Brimstone Fantasy

by stern trooper

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Sci-fi Cyberpunk LitRPG Magic Male Lead Portal Fantasy / Isekai Reincarnation
Warning This fiction contains:
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Given his first weapon when he was still a child, Edward Lee lived a life full of violence in a nation torn by war.

Tormented by the demons of his past, he believed Death would free him.

But through the games of beings beyond his understanding, his death turned out to be the starting point of a new life in a strange world of magic and monsters, as a young teenager.

Beyond simply finding a way to survive the dangers of his new life, Edward will soon realize that there is still a price to pay for his past actions.

 

 

Cover art isn't mine.

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JF41C0N
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A well deserved break from standard Royalroad!

Royalroad is one of the things that I, quite literally, love to hate. You know the feeling right? Browsing through this endless swamp of bad writing, hoping for a light at the end of the tunnel, hoping for something that makes justice to the quality stories you have read before on RR. But you don't find them. And just end up accepting they don't exist, or your standards are just too high. Most of the time, you'll just skip from story to story, never really finding anything quite worth your time - the home to amateur writers also happens to be home to some of the most mediocre stories on all of the internet.

But the build up is all worth it. The painstaking hours going through shit stories make it even sweeter when you finally find one of those. The kind of story you just can't put down until you've read to the latest chapter. And dear author, I'm here to congratulate you. Because at the very least for me, your story is one of those. And you can be damn sure I'll be reading it for a long ass time! Thank you for the fun hours and may many more come! 

Setanta
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Worth the investment...probably.

TLDR: despite being rife with typos, full of the same characters you'll find in literally every story on Royal Road, and some striking similarities to popular video games, this story is significantly better than the sum of its parts.

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Be forewarned; unlike many reviewers, I am a writer and editor by trade and profession. I read things on this site during lulls in my day job and try to give new and blooming authors a realistic review of their stories. I am neither subtle nor kind with my criticisms because a reviewer shouldn't be if they care for the authors they enjoy. I save my analogies and subterfuge for my stories, not for people asking for honesty.

That said, let's begin.

Brimstone is good. Full stop. I'll detail its flaws below, but the overall takeaway should be that this is a story that will capture and keep your attention in spite of itself; a gestalt that is, incredibly, so much more than the sum of its parts.

The story suffers from a common ailment, and that is that the author is both new and writing very quickly. The typos, word omissions, continuity confusions and occasional baseless exposition are pretty evident if you take off your rose-tinted glasses and look critically at this thing you enjoy. I giggle every time the author requests that mistakes be pointed out because, honestly, it would take far longer to correct a chapter than it would to read it three or four times and I don't have the time. 

Still, in spite of this, the narrative has a nice flow. Pacing is kept relatively high, the grammar is usually pretty solid, or at least not poor enough to distract, and interactions between characters are surprisingly natural.

Why surprisingly? Because the main character is an angsty, aggressive man-boy in a childish body with a magic sword that puts him ahead of all his peers without much effort. I don't want to say he's a carbon copy of Randidly from that dumpster fire of a story, but he's not far off, and that's disappointing. Still, the conversations, especially between Edward and children, are genuine, natural and lacking the unnecessary and borderline-sociopathic edge that Rand-ward tends to when speaking with anyone else.

There are also some ridiculously strong man-beasts, reminiscent of Savage Divinity, who are both stereotypically Eastern and stereotypically stoic/quiet/silently powerful.

The saving grace for me, in the character department, is the ragtag group of kids that become Edward's friends, and specifically the girl in the wheelchair. If more of the characters had this kind of depth and humanity, the story would be much improved, in my opinion.

Style-wise, the story is very much like Randidly Ghosthound. There are chapters where half of the text is a bunch of arcane nonsense about skill scores that will never actually be used beyond gross comparatives. This is something I utterly loathe, but understand. Do we, as readers, need to keep track of the MC as if we're min-maxing a beloved Final Fantasy character? No, not really. Is it helpful that we know exactly how powerful he is when no one else is given statistics to compare to? No, not really. Is this a common trope of the genre and something I should probably bitch about less? Yeah, probably. 

One of my real pet-peeves here is that there are "impending disasters" that are straight called Tribulations, just like in Randidly Ghosthound. There are more direct-lifts from this other, inferior story that I think the author should distance themselves from, but that's a deeply personal opinion and should not be a reason to avoid the story for anyone else.

Beyond that, the story is delivered in small bursts of single-character-driven prose that move from terrace-cliff to terrace-cliff, generally within 2000 words or less. That's different than a regular horseshit-cliffhanger in that they're smaller drops that don't enrage you with how precipitous they are to the enjoyment of the story. It keeps the story segmented with very strict delineations, but that's not super problematic for this kind of narrative.

And speaking of story, this is the shining star in an otherwise banal sky. Even with kinda-flat characters and a very common and recognizable style, the world building and slow-roll of the story makes for an engaging experience. There's an almost lovecraftian element to the undermines and labyrinths and dungeons that is very inviting to the imagination.

Yeah, it's almost unavoidably influenced by popular video games like Dark Souls and Bloodborne and The Witcher and such, but it's shuffled and remade in a compelling and original configuration that does it for me in a big way. There's a mystique and a sinister atmosphere at play and I really want to know more.

I recommend this to be read if you've already gone through The Wandering Inn, Savage Divinity, The Iron Teeth, Paladin, and Threadbear. It's one of the most engaging narratives on the site, even if it has room for improvement.

Ramussaysok
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I rarely log in but when I do...

Edit: really like what you are doing so im giving this a full mark.

Like the title says, I don't bother logging in but I had to do it to review this fiction. It's just starting so I can't give the story and the character a perfect score yet, even if the MC is promising. What I like about it is the style, it really fits my difficult tastes and is above most of what is on the rrl. I really hope the author keep writing and do not drop it like many of the stories that start well like this one.

Read this if you want a different kind of litrpg.

WitchCraft
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Honestly some awesome ideas here, I cannot wait to see where he takes it with such interesting and diverse characters. You'll be hooked in the first couple chapters probably.

Has LitRPG elements in play, though has  different take(Read below).

 

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

Donetaskdontask
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Hey Aternus, thought I'd leave a review.

Pretty slow pace leads me to think this will be the start of a large series.

Overall, standard LitRPG with lots of potential and a good start.

Wise old penguin
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Pretty good and MUCH better than some of the novels with similar scores.

I'm gonna wait with a detailed review until the author stops updating consistently/completes it, because I've got barely any minor beef and while the MC is (probably) a sociopath, he's got a very good reason for being like he is.

Very few plot holes that suspension of disbelief can't gloss over.

The way children are used by their parents is very realistic for enviourments like the story setting.

The fact that humans lack the [Wisdom] stat is very silly/ironic, considering all of civilisation is built on the exeptional wisdom of our ancestors. I imagine that's one of the major plot points considering they've been tasked to search for past [Glory], which basically means the [Wisdom of their ancestors]. I imagine that there's some sort of hidden system that converts [Glory] into [Wisdom], for humans at least.

I'm giving five stars, because the story doesn't just have great potential, it's already very good (a bit generic, but meh. I know how hard it is to not bump shoulders with other peoples work.)

Steady
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Good ideas, bad execution

The author habitually breaks one of the tenants of good writing; show don't tell. The first couple chapter is what I considered a pretty good hook. Then when the main character starts his new life everything falls apart. Every interaction from then on involves an overexplanation. I don't mind a story about the main character being better than everyone else, or having immense potential. What I don't like is that every interaction is just the main character showing off. It feels like there's some kind of plot armor, both that readers and every character is aware of. The mc never really falls in danger. He overcomes every obstacle with hard work, skill, and the friends he has made. He also happens to have a national treasure in the form of a demonic sword of a fallen kingdom's princess, the legacy of a lost and strong sword style, and helpfully takes over when things start going bad. I'd be genuinely surprised if he doesn't end up fucking his own sword.

dark asura
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I'm expecting this to keep getting better I like the characters and waiting for the mc to have a more defined goal 

seths
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Amazing Mix of Reincarnation & LitRPG!

Don’t miss out on this excellent new story! This story is a fantastic blend of reincarnation tale with an intriguing LitRPG based world. We are only at the beginning of what promises to be an epic story for our MC and it’s darn good so far!

Grammar and spelling are quite good, only minor hiccups here and there. Both the world the MC finds himself in and the larger plot threads he finds himself caught up in are highly intriguing and appear to be very well thought out. I can’t wait for more and highly recommend this story so check it out!

Rev
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If you're in the middle of searching a good novel, then you're lucky to found this gem. If you like fantasy, action, character with personality, just read the first 5 chapter and you will be drawn instantly. 

I hope this novel can get the attention it deserved, and the author start to pumping out more chapter lol.