A Snake's Rise

by Kenaren

Original HIATUS Action Fantasy Anti-Hero Lead High Fantasy LitRPG Magic Male Lead Mythos Non-Human lead Reincarnation Strong Lead
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

 

Torga's back and he's hungrier than ever. 

In this second book following Torga's journey, he's going to battle kings, mythical beasts, tyrants, and even gods on his quest to find and protect his wife.

Come join him as he rises to power and becomes a living legend...

(Cover is the creature Torga's body was based on.)

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(Link to the first story-- http://www.royalroadl.com/fiction/13297

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The insane snake handler

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Chapter 23 ago
A note on the Hydra and a Poll ago
Delay ago
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Chapter 26 ago
Chapter 27 ago
Side Story; (Reina's Story) 1 ago
Chapter 28 ago
Reina's Life: Chapter 2 ago
Chapter 29 ago
Chapter 30 ago
Reina's life: Chapter 3 ago
Chapter 31 ago
Chapter 32 ago
Reina's Life: Chapter 4 ago
Reina's life: Chapter 5 ago
Chapter 33: End of Season 1 ago
Season 2: Chapter 1 ago
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S2: Chapter 13 ago
Chapter 14: Epilogue? Part 1 ago
Chapter 15: Epilogue; part 2 ago
Important Poll (Be sure to read description before voting.) ago
Chapter 16: Epilogue?: part 3 ago
Epilogue ago
As one story comes to an end... Another begins. ago
New Story! ago

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Bochinator
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I like everything about this book except for one thing; what started off as a guy who has 300 years to become strong enough to protect his wife has turned into a guy who wants to protect his family and kinda does whatever he feels like. The original goal was he'll kill anyone who gets in his way of growing stronger and protecting her, but now it feels like he's completely forgotten about it. Why does he care about a bunch of 20 year olds? I mean, maybe he likes them, but he calls one of them his daughter? What?

Branded-Tier
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It's not the worst thing I've ever read but it's still not good

Reviewed at: Chapter 1

I'm new to this site so I figured I would read some of the more popular stories to get my feet wet and this was a firm disappointment.

It's not the worst thing I have ever read but the first one was better and even that was firmly in the range of okay.

The story can be summarized as: Old man who wants to see his wife again will do whatever it takes to do so but decides to go around wasting his time with characters that the author hasn't put any effort into making the reader care about and calling everyone a brat, an idiot, or a bitch.

The characters are bland. The author cannot write character interaction to save his life and they absolutely never develop. The main character is an old man that talks like a thirteen year old that thinks he sounds cool but really just sounds like a moron. The supporting characters are flat and boring, the good ones can be summarized in one word and the bad ones don't even have that.

The plot has been completely lost in this book, opening with a completely irrelvant arc regarding one of the forgettable supporting characters getting married and the 100ish year old man reacting to it like a child. It completely derails the plot and literally everything about the main character's motivations that he has held up until this point. It doesn't matter though because the author throws away any small amount of plot that has been built up across the entire story halfway through this book.

The dialogue is atrocious and uses playground insults and profanity as a filler in an attempt to hide how useless it is. The character interactions don't actually build anything, they don't progress the plot at all, they're not funny or interesting. It's just the main character going about his relationships in a way that is entirely antithetical to everything else the author has laid out regarding his character.

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"You have five words to explain yourself before I kill you," says the hundredth evil overlord the main character has met. 

"I. Was. Really. Hungry... Bitch," says the old man who is currently on a quest to kill this evil overlord as a favor to another guy he needs to kill. I know it doesn't make sense but let me handwave it away by saying some character development and bonding happened during the twentieth time skip I used so I don't have to actually write it.

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The author has lost control of the plot, pacing, and power scale of the enemies by making his main character too powerful early on. In the first book he's tier three and can already topple trees without meaning to. Now he's still in supposedly weak worlds and fighting tier eight dragons and he still expects us to believe it's some acomplishment to get to tier ten and get to the bottom of the world tree which was the entire point of the book before he decided to throw it out.

The grammar isn't all that good. I don't know why people are saying it is. The author mixes up homophones and accidently exchanges words for similarly spelled ones pretty regularly.

All around, I could go on for awhile picking apart plot inconsistencies, weak characters, bad power scaling, and general problems, like the author putting important information into author's notes rather than actually putting the effort in to write that information into the story, but I don't really have the time and I'm already annoyed with how long I stuck with this story as is.

ScottishWind
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I don’t like the characters. They’ve turned too bland. The interactions are pretty bad, a snake wouldn’t ‘scream internally’, wouldn’t misplace his words and the characters wouldn’t point it out so blatantly. The girls are like anime figurines, I can literally here them saying “Kyaa!” Every second phrase. I’ve got no issue with the whole marriage thing since we need some direction to head in, but the deliveries are sloppy. And a really big issue of mine is the entire way you’re handling the snake. He’s a dude who’s 100 years old. He wouldn’t put with the shit of a buch of 20 year old girls, he wouldn’t have a soft spot for anyone other than his Sarah who he lived he’s entire life with and it wouldn’t be out of character to wake up and just leave them. 

Shadow Shard
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Thank you author for writing this and thank you for the grate story as it is the story that brought and kept me on this site to read( I first found the site just as the last two chapters of a snakes rise). finally thank you for actually trying to finish something or at least a clean cliff, as opposed to some on this sight ether stoping a good idea for a story after 5-7 chapters or rushing a conclusion to “just end it all already” with no sense of story other then “ this is cool “ or “ throw stuff till it sticks!”. So in conclusion thank you for giving us one of (if not the) best story’s on Royal road as a site.

Grandaddy
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My new drugs have arrived

As an avid fan of the first part, i instanyly bookmarked and favourite. Look forward to another epic journey

Encoded
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Worse than the first book

You basically took the worse point of your first book and ditched the best to make a second book with those.

The only redeeming quality of your story was the world building and the well done LitRPG and evolution aspects, wich are either non present here or badly done.

And for whatever reason you decided to make the single worse point of your first book, namely the interaction between the one sided robots that you call "characters" take 90% of all chapters up to date (Chapter 11)

You can't do conversation between characters that feel genuine. Everything feels like they are reading off a script in a badly written school theather piece. I can barely keep myself from cringing everytime someone speaks, and i'm usually really tolerant on shit dialogue/characters.

And don't get me started on how uninteresting your characters are, mostly because in your writting style their interactions define them. Did i mention those were absolutely horrible ?

Unless you take time to adress this issue this story is a waste of time.

ThePolarBear
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THE SNAKE KING IS BACK BISHES

For Any one wondering, this is the continuation of A Snakes Life, and holy crap its gonna be good. Only the first chapter is out but im already stoked as hell. The authors good and this upcoming book looks like its gonna be crazy good, huge time skip with lots of interesting things that happened during it, overall its going to be great!

grademaster
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Good but had it's faults

Reviewed at: New Story!
  1. So I loved the first installment of this series to bits. It was the first book I read on RR and it still holds a special place in my heart. But it wasn't the best book. Torga always seemed to be a flat character to me, and the same for all your other characters. In all honesty your characterization is poor. You make up for it with your imagination, dedication, and imagery though, as well as a healthy dose of wit. Unfortunately I don't have much time at the moment to review but I'm certainly going to read your next book, the average bird one. It sounds exciting! I hope my opinions added onto the others and helped you out, if even a little. Good luck writing! 
Novice Bladesman
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It's a very good book. Though the main character seems to care less about protecting his wife and more about getting revenge. Despite this, it is still a very good read. Of couse everything could use a bit more work, from characters to dialog to the story but I never expected everything to be absolutly perfect. It is almost impossible to make an absolutly perfect story but this is still very good and I recommend the read.

Namelesswanderer
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Once again great book. read it. If you like it you like it and if you don't you don't