FCBM - FATE CANNOT BIND ME

by GRANDPA DOEHRING

Background is everything

From a 10th generation family? Rule a City

From a 100th generation family? Rule A Continent

From a 1000th generation family? Rule an entire world!!!

But from a 0th generation family? Unfortunately fate will eternally bind you.

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The start is good i suppose...

Confusing beginning. The prologue started good but it all went downhill when the kid began to salute. Too fast paced, not enough build up and many lost opportunities. Though i appreciate a story that starts in medias res, you failed in it's executing.
I somehow get the feeling that you have not devised the world and lore enough before writing the prologue and subsequent chapters.