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Pain. It's what we thrive on. With no feedback, humans become aimless, bored, and unmotivated. We pretend to hate pain but without it we are nothing.

Yet there's a limit to how much pain a person can handle before they break.

The year is 2050, Baaltech is the largest entity in the world, barring the World Government. Since its inception, it has been responisible for thousands of advancements in technology. A convenient and punishment-free lifestyle is now the norm across the globe thanks to Baaltech's rapid advancement. But who wants that, right? Humans live off the thrill of danger, the sheer rush of living on the brink. So, the fantasy of true immersion has been brought to reality. Truly, a dream come true for a population almost dying for an escape from the humdrum day-to-day that life has become.

Dreams, unfortunately, can easily become nightmares.

A young man, jailed for a crime that he may or may not have committed finds himself in a predicament. His region's prison is completely full, so he is to be executed, in accordance to the recent overpopulation laws. At the last moment, Baaltech steps in and buys the young man's conviction rights. Having full control over him, they "request" that he enter a Full-Immersion Pod for ten years. The young man is elated. Not only is he able to avoid execution, but now he is finally able to enter [Monarch], the newest (and most expensive) VRMMORPG on the market. A pristine new reality to call his own. He had never been able to afford to even sniff a Full-Immersion Pod before.

A dream come true. Right?

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