A Snake's Rise
Torga's back and he's hungrier than ever.
In this second book following Torga's journey, he's going to battle kings, mythical beasts, tyrants, and even gods on his quest to find and protect his wife.
Come join him as he rises to power and becomes a living legend...
(Cover is the creature Torga's body was based on.)
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(Link to the first story-- http://www.royalroadl.com/fiction/13297
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I like everything about this book except for one thing; what started off as a guy who has 300 years to become strong enough to protect his wife has turned into a guy who wants to protect his family and kinda does whatever he feels like. The original goal was he'll kill anyone who gets in his way of growing stronger and protecting her, but now it feels like he's completely forgotten about it. Why does he care about a bunch of 20 year olds? I mean, maybe he likes them, but he calls one of them his daughter? What?
I'm new to this site so I figured I would read some of the more popular stories to get my feet wet and this was a firm disappointment.
It's not the worst thing I have ever read but the first one was better and even that was firmly in the range of okay.
The story can be summarized as: Old man who wants to see his wife again will do whatever it takes to do so but decides to go around wasting his time with characters that the author hasn't put any effort into making the reader care about and calling everyone a brat, an idiot, or a bitch.
The characters are bland. The author cannot write character interaction to save his life and they absolutely never develop. The main character is an old man that talks like a thirteen year old that thinks he sounds cool but really just sounds like a moron. The supporting characters are flat and boring, the good ones can be summarized in one word and the bad ones don't even have that.
The plot has been completely lost in this book, opening with a completely irrelvant arc regarding one of the forgettable supporting characters getting married and the 100ish year old man reacting to it like a child. It completely derails the plot and literally everything about the main character's motivations that he has held up until this point. It doesn't matter though because the author throws away any small amount of plot that has been built up across the entire story halfway through this book.
The dialogue is atrocious and uses playground insults and profanity as a filler in an attempt to hide how useless it is. The character interactions don't actually build anything, they don't progress the plot at all, they're not funny or interesting. It's just the main character going about his relationships in a way that is entirely antithetical to everything else the author has laid out regarding his character.
"You have five words to explain yourself before I kill you," says the hundredth evil overlord the main character has met.
"I. Was. Really. Hungry... Bitch," says the old man who is currently on a quest to kill this evil overlord as a favor to another guy he needs to kill. I know it doesn't make sense but let me handwave it away by saying some character development and bonding happened during the twentieth time skip I used so I don't have to actually write it.
The author has lost control of the plot, pacing, and power scale of the enemies by making his main character too powerful early on. In the first book he's tier three and can already topple trees without meaning to. Now he's still in supposedly weak worlds and fighting tier eight dragons and he still expects us to believe it's some acomplishment to get to tier ten and get to the bottom of the world tree which was the entire point of the book before he decided to throw it out.
The grammar isn't all that good. I don't know why people are saying it is. The author mixes up homophones and accidently exchanges words for similarly spelled ones pretty regularly.
All around, I could go on for awhile picking apart plot inconsistencies, weak characters, bad power scaling, and general problems, like the author putting important information into author's notes rather than actually putting the effort in to write that information into the story, but I don't really have the time and I'm already annoyed with how long I stuck with this story as is.
- So I loved the first installment of this series to bits. It was the first book I read on RR and it still holds a special place in my heart. But it wasn't the best book. Torga always seemed to be a flat character to me, and the same for all your other characters. In all honesty your characterization is poor. You make up for it with your imagination, dedication, and imagery though, as well as a healthy dose of wit. Unfortunately I don't have much time at the moment to review but I'm certainly going to read your next book, the average bird one. It sounds exciting! I hope my opinions added onto the others and helped you out, if even a little. Good luck writing!
Once again great book. read it. If you like it you like it and if you don't you don't
I don’t like the characters. They’ve turned too bland. The interactions are pretty bad, a snake wouldn’t ‘scream internally’, wouldn’t misplace his words and the characters wouldn’t point it out so blatantly. The girls are like anime figurines, I can literally here them saying “Kyaa!” Every second phrase. I’ve got no issue with the whole marriage thing since we need some direction to head in, but the deliveries are sloppy. And a really big issue of mine is the entire way you’re handling the snake. He’s a dude who’s 100 years old. He wouldn’t put with the shit of a buch of 20 year old girls, he wouldn’t have a soft spot for anyone other than his Sarah who he lived he’s entire life with and it wouldn’t be out of character to wake up and just leave them.
As an avid fan of the first part, i instanyly bookmarked and favourite. Look forward to another epic journey
You basically took the worse point of your first book and ditched the best to make a second book with those.
The only redeeming quality of your story was the world building and the well done LitRPG and evolution aspects, wich are either non present here or badly done.
And for whatever reason you decided to make the single worse point of your first book, namely the interaction between the one sided robots that you call "characters" take 90% of all chapters up to date (Chapter 11)
You can't do conversation between characters that feel genuine. Everything feels like they are reading off a script in a badly written school theather piece. I can barely keep myself from cringing everytime someone speaks, and i'm usually really tolerant on shit dialogue/characters.
And don't get me started on how uninteresting your characters are, mostly because in your writting style their interactions define them. Did i mention those were absolutely horrible ?
Unless you take time to adress this issue this story is a waste of time.
Honestly, I have read my fair shair of RPG novels,
but I have never read one so perfectly implemented like this. It really fits the genre of weak - strong, and personally I like how this novel doesnt drag on explaining the life of the MC, unlike most novels which take more than 10 chapters before actual plot begins. The only problem I have is that though the integration of Norse cosmology and other beliefs was a nice touch, it became pretty overbearing especially after his ascension. All in all, great story, especially for those who are interested in non-human MCs novels.
I think a lot of this story was great. I am a big fan of both the whole "weak to strong" and reincarnated concepts and this really hit the spot for me. Mind you I was never a big fan of the whole serpent idea but it worked well for how it was done.
That being said I do have a few gripes regarding how this went.
1. I understand the idea of the character being overprotective regarding his family but he ends up being somewhat of a bloodthirsty tyrant and people just ignore this issue because he's too strong to confront and that includes his family and friends. In the begining it makes sense but he literally stops caring about life after a certain point even in matters that don't really involve defending his family.
2. He makes himself sound like he deserved the power so much more than others when he complains about how his friends don't try hard enough to train and grow. He states something along the lines of getting to where he was based on willpower when honestly for most of his evolutions he barely had to do much for it other than know not to settle for second best on the evolutions. His trials and tribulations really don't happen till he challenges the serpent king which he even states was mostly just him fighting his own boredom to maintain his sanity. To be honest up until he became a god he maybe had a total of 20 difficult fights. TBH most of his strength comes from eating and A LOT of his food was Yggdrasil and that didn't fight him back. So did he really earn it?
3. Lastly, I believe his power jump was extremely abrupt and foolish on his part. If him challenging the serpent king was just a 1v1 combat he would have lost immediately but due to plot reasons, he was given a training arc to allow him to not die. This is possibly the biggest plot armor/ rush tactic I've seen in RR. He not only doesn't immediately die from a stupid decision but gets to level from tier 7(?) to godhood because he ate everything.
Overall even with its flaws, it is still a good read to pass the time and I look forward to seeing where it goes. I'm just hopeless when it comes to OP protagonists and you got Brownie points for this not being a harem like every op prot story goes.
Like many others have stated, the main character feels very bland, he seems to instantly kill everyone and his mass-murdering and killing of babies seems to be done just to make him feel edgy.His wife is practically a parasite, who provides nothing to the story, and just creates conflict, I imagine she might of been added earlier because the story was started to be just constant genocide, but it ended up changing nothing and only adding a more unlikeable character, who is very arrogant.All of the past characters, seem to have been completely thrown away, since they have had the slightest of mentions in the latest chapters.