bit of a battle junkie, throw yourself at this fiction, you will not be disappointed. Hell, it even has a training montage or two.

Now, for a more in-depht analysis.

Style

The style is the main issue with this fiction. The story is told from a third person limited point of view, which is a good choice by itself but starts with a present tense narration, which should be better left in scripts or videogames and not used in a fiction.

The narration at one point shifts from present tense to past tense, making the reader think the author decided to change their style. This is apparently not the case as we soon see the present tense narration resurfacing again.

At first I thought this mishmash of tenses was deliberate and used to slow down the narration during moments with little to no tension and to give a fast pace to action scenes, but this doesn't seem to be the case and the author only appears unable to choose a tense and stick with it.

Other issues with the style of the fictions are its paragraphs, which sometimes seem to be divided in a completely random way, often even having dialogue from two different characters in the same paragraph, and its POV shifts from a character to another, which, while done relatively well, tend to happen in the middle of action, breaking the flow of narration.

Another smaller thing I’d like to note is that the notifications of the system are shown as thoughts, sometimes inside a paragraph, which some people who are used to tables and announcements in bold might not like.

The pace of the story is really fast, even a bit too fast at times, but it is not really an issue.

Story

There isn’t really a lot saying regarding the story, as many fictions on this site and many Japanese webnovels, the story practically consists of random events thrown one after the other at our protagonist and we’re only seeing glimpses of something that could be called a story with the introduction of a possible antagonist many chapters into the story.

Some people like this kind of novels, some don’t, but they tend to be really appreciated on RRL and I personally like them too. Still, in the absence of an actual, apparent, plot, I can’t give more than 3 stars to this section despite the fact that I personally like it.

Grammar

The grammar is average for RRL or a bit above. There are good sections of the story that seem completely free of mistakes and others that are a purpurrì of glaring mistakes.

The most common mistakes are the absence of punctuation or its wrong use, the occasional shift in tense in the middle of a sentence, the switching of possessive pronouns with pronouns+verbs (its/it’s for example), this later case is actually less common than many other novels though so, if that’s what triggers you, you can read somewhat safely.

Another mistake I noticed a couple of times was the mix-up of singulars and plurals, but this happened, as I said, only a couple of times.

Characters

The main character is pretty well made, and we see in her some growth too, mainly in her adapting to the new world and the death of people in front of her. Her wanting to become a doctor is never mentioned during the story after the first time though, and it seems that the convictions that might pushed her down that path played no role at all in either her being a healer or adapting to death.

Still, there is some growth, and the reader feels like they know the main character well after some chapters, though the fast pace of the novel makes it impossible for her growth to be shown more in-depth.

As for the other characters, it’s a bit difficult to judge and they are honestly the main reason for this score, as we see a multitude of characters popping in and out of the narration without any of them becoming a true side character, or even a recurring one, making it impossible to flesh them out well.

Conclusions

The fiction itself is pretty enjoyable but it needs a lot of work, mainly in its style.

For the author: I hope this review hasn’t demoralized you and that it will instead help you improve your writing. I have bookmarked the fiction and I’m looking forward to editing this review once your writing improves.

 This story is very engaging to read, and has that special "thing", which makes you enjoy it. At the time of writing it is the story on this site that I follow the closest.

Grammar

This is the main problem of the story early on. There are a decent amount of sentences which have sentence structure problems. This makes the reader stumble over them and spend time thinking of what those sentenses were supposed to mean, thereby breaking the flow of the story. The amount of these problems have been steadily descreasing, and as of the latest chapter at the time of writing (23) the problems herein have become insignificant. The grammar rating mainly reflect the initial hurtle of grammar that one needs to pass as a reader.

Style

Similar to the grammar, there are also some problems with the style. The use of present tense have created some very ackward sentenses. Furthermore there is no clear destinction of who is speaking during dialoges, which can make it a mess to figure out who really said what. The first of these problems have been getting better, and I havent seen these ackward sentences in the last few chapters. The dialoge problems are still present at the time of writing. On the good side, the action sence are well balanced out, and neither feels way to drawn out or unengaging.

Story

The story is quite engaging, and is currently powered mainly by exploration and growth. This means that world building, combat, gaining more power, character interactions, going new places and such have been the main things to drive the story. It will be interesting to see how the story develops in the long term.

As for the tempo of the story, it is slighly on the faster side, without the feeling of not having spent enough time on each element. The exception to this is the growth of power, which have been ramping up rather quickly, to the point where some oppotunity for relishing in the gains have been missed out on. This doesnt mean that the story makes no use of such oppotunities, it just means that one could have put more in there, at least in terms of the power graph.

The story also manages to strike a good balance between different sections of the story, and vary them often enough that one does not end up being tired of too much of the same. This is otherwise a trap that many stories can easily fall into, and it is one of the keys to increase the overall quality of a story.

Characters

The quality of the characters in this story can be roughly put into two catagories: Thought out characters, and poor characters. There is rather a lot of characters in the first catagory, especially for a story on this site, so that is very positive, though there are still a few odd balls that prevents the character score from being even higher.

The main character is fairly believable. Some of her more odd character traits is shown in the prelude (the before transported/earth section), which makes her acting such ways very self-consistent, especially when such traits are rare in someone living in the well developed part of earth. There are several scenes where one would normally expect a story to ignore something, or just throw an offhand remark at it, while this story does a full on stop and have her doing something that at first seeems abnormal, but once one think of what a real person would do in such a situation makes a lot more sense than what you would normally read in a story.

 There are also other characters that are well thought out, and there are several places where subtle interactions takes place, showing us that they are "real" people, with feelings that the characters try to be mindfull of, and not in the brute "how about X", "uh this bad thing", "sorry I asked about X". There are also a lot of characters which have been given some personality, even though we only spend a relatively short time with them.

As for the poor characters, we are on the level of shopkeepers that are unexpectedly nice, and a few other small odd actions that seem to stand a bit out.

Overall

The story is a good read. It can be a little tough to get through the early problems with style and grammar, but most of those problems ease up after 10-20 chapters, and going through it could definitly be considered worth it.

This story takes aspects from the litrpg genre, things similar to the standard status and setting but gives a great personal twist on it without being overly complex or too simple. Making this a nice new iteration on the genre and a very good ready if you like it.

The writer so far has made the characters believable and decently personality rich with the only semi-flaw, if you could call it that, being that the protagonist has a wide and varied emotional spectrum, which I find a nice addition to any character.

The story is far greater than most in regards to grammar, spelling and style than 99% of other fictions on this site, having little to no noticeable mistakes.

TL;DR : If you like LITRPG, status screens and good story and power progression, read this now.

This story deserves to be on the first page! I love everything about! Don't you ever stop writing!

I honestly would not have read this wonderful little bit of literature if it wasn't for the cover art. Honestly, I saw the cover art one day and was just thinking, 'Damn, now I've got to read it'. I'm glad I did. A fair bit of Fantasy LitRPG, darkish humor, and a somewhat go with the flow kind of story. It almost feels like a Dungeons and Dragons Free-Will campaign where anything goes as long as the dice say it's good.