Eternity Online, a military sci-fi GameLit Fiction

Eternity Online, a military sci-fi GameLit Fiction

by NoMan2000

Warning This fiction contains:
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  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content

A recently fired police officer gets a job offer to play the Proxima Universe's new game, Eternity Online.  He's been hired to find out if the son of a CEO is trapped inside one of the numerous proxima World's that have emerged after the "useless class", people like him who have no useful job skills, are wiped out by growing robot and artificial intelligence gains. 

The game creators give him special abilities, but the NPCs in the Universe are suspicious of him, as some parts of his origin backstory do not add up.  He spends most of his time goofing off, until he discovers a secret in the game that has devastating real World consequences. He needs to use the game to find out the answers to what's going on in the real World, but there's a problem.  He has to become the hero that he's been pretending to be.

* Based on the Proxima Universe by Harmon Cooper, with permission.

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Wow, pretty awesome...

This story is an excellent start, with a right balance of action and fast-paced storytelling, in a well-thought-out world that really sticks together coherently. What I thought might lack a twinge might be characterisation. Despite the world being correctly described and delivered, the characters can feel a bit awkward at times; for example, the MC is pretty much freaking out about having an AI in his head at first, but then suddenly forgets about it and decides it is a good idea to keep an android, connected to said AI besides his body when he is in the game? Not to mention EVE is also potentially connected to his apartment's AI... 

All in all, it is a fascinating story with a good but not too good MC, in a weird and dangerous world. And well written also, which is a blessing nowadays apparently...

I recommend this to anyone who wants to have a fun read and is interested in breaking out of the RRL typical high fantasy setting.