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 Liz calmly steadied her breath, only having a single arrow left. A breath escaped her mouth as she took aim. Wind moving heavily around her. The constant nightmare are just a reminder. The silent whispers of the grass echoed in her ears as she finally lets go of the arrow.

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 Story is good so far.

But, for the love of higher beings, mind your grammar. Clearly, you do know that have / has both exist, so why not apply them correctly? Same with tense. A sentence begins with past tense and, by some miraculous circumstance, ends with present tense. My soul cringes, dude (or dudette).

"I am not a native english speaker..bla bla." Yeah. That is no problem, alright, but i very much doubt ANY language ignores temporal logic (i.E. cause and effect), or confuses singular with plural. Such a language would be useless, as it couldn't accurately describe anything.

That said, i really like the content and i hope you carry on :)