The Old Steward Journey in Cultivation World

The Old Steward Journey in Cultivation World

by Shiroish

Warning This fiction contains:
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  • Profanity

Old man Wu has been living for more than 60 years old. In all his life he never been able to do something big, yet an encounter with a supreme individual change all that.

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I don't know what to think of this.

I actually quite like the premise of the story, unfortunetly it, as many other xianxia stories, falls victim to the stereotypes that appears in this genre.

The pace is a little fast, but i like it that way. The old man is an somewhat interesting character, you haven't truly layed out his motivations for growing stronger.

I don't know his motivations nor do i know why the young guy helped him in the first place.

The grammar is absolutely horrendous. You need to thoroughly read through your work before posting it.

Overall i like the story. The characters - other than the MC, seem boring and flat and that, unfortunatly, ruins it for me.

Despite all that i still feel the story has a lot of potential, all that you need to do before you now, is to rewrite it, add some good character introductions and lay out their motivations for the readers.