Legend of the Empyrean Blacksmith
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LEGEND OF THE EMPYREAN BLACKSMITH
After being kicked out of the orphanage due to turning 15, Lino finds himself stranded on the streets. With motivation to become the best blacksmith in the world, he seeks to become a disciple of the Bridge Village's best blacksmiths, only to be kicked out of all of them. He soon finds himself roaming the streets aimlessly on an empty stomach, jobless, peniless and homeless. After hiding himself in an alley when night fell, the reality finally catches up to him - he was truly alone.
Yet, morning come, he is greeted by a knee of an old man who, after beating him for sleeping in the old man's 'backyard', takes him in. Finally being given a helping hand, he clutches tightly onto it, becoming the old man's disciple and learning the ways of the crafting, naturally while flirting with the old man's wife in his free time.
Little did he know that this encounter would spark an adventure that would take him to the heights he never believed even existed, and would let him meet people he'd only read about in the books. It's a story of Lino - an orphaned child who would come to be known by many names, but only one that he'd ever truly accept: Empyrean Blacksmith.
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The story has plenty going for it, but too much of it is disjointed, chaotic, or downright pointless for me to care enough to continue reading where I left off (Chapter 47).
There are issues, plain and simple. The author is trying to go with a mashup between xianxia (or fantasy wuxia, w/e) and LitRPG. I get why, as I'm quite a fan of the latter, and a number of series are doing it well, like the Ten Realms series by Michael Chatfield. However, issues arise in the form of people being 'level x'. What does this entail? How does your level increase? There are no quantified gains, at least, not in the sense that you're shown how the MC improves at every level-up. I haven't a clue what the difference between a level 1 and a level 9 is, for example, which is exactly what LitRPG and its quantifying style is useful for. Weapons and armor have damage and defense stats, but there's no information about people's health, just their defense. People get stabbed, people get wounded. No damage indicators, no information about how much damage was negated by defense, no indication of how much more damage they can take, etc. In other words, there is literally no point to any of those statistics. For the other weapons stats, just people sticking their qi in an item and giving a brief description would be more than enough. As it stands right now there is literally zero reason for the LitRPG style. It really feels like some of those stories that add a couple of tables just so they can call it LitRPG and get a quick cash grab on the LitRPG hypetrain.
The xianxia is done well, insofar as I can be a judge of that. There's your typical various stages of qi gathering, breaking through, warring sects, etc. All of the elements are fairly cookie-cutter material, but they're put together in a fun way.
The story is certainly challenging to get past the beginning, but a couple dozen chapters in it does finally get to the point where you're starting to see the bigger picture, which seems interesting enough. I'm still a bit curious as to what will eventually happen, how the world will grow, whether the two childhood friends will meet, etc. But it all falls rather short due to the sections of heavy exposition. I'm not a fan of the saying 'show, don't tell', because it insinuates that telling is bad, which it isn't. So long as done in moderation, exposition can be a great addition to a story. In the case of this story, however, it often overwhelms the reader's flow, forcing them to stop and make a choice: take the time to read it all, or skim/skip and get back into it. Either makes you feel annoyed, particularly when the whole scene described leads up to a couple of people, for whom you have zero reference, talking about stuff that sets things up for the future. It's very frustrating to read and most of my time in the last couple chapters was spent skimming because I couldn't bring up the energy to bother reading everything properly. Either read in moderation, or accept the fact that you'll be needing quite a bit of patience.
There are also some elements that I straight-up disliked, chief among which the nigh-visible plot armour. Another thing that irked me considerably was the fact that he can pull the most amazing shit out of his ass with basically zero logical reason through blacksmithing. The first thing he makes was Unique, which was later explained away that he had been thinking about the design for half a year or some such and the stuff that he made thereafter was mediocre because he of course couldn't always make such amazing stuff. Yet, lo and behold he manages to make exactly what the situation required in a cave, with nothing but some stuff he found in a forest, a fire, and his hands. I mean.. I get it; it's xianxia, but come on.. It's not as if his cultivation method improves his blacksmithing talent. It just gives him some options. He's been working on the stuff for half a year; he should still suck major donkey balls. Ah well.
For the most part it is absolutely legible. However, there are issues here as well.
Chief among which are the frequent lack of articles (the/a/an), which aren't required for understanding, but which will interrupt the reader's flow if they're not there. An example of the issue: "Blacksmith picked up sword he just made and looked at it carefully". You get what is being said, but it doesn't feel right.
Another issue comes in the form of incorrect vocabulary. At times, words are chosen that feel like they're picked from a thesaurus. Sure, they're synonymous to an extent, but that doesn't mean they work in the same contexts. Again, you get what is being said, but it forces you to either skip it or interrupt your reading to take a moment to understand what is being said.
There are certainly more detailed and/or singular issues, but the two above are the most glaring. If you can live with that and read it without issues, go for it.
The MC is .. a colourful figure. I get what the author tried/is trying to do, as the MC is portrayed as a betrayed, beaten, and downtrodden person who managed to maintain their determination and strength of will, but whose interpersonal skills are centered around biting at the hands of those who extend a hand towards him. I get it. But the simple matter remains: the MC is a cunt of such utter magnitudes, that in a world where people see their pride and reputation as the main resources and strength rules, he shouldn't have survived this long what with how often he offends people (almost literally everyone he encounters, barring a few). It makes it very challenging to even begin to relate the MC, let alone care about him. I honestly care more about his cultivation method than about the MC himself. He's simply a douche-canoe of the highest order. Some people may consider his comments and whatnot to be funny, but to me it's just frustrating and unbelievable.
Moreover, xianxia (and wuxia) often come with a very strict set of rules when it comes to communication between the characters. Usually they come in all sorts of displays of respect and whatnot, and otherwise offense is taken and the score has to be settled through some form of punishment or duel (to the death). This behaviour is shown in most characters, though not always very strongly, but most characters follow a fairly predictable type of behaviour. Insert: MC. Most chaotic and random fucker in all of existence. It is simply incongruent: he doesn't fit in that world. Any and all of his interactions feel off and odd, which makes it a challenge to keep reading. Most of the side characters are just fine, although most remain fairly one-dimensional and without depth. Even the most important secondary characters (Ella and Eggor) are .. fairly bland, really.
If randomness and chaos are up your alley, go for it. You will enjoy it and probably even love it. If you're a more sensible person.. might wanna skip.
Ultimately, however, it has to be said that the MC was growing in positive ways, we were learning more about essentially everything, and the story was becoming more interesting. Unfortunately, I found myself looking at the title in my bookmarks and just couldn't be bothered to continue reading.
I could go on a rant of everything this story does wrong, but I won't.
Suffice to say its readable, if shallow, I'm not really one for negative reviews but this story acconplished in making one of the MCs I couldn't help but hate (not the good kinda of hate) he's chaotic, incongruous, unlikeable, has plot armor for dayz and is the epitome of a shounen MC taken to the extreme, while being a senseless hypocritical muderhobo who doesn't think things through, is often contradictory to his own beliefs and previous actions AND a daft cunt who thinks he's a funny guy.
Overal the premise seens interesting, the execution is subpar, the telling is often confusing, and the MC doesn't fit the world he's in.
I might be exarcebating my dislike and nitpicking cus I hate the MC's guts, but give it a shot, it must be ongoing because some people like it, maybe you're one of them, I'm sure as hell not.
At first I thought that this was another bad translation of a Chinese web novel. Turns out its not. The author thinks that he's more clever than he is, and kills off characters ,literally, without warning. This story had potential, but it was squandered by dick jokes and modern idioms. Spelling and grammar mistakes abound, and the main character starts as an unsufferably arrogant beggar with no redeeming qualities.
When the MC gets taken in by a family he does nothing but insult and berate them. That's from the first page. The only reason I stuck with it as long as I did was hoping the author would refine his technique and characters. Sadly he didn't.
The author has a lot of trouble with distinguishing between tenses.when narrarating you should almost always use the past tense. "He hasn't been" should be "He hadn't been."
The bottom line is that if you want to explore a beta male power trip, then this is the novel for you. A constantly mocking MC that doesn't respect the friends he has, yet inexplicably (literally) talented.
Hell with talent this low anyone could get published on Amazon just by sneezing. Other than "Mother of Learning", "Jack of All" and "The Hunter Trilogy" this site wouldn't be worth much.
Frankly it pisses me off that I need to write 200 words about one of the crappiest novels from one of the most immature authors I've ever read. I mean what woman in a supposed fantasy world would refer to her orifices as her 'holes'. It's immature and pathetic. Let's call a dragon "dude" and "bro". Way to shatter the suspension of disbelief, Asshat.
Just skip it.
there is to much of it trying to be like a comedy. It goes from an action genre to comedy genre like a bad c grade movie
So nany things are random and stupid, and even the MC himself is the result of mostly luck in early chapters.
But you have the story of one person. You don't have the story of some random guy, you have the story of one who gathered up coincidences and built himself through sheer will.
Many things seem to make the MC overpowered, but each has its own drawbacks and consequences.
You understand from early on, that the MC won't end up somewhere small, and the story is rather open about it.
The MC is shown not to be the greatest, nor the only one that treaded this path.
Heck! His powers literally almost were his downfall several times.
You see logical reactions (aside from the MC fooling around) and almost never a one-dimensional character.
I will admit some topics weren't approached that well, but the story was thrilling enough to forgive those "mistakes" and move on.
Lastly, another thing that I really liked about this story, even when his blacksmithing grows to be secondary. It is researched at least somewhat on a bare minimum and you don't see half-assed shit like many other novels do. It's actually interesting!
Definitely a recommendation.
Edit @ Chapter 575...
so sad we reached the Epilogue..... ....
Edit @ chapter 276 :
still in love with the story.
sad of the death of familiar characters (don't grow a GoT trend !)
and Empyrean Blacksmith is almost my last read every day, just before going to bed !
(4.5 if only for me, but like -->5 to compensate from the hate of "username:" and "jknott" which stopped reading early, before anything really started and decided in so doing to burn everything they don't understand.)
I love the story, the arch plot is grand, if nebulous and daunting, the book-sized plots are good, and the mini-plots perfects. : 5/5 (even if demonic invasion is not my favorite topic of book-sized plot and "you are the hero/target for the world" are rarely my prefered arch-plots: but here it's ok !)
no issue with grammar in later chapters (but being not native speaker, I can only push it to 4.5)
I love the characters, Lino being Lino (happy-go-lucky-but-only-because-otherwise-I'll-be-crying-nonstop), his "surrogate-mother/father-in all but name", Lucky and Sylvia being teased, Sylvia's betrothed, her father...etc Alea (which I would like to see more & closer to Lino (partial shipping!!) )
They all have a life, even the secondary (or even 3rd line?) characters. (even if some could have better exposure to understand them better)
The sole "blemish" for me is related to the style
the style is why I always push back the time to read it... : the presence of those HUGE paragraphes are sometime repelling when starting a new chapter and often stop me from reading "as soon as published", prefering to push that back to another time and read another new chapter from another story... or even start reading a fresh story.
However, whenever I gather enough guts to tackle these "big paragraphs chapters " I can't stop reading and I read the 2-5-10 remaining chapters in a few dozen of minutes :D
(that said, no issues for chapters 74-77, even if the first paragraph of 74 would have been less daunting to me if split in a few smaller ones).
thanks for all!
As of Chapter 406: Despite grammar problems, I enjoyed this story. (the grammar doesn't get better)
I am someone who normally wouldn’t touch cultivator novels. I just don’t like how they are with the story and characters, but this novel is great. This is one of the only I like and I don’t know how to properly explain how good it is to me. The only complaint that I have is on grammar and spelling. He Should get a editor to go over the chapters for grammar and spelling mistakes.
I have been reading stories on RRL for a number of years and I just can’t understand how this one made it on to the trending list.
I admit that I don’t write stories so my opinion probably doesn’t mean crap. Also, I’ve only read up to chapter 2 of this story so there’s a possibility that it gets better as the story progresses, though I can’t see how.
Although there were a few grammar errors, I noticed more issues with sentence structure and flow rather than grammar. It sometimes reads as if it was fed into an antiquated translation software program and then posted here.
Keep in mind that I found this story on the trending list and thought I'd try it out. Summary: This is not a good story. The setting is weak, the MC is a childish flop, and the 2 supporting characters are vapid at best.
Weak: Chapter 1 is arguably the most important part of any book. It is supposed to hook the reader into reading more by introducing the players and setting the stage for the rest of the story. However, I don’t see that here. Point in case, I got to the middle of chapter 2 and have no desire to read more. ...not hooked.
Childish: About half-way into chapter 1, the MC falls asleep in an alley. After some time, he wakes to see a “white-bearded fella that was nearly two meters tall”… MC’s response to this…
“D-don’t kill me!” Lino exclaimed. “I… I know! I can wipe your ass!”
Who in the hell says that when being woken up by a stranger? Why is that the first thing that pops in his head? SMH
Vapid: A few lines down and this self-defacing attitude is suddenly replaced with childish arrogance when he meets an old man and his wife. They come out of nowhere, beat the bratty MC, feed him, and then decide to take him on as an apprentice to teach him blacksmithing. There are no hints as to why he is fed or even chosen as a new apprentice. No indications that these supporting characters have any reason for being other than … well…I actually can’t see why they’re needed. Might as well have the MC stumble upon a magic hammer that suddenly makes him awesome.
Again, this is just my opinion. But I just can’t see why anyone else would read beyond chapter 2