The Voice of the World

by Ashkari

Original ONGOING Adventure Fantasy LitRPG Magic Male Lead Summoned Hero

Jason Elric used to be an ordinary college student living in the heart of San Francisco. He had a part time job, he played online games with friends he got along moderately well with, and he earned reasonably good grades. The worst he really had to worry about in life was turning in his coursework on time and not being late to class.

Now, though? Now fighting for his life and running from a horde of giant frogs that want to make him their next meal is just another Tuesday.

Thanks to a summoning ritual gone terribly right, Jason has found himself trapped in a world eerily similar to the role playing games games he used to play for fun. Unfortunately for the now ex-college student, everything happening around him is terrifyingly real and if he wants to survive, he’ll have to figure out how to exploit the system for his benefit before it’s too late.


The Voice of the World is the first part of what is planned to be a multi-book, Isekai LitRPG story with crafting elements, set in the fantasy world known as Verdania. This is my first time posting online for public consumption, so bear with me as I work to find a style that people like.

While I may occasionally write scenes that may deal with heavy concepts, expect this story to be primarily light hearted high fantasy. There will be a lot of common fantasy tropes involved, as this story got its start as a simple practice exercise, rather than any plan to actually post it. However, it’s grown on me, so I felt it’s worth sharing after all.

Thus, if you’re looking for more serious/original/unusual stories, you might want to look elsewhere. For the rest of you, feel free to leave suggestions, as well as to point out grammar and spelling mistakes; I’ll do my best to make edits to correct them. I do my own editing currently, and it’s easy to miss things when you know what’s supposed to be there, so such call outs are highly encouraged.

Content TLDR: No harems, probably no romance (unless it makes sense for the story later on) (it did, eventually), definitely no sex (keeping this PG-13 or close to it), limited profanity. Does/Will contain mixes of magic and technology (think Warhammer, Final Fantasy); copious amounts of blue tables; race, gender, and sexual equality concepts; crafting sequences; and (slightly, but not overbearingly) strong protagonists. If you don’t like these things, go elsewhere instead of downvoting people for content instead of writing quality.

Update Time varies, but goal is two chapters a week, typically Mon/Tues and Thurs/Fri, minimum chapter length ~4000 words. Sometimes longer, sometimes a little shorter if pacing calls for it.

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Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue ago
Chapter 01 ago
Chapter 02 ago
Chapter 03 ago
Chapter 04 ago
Chapter 05 ago
Chapter 06 ago
Character Sheets: Update One ago
Chapter 07 ago
Chapter 08 ago
Mini-Interludes 01 and 02 - Karthinos, and Dungeons 101 ago
Chapter 09 ago
Chapter 10 ago
Chapter 11 ago
Chapter 12 ago
Chapter 13 ago
Character Sheets - Update 2 ago
Chapter 14 ago
Chapter 15 ago
Chapter 16 ago
Chapter 17 ago
Chapter 18 ago
Chapter 19 ago
Chapter 20 ago
Chapter 21 ago
Chapter 22 ago
Character Sheets - Update 3 ago
Mini-Interlude 03 - Dungeons 101 ago
Chapter 23 ago
Chapter 24 ago
Chapter 25 ago
Chapter 26 ago
Chapter 27 ago
Chapter 28 ago
Chapter 29 ago
Chapter 30 ago
Chapter 31 ago
Character Sheets - Update 4 ago
Chapter 32 ago
Chapter 33 ago
Chapter 34 ago
Chapter 35 ago
Chapter 36 ago
Chapter 37 ago
Chapter 38 - Full Version ago
Chapter 39 ago
Character Sheets - Update 5 ago
Chapter 40 ago
Chapter 41 ago
Chapter 42 ago
Not A Chapter: Author’s Note And A Quick Sneak Peek ago
Chapter 43 (And 44, really) ago
Chapter 45 ago
Chapter 46 ago
Chapter 47 ago
Chapter 48 ago
Chapter 48.2 ago
Chapter 49.1 ago
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Tacroy
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Everything you'd want in a LitRPG

This story has pretty much everything you'd want in a LitRPG (aside from a cover).

The characters are interesting and well-motivated, the system is deep enough to do interesting things but rigorous enough that it doesn't seem like victories are pulled out of someone's ass, and the stakes actually make sense.

The setting is clearly inspired by D&D, which may be intentional given some of the background hints. That being said, it's a little weird seeing some oddly specific D&D terms like "handy haversack" and "tanglefoot bags" tossed around in a completely different system. It's not a dealbreaker, just odd.

Aside from that one minor nit-pick, this is definitely one of the better stories around. Get yourself a cover, man!

SlimeAction
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I'm reading until chapter 11 at the moment and I just feel reading 20-30 chapters worth. This is a story of heroes summoning goes way, way to much right. Which is a trouble. Just not a troble for our bunch of heroes right now. The System or The Voice of The World could be count as god in my opinion, with how active and vast/vague it is. Worth a religion. Which with real god might not see eye to eye, since THEY also in a System.

 

I can't say anything about style or grammar for anyone who cares about that since I seems to autofilter that when reading. But this story makes me stay. And I'll be back for more. That's all.

Fallion
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What I really love about this story is that the MC is a crafter AND IT'S RELEVANT.

Unlike most other stories with a "crafter" MC, where the MC basically just makes one or two op items and then the subject isn't brought up again for 20+ chapters untill the MC decides to make another op item, this story actually makes the crafting relevant and interesting.

The story itself it good, the characters interesting and there's no grammar mistakes that scream "I AM HERE TO ANNOY YOU AND KILL YOUR BRAIN CELLS".

 

This review was written at chapter 30

Cestarian
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Starts boring but gets progressively better

The biggest weakness of this story from the very start till the end (chapter 46 is as far as the story has been written at the time of this writing) is the style. There are horrendous amounts of what I like to call 'wasteful writing', by which I mean meaningless text that can just be skimmed over. In fact, I'd go as far as to venture a guess that more than half of the content written so far is such 'wasteful writing'.

Examples of such writing would include characters talking in circles about theories about some of the world's mechanics and crafting systems, or comparisons between this world and some games they've played, etc. Especially in the beginning expect to see multiple chapters worth of such roundabout discussions that lead nowhere. Now theorizing in and of itself isn't bad, and relaying the probable world mechanics through character dialogue isn't wrong either, it's the paragraph after paragraph of detailed explanations about these theories that's the problem, they should be summarized. I doubt anyone likes to read such lengthy world theory descriptions anymore than regular infodumps.

In other words, readers who like stories with decent pacing can expect to do a lot of skimming, even if there are ~800 pages of content, I read through it all within the same kind of time frame as I've been reading ~300 pages of content stories on here. I guess there were also a few interludes that I downright just skipped and didn't feel like I missed out on anything, but unlike stories like say worm where you have bloody interludes every 3 chapters or something, this story has very few of them, this is another example of wasteful writing I suppose, but some might disagree that interludes are so horrendous so I'll leave that for you to decide. This story has if memory serves 3 interludes + the prologue so far. A negligible amount.

It's not all bad though, one thing I really like is that while the author generally isn't that good in explaining what his characters or their equipment look like, he makes an effort to dig through and share images he used as inspiration for how they look (shamelessly stolen concept art :D ) which he puts in the notes of applicable chapters where the characters looks change particularly much, to help readers get a better image for each of the main caste. And I have to say, I like his taste.

The story is riddled with minor grammatical errors, generally words are spelled correctly but sometimes the author uses the wrong word here and there, it's an issue that requires an editor to fix but I doubt it will really bother anyone too much unless you're really anal about the grammar being perfect.

As for the story itself and characters, it starts out pretty bad to be completely honest, we have a wish fulfillment themed litrpg system, and mostly generic characters.

The story is about Edward Jason Elric, who gets summoned to another world and using his uber leet survival skills from real life camping trips he becomes a ranger an alchemist.  He then starts his quest for survival gobbling dubious looking mushrooms until he comes across an alien a fellow earthling who started her adventure like every main character before her does. That is, she picked up a nearby sword conveniently buried in the dirt and started swinging it around in a poor imitation of the blender, then to spice things up she started shouting out spell-sounding words like "fireball!" and "waterball!" and "pokeball!" other applicable things like a psychopath until she unlocked the idiot savant knight class and the 'all elemental affinity' skill (well not really, but something more or less the same)

Later on there will be at least one more case where such ridiculousness awards people's silliness (by silliness I mean the equivalent of children roleplaying wizards) with unique classes and other cool things.

So that is what I mean by 'wish fulfillment system' :O they just do random shit and get rewarded with "A for effort! here's your complementary reward for participating!" *insert op shit here*

Luckily however this isn't really what the system is later on, it's more... well... system~y in the future and basically all this nonsense is excused as a form of compensation from the system to make up to them the fact that it dumped them in the middle of monster ridden nowhere half naked due to unfortunate circumstances. But I was seriously close to dropping it until this nonesense ended. I was quite surprised after all that to be honest that the main character wasn't able to figure out how to make himself a minimap or radar by saying something like "voodoo voodoo minimap with radar!" and poof. Thankfully their outrageous luck had an end.

Anyhow, what makes this story most interesting is that the main character is a support/utility/crafting class rather than some kind of human lawnmower that cuts monster heads instead of grass. And the story really focuses progressively more and more on his crafting experiences after the first 10 or so chapters (due to this and more and more overly detailed mostly meaningless descriptions and lengthy conversations however the pace of the story drops kinda hard with this as well, but this is mostly due to the previously mentioned 'wasteful writing', the actual craft grinding is fine and after another 30 chapters or so he's already a world class enchanter and potion crafter, so I suspect the story will start progressing again starting really from the chapter I stopped where they finally start seeing more action equipped with the semi-op gear crafted by the mc.

Overall the story's pacing is fairly down in the gutter for most of what has already been written, but it gets a little better, in later chapters maybe somewhere after the 20 chapter mark or something there have been a few chapters where I read every word from start to finish, but in total? I didn't need to read half of the text to fully grasp and enjoy the content. The author is clearly writing this as practice for his writing skills however, I hope when he finishes it he rewrites it to condense the contents more. The chapters are really long, and if he uses the same length chapters he should be able to comfortably cover all the content so far in just 20 chapters if he applies a bit of summarising and more careful wording to deliver information faster in some conversations as well.

But in the end? After around the halfway point I started to get a bit more excited about the story, the political hellscape they need to navigate, the unknown (well, the known by readers from the highly skimmable prologue) enemy that's hunting them like rabbits, the use of magic to make technologies and weapons beyond what would normally be their means and how that paints targets on their backs. There's a lot of potential for a good story in here, and as I said in the title, it gets progressively better later on, all it needs is to continue that trend.

Redroajs1
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Excellent story and has a ton of potential

The story is great. Fairly unique characters and three dimensional personalities. There are some grammatical mistakes but they are all extremely minor and did not hamper my reading in any way. I feel that even though there is no romance planned, it is pretty inevitable between the three main characters. But there is no harem and this is not a harem story, there are massive differences between a harem and a poly relationship. And what I mean when I say that it seems to me that a romantic relationship between the three main characters is a natural progression based on the story's plot is that it seems to me that their friendship seems to be developing extremely slowly and naturally into a poly relationship. I think it's a good thing since I haven't come accross many stories have played around with that concept yet. The story pacing is perfect in my opinion. Overall it's a must read and the story has a ton of potential and I'm very excited to see how the characters and the story will develop. Keep up the awesome work author-san! :)

VoidEater
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STYLE: I like the system you used. It's easy to understand and kinda neat in format. Liked how uses 3rd person POV since it's a great tool to really tell a story.

STORY: It's really good just tone down a bit of simply telling and instead show us, give us an image of what is happening. Imagery would maximize the potential of the story.

GRAMMAR: It's OK. No grammar mistakes as far as I have read but that's maybe simply because I wasn't really critical at finding faults.

CHARACTER: This is where it bugged me the most. I can't enjoy the characters. I mean it's nice to read it but I can't feel a connection to the characters. Lumi, the mc, and etc could die for all I care.

 

It was a nice read. Thanks for this story.

 

P.S: I really like the prologue.

Humanprototype
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Too Much Game Mechanic Minutiae

This story reads like a transcript of someones DnD campaign complete with the players constantly breaking character and metagaming.

It's written in a overly verbose and detailed way that sometime makes for a slow and frustrating read. This is made worse when the story grinds to a halt for yet another discussion of some game mechanic minutiae that isn't really relevant beyond showing the character picking between choice A, B, or C.

All in all it's an OK read. The crafting and the somewhat unique character builds are whats kept me reading.

Alchemyst
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This is only as of chapter 7 but so far it seems like this is a really great book. The writing flows really well and the characters draw you in. It's definitely worth a read so why don't you try it.

Mu'er
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This is excellent. As of chapter 15, there has been decent character introduction, plot set-up, and world building. Maybe the characters are a little unbalanced, however I would assume that in the more advanced portions of the world there would be similar (if not quite as overpowering) classes

Typist kid
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I thought hard about giving this a five-star. But then I tried to think of reasons why I shouldn't give a five-star and found none.

This story is LitRPG and Isekai. For those of you that don't know what that is, it's basically where a school kid gets teleported to a fantasy world. Or, in this case, college kids. LitRPG is basically adding in-game mechanics–and here the sheer vastness of the system pulled me in, but I bet it would've been even better had the specifics been laid out. 

I'd recommend reading until chapter 13. That chapter had more pull to it for me.

The world has bits of darkness and bits of humor. The main characters are a trio of people who've been pulled out of their college lives by a god (On accident). There's only one guy, and two girls, which was disconcerting at the start (Too used to common tropes) but it's done well.  

There are typos here and there, nothing to worry about really. If you're a casual reader, they're harder to spot. 

Style

Written in past tense third person narrative, the style is pretty solid. The pacing is not fast, nor is it excruciatingly slow. That being said, it was just below moderately slow for me(Do take note, I've been told that the pacing of my story is a bit... disorientation).  

Story

The reason I deducted a half star here is while it's pretty solid, I was hoping for more with the evil goddess. The prologue had me thinking that the people taken from their world would be facing a risk to their lives from the goddess, and so I was waiting for that other shoe to drop. That tension fades as I don't get a hint of her presence until the... mini interludes 1 and 2. I recommend pushing that chapter up some and adding hints in the chapter before to really add that tension. The people showed dead or captured was a nice move and so was the 'Dungeon Master' guy. That part had me grinning if a bit disturbed.

Grammar score

The half star deducted here was mainly because of the errant mistakes I found. Other than that, no problem. Just brush it over.

Character score

The characters feel real here, though adding a few out-of-the-norm tidbits might help further enhance that. I don't connect to the characters, however, that might just be me. However, a lack of connection might mean something missing, or some problem, but again, it might just be me. 

Overall

You have a fairly solid read here. Lots of potential lies within the system you have, and extrapolating on that (Just my opinion) might be just what you need to make it to the top. I can totally see my younger self (Before I started writing) digging this story. Current me doesn't read much. One of the stories I'll visit when I feel like reading again.

Hope this is helpful!