The Voice of the World

by Ashkari

Original HIATUS Adventure Fantasy LitRPG Magic Male Lead Portal Fantasy / Isekai

Jason Elric used to be an ordinary college student living in the heart of San Francisco. He had a part time job, he played online games with friends he got along moderately well with, and he earned reasonably good grades. The worst he really had to worry about in life was turning in his coursework on time and not being late to class.

Now, though? Now fighting for his life and running from a horde of giant frogs that want to make him their next meal is just another Tuesday.

Thanks to a summoning ritual gone terribly right, Jason has found himself trapped in a world eerily similar to the role playing games games he used to play for fun. Unfortunately for the now ex-college student, everything happening around him is terrifyingly real and if he wants to survive, he’ll have to figure out how to exploit the system for his benefit before it’s too late.


The Voice of the World is the first part of what is planned to be a multi-book, Isekai LitRPG story with crafting elements, set in the fantasy world known as Verdania. This is my first time posting online for public consumption, so bear with me as I work to find a style that people like.

While I may occasionally write scenes that may deal with heavy concepts, expect this story to be primarily light hearted high fantasy. There will be a lot of common fantasy tropes involved, as this story got its start as a simple practice exercise, rather than any plan to actually post it. However, it’s grown on me, so I felt it’s worth sharing after all.

Thus, if you’re looking for more serious/original/unusual stories, you might want to look elsewhere. For the rest of you, feel free to leave suggestions, as well as to point out grammar and spelling mistakes; I’ll do my best to make edits to correct them. I do my own editing currently, and it’s easy to miss things when you know what’s supposed to be there, so such call outs are highly encouraged.

Content TLDR: No harems, probably no romance (unless it makes sense for the story later on) (it did, eventually), definitely no sex (keeping this PG-13 or close to it), limited profanity. Does/Will contain mixes of magic and technology (think Warhammer, Final Fantasy); copious amounts of blue tables; race, gender, and sexual equality concepts; crafting sequences; and (slightly, but not overbearingly) strong protagonists. If you don’t like these things, go elsewhere instead of downvoting people for content instead of writing quality.

Update Time currently varies, due to personal injury, but the goal is 1/week on Wednesdays, with a possible smaller chapter on weekends if time/health permits.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue ago
Chapter 01 ago
Chapter 02 ago
Chapter 03 ago
Chapter 04 ago
Chapter 05 ago
Chapter 06 ago
Character Sheets: Update One ago
Chapter 07 ago
Chapter 08 ago
Mini-Interludes 01 and 02 - Karthinos, and Dungeons 101 ago
Chapter 09 ago
Chapter 10 ago
Chapter 11 ago
Chapter 12 ago
Chapter 13 ago
Character Sheets - Update 2 ago
Chapter 14 ago
Chapter 15 ago
Chapter 16 ago
Chapter 17 ago
Chapter 18 ago
Chapter 19 ago
Chapter 20 ago
Chapter 21 ago
Chapter 22 ago
Character Sheets - Update 3 ago
Mini-Interlude 03 - Dungeons 101 ago
Chapter 23 ago
Chapter 24 ago
Chapter 25 ago
Chapter 26 ago
Chapter 27 ago
Chapter 28 ago
Chapter 29 ago
Chapter 30 ago
Chapter 31 ago
Character Sheets - Update 4 ago
Chapter 32 ago
Chapter 33 ago
Chapter 34 ago
Chapter 35 ago
Chapter 36 ago
Chapter 37 ago
Chapter 38 - Full Version ago
Chapter 39 ago
Character Sheets - Update 5 ago
Chapter 40 ago
Chapter 41 ago
Chapter 42 ago
Not A Chapter: Author’s Note And A Quick Sneak Peek ago
Chapter 43 (And 44, really) ago
Chapter 45 ago
Chapter 46 ago
Chapter 47 ago
Chapter 48 ago
Chapter 48.2 ago
Chapter 49.1 ago
VotW Returns! Ch 49.2 plus News! ago
Chapter 50 ago
Chapter 51 ago

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Zuzurlo
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Impressive and disappointing

As of chapter 49:

This is a story which started out strong, but slowly lowered my interest until I was struggling to keep reading and I think I will drop it now. The genre is of my liking, but it evolved into something that I don't appreciate anymore, however other people may still be interested, so I don't want anybody to skip this story due to this review. Anyway after starting writing a fiction of my own I admit that it is indeed difficult to stay on track, and the author is probably doing a better job than I am. I will be a bit spoilerish, but I think that anyone could read what I'm about to say.

Spoiler: Spoiler

Probably I am a little too severe with my reviews. I am trying to write my own story and I cannot reach this level of quality, however I think this should not stop me from giving a truthful feedback. I consider it helpful for both the author and the future readers.

Very few stories here in RR look as professionally written as this. I believe that most of the more famous ones have more views just because they publish faster. I strongly suggest to at least start reading this. If you don't like the things I didn't like, simply drop it early on.

Humanprototype
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Too Much Game Mechanic Minutiae

This story reads like a transcript of someones DnD campaign complete with the players constantly breaking character and metagaming.

It's written in a overly verbose and detailed way that sometime makes for a slow and frustrating read. This is made worse when the story grinds to a halt for yet another discussion of some game mechanic minutiae that isn't really relevant beyond showing the character picking between choice A, B, or C.

All in all it's an OK read. The crafting and the somewhat unique character builds are whats kept me reading.

Cestarian
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Starts boring but gets progressively better

The biggest weakness of this story from the very start till the end (chapter 46 is as far as the story has been written at the time of this writing) is the style. There are horrendous amounts of what I like to call 'wasteful writing', by which I mean meaningless text that can just be skimmed over. In fact, I'd go as far as to venture a guess that more than half of the content written so far is such 'wasteful writing'.

Examples of such writing would include characters talking in circles about theories about some of the world's mechanics and crafting systems, or comparisons between this world and some games they've played, etc. Especially in the beginning expect to see multiple chapters worth of such roundabout discussions that lead nowhere. Now theorizing in and of itself isn't bad, and relaying the probable world mechanics through character dialogue isn't wrong either, it's the paragraph after paragraph of detailed explanations about these theories that's the problem, they should be summarized. I doubt anyone likes to read such lengthy world theory descriptions anymore than regular infodumps.

In other words, readers who like stories with decent pacing can expect to do a lot of skimming, even if there are ~800 pages of content, I read through it all within the same kind of time frame as I've been reading ~300 pages of content stories on here. I guess there were also a few interludes that I downright just skipped and didn't feel like I missed out on anything, but unlike stories like say worm where you have bloody interludes every 3 chapters or something, this story has very few of them, this is another example of wasteful writing I suppose, but some might disagree that interludes are so horrendous so I'll leave that for you to decide. This story has if memory serves 3 interludes + the prologue so far. A negligible amount.

It's not all bad though, one thing I really like is that while the author generally isn't that good in explaining what his characters or their equipment look like, he makes an effort to dig through and share images he used as inspiration for how they look (shamelessly stolen concept art :D ) which he puts in the notes of applicable chapters where the characters looks change particularly much, to help readers get a better image for each of the main caste. And I have to say, I like his taste.

The story is riddled with minor grammatical errors, generally words are spelled correctly but sometimes the author uses the wrong word here and there, it's an issue that requires an editor to fix but I doubt it will really bother anyone too much unless you're really anal about the grammar being perfect.

As for the story itself and characters, it starts out pretty bad to be completely honest, we have a wish fulfillment themed litrpg system, and mostly generic characters.

The story is about Edward Jason Elric, who gets summoned to another world and using his uber leet survival skills from real life camping trips he becomes a ranger an alchemist.  He then starts his quest for survival gobbling dubious looking mushrooms until he comes across an alien a fellow earthling who started her adventure like every main character before her does. That is, she picked up a nearby sword conveniently buried in the dirt and started swinging it around in a poor imitation of the blender, then to spice things up she started shouting out spell-sounding words like "fireball!" and "waterball!" and "pokeball!" other applicable things like a psychopath until she unlocked the idiot savant knight class and the 'all elemental affinity' skill (well not really, but something more or less the same)

Later on there will be at least one more case where such ridiculousness awards people's silliness (by silliness I mean the equivalent of children roleplaying wizards) with unique classes and other cool things.

So that is what I mean by 'wish fulfillment system' :O they just do random shit and get rewarded with "A for effort! here's your complementary reward for participating!" *insert op shit here*

Luckily however this isn't really what the system is later on, it's more... well... system~y in the future and basically all this nonsense is excused as a form of compensation from the system to make up to them the fact that it dumped them in the middle of monster ridden nowhere half naked due to unfortunate circumstances. But I was seriously close to dropping it until this nonesense ended. I was quite surprised after all that to be honest that the main character wasn't able to figure out how to make himself a minimap or radar by saying something like "voodoo voodoo minimap with radar!" and poof. Thankfully their outrageous luck had an end.

Anyhow, what makes this story most interesting is that the main character is a support/utility/crafting class rather than some kind of human lawnmower that cuts monster heads instead of grass. And the story really focuses progressively more and more on his crafting experiences after the first 10 or so chapters (due to this and more and more overly detailed mostly meaningless descriptions and lengthy conversations however the pace of the story drops kinda hard with this as well, but this is mostly due to the previously mentioned 'wasteful writing', the actual craft grinding is fine and after another 30 chapters or so he's already a world class enchanter and potion crafter, so I suspect the story will start progressing again starting really from the chapter I stopped where they finally start seeing more action equipped with the semi-op gear crafted by the mc.

Overall the story's pacing is fairly down in the gutter for most of what has already been written, but it gets a little better, in later chapters maybe somewhere after the 20 chapter mark or something there have been a few chapters where I read every word from start to finish, but in total? I didn't need to read half of the text to fully grasp and enjoy the content. The author is clearly writing this as practice for his writing skills however, I hope when he finishes it he rewrites it to condense the contents more. The chapters are really long, and if he uses the same length chapters he should be able to comfortably cover all the content so far in just 20 chapters if he applies a bit of summarising and more careful wording to deliver information faster in some conversations as well.

But in the end? After around the halfway point I started to get a bit more excited about the story, the political hellscape they need to navigate, the unknown (well, the known by readers from the highly skimmable prologue) enemy that's hunting them like rabbits, the use of magic to make technologies and weapons beyond what would normally be their means and how that paints targets on their backs. There's a lot of potential for a good story in here, and as I said in the title, it gets progressively better later on, all it needs is to continue that trend.

CashireCat
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Prologue is a huge lie - Characters shit

Reviewed at: Chapter 08

Read until chapter 8.

Prologue promises a dark ruthless story, then the MC comes into the story and it´s some nice slow adventure.

MC is apparently able to do everything and an expert in survival -_-

At the same time he is a typical wimp. ONe of his companions learns a new magic? Test it on him with his consent!

He would be able to learn magic for free but out of some reason doesn´t want to. Most likley because there is already an mage in the group. For someone so intelligent he extremely naive.

All the characters are constantly referring to games.

Obvious
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Why is the MC is handicapping himself?

I'd give worse scores but it's not fair since so much worse is out there. NONE of these people can even average gamers. Just passing up on OP powers to play a shitty role in the group. They find out enough about the system to make themselves decently powered, but just choose to avoid it. THen you set the main male lead in the classic butboy role where he's going to be a "good guy" who constantly takes sht and odesn't try to make himself powerufl enough to be solely useful while continuously complaining about what else he could do. Why not pick up free magic? Oh, someone else has it and kind of knows how to use it, so why bother. I stopped 6 chapters in but the direction became annoyingly obvious. Could you not make the MC so... basic.

Calavente
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Great for People liking number-crushing

I like the D&D background and the number crushing that is behind the story.

The characters are sympathic and the story of "surviving in another brutal world" is well done.

the arch-plot of the arch enemy is looming over the MC's heads but we are too early in the game to really be bothered by it.

And it's sad that the story stopped just at the time that the MC trio decided to stop beating around the bushs and to hook up together :)

Snowonereadslikeme
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love the story and the system. if your looking for a support story that decided rules are meant to be worked around you will love the mc he as he macguavers to hero status in a world ruled by the voice

Cloudwatcher
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Love the story and it is without a doubt one of the better written ones in the site. Can’t wait for more.
Miketrammell1134
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I'm enjoying it. They talk about their skills a little too much for me but a lot of people enjoy that. 

Mauro Junior
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A good basic world, a poor main character, I even accepted, first class, but in the second already shows a low intellect of the character, and a forced attempt to weaken the main character, and strengthen the secondary, and still the whole premise survivalist is thrown into the trash, for an attempt to develop a "balanced" party.