Transcendence?

Seen quite a few people write 1 popular story, only to try their hand at another and realize they only ever had the capability for a single story.

Thankfully, you have not only avoided being like these people, you did so without having to strain yourself into an impossible situation as an author.

With Until Death? you created a setting for both the chimeraen world, and the multiverse as a whole. Working on that premise you chose to tell the story of something that happened prior to your last, utilizing a concept that you are already thoroughly versed in and have all the ability to continue building on. Looking forward to future installments.

One of the best fictions on RRL, written by the best writer himself. Now let’s get to the point.

Style: I like the writer’s style of presentation, narration, etc etc more than any other on RRL. 5/5.

Story: Original and the best. 5/5.

Grammar: Not the best but definitely free of errors and mistakes. 4.5/5.

Characters: The best characters ever.. I genuinely mean it. I would infact overrate it if possible. 5/5.

Overall: A master piece, if anyone picks it up, I would not mind buying the manga lol.. 5/5.

To the writer: I worship you.

To the potential readers: Read at your own risk. You’ll end up ruining your day.. Yeah you’ll probably end up skipping on your work to continue reading this.

First of all Thank you for the 'Until Death'. It look like Im going to enjoy this too, 5 star nuff said.

Pretty much every part of the story is greatly to my liking.

the sleightly strange MC and companion(s)

interesting story with a proper thought through world. Meaning you have really taken time to make something out of it.

great grammar.

style is fitting as well. Occasional humor fits in really well too. 

I honestly hope you'll keep writing this for quite some time. Would be awesome if you would even go as far as to go on after they died reincarnate since they're 'soulbound' to one another.

I’ve read both this and until death and I like them so much I occasionally  have to reread them keep up the good work. And keep the flow going.

I give this a hesitant 3 stars.

 Disclaimer

I only managed to read up to chapter 20 before I had to stop and put it down. I couldn't take another moment of that cringe-inducing romance. 

Grammar 

Never really been one to comment on grammar. As far as I am concerned, as long as it is not written in text slang, I am happy. 

No complaints from me on this subject.

Story

As for the story itself, interesting premise. Hardly unique or original but written well,  flows easily and manages to keep you engaged throughout the chapters.

Love it.

Characters 

When Celestial (female main character) comes onto the stage around chapter 10 the story takes a MASSIVE, irrevocable nose dive in quality.

What was a decent reincarnation tale, suddenly becomes a truly cringeworthy rom-com about two immortals. 

Too quickly are they portrayed as teenage brats constantly bickering with each other as they struggle over who has the power in the relationship. I'm assuming the author deliberately intended this in an attempt to give a feeling of  'romantic tension'. However, while I am not opposed to romance in novels the author fails to realise that they went overboard.

Romance needs to be down to earth and realistic in their portrayal. As it helps connect to the characters on a deeper level.

These are two immortals. Don't you think that they could have some modicum of composure, maturity or at least apathy for each other? rather than resorting to childish pranks or drugging? why would they allow to take such treatment from each other in the first place?

It makes no sense and detracts from the overall plot & story flow. 

Ultimately, the story devolves into chapters devoting themselves to discussing how pleased Celestial is about being a gold-digger and how she is going to manipulate the male MC next  - drugging, blackmail etc. 

Ascathon on the other hand, although irritated by her, choses to maintain an aloof nature towards her antics.

Despite previously being portrayed as a character too old and bitter to take crap from anyone.

Like the majority of non-committal male protagonists these days, he soon becomes incompetent and 'pussywiped' for lack of a better term. Unable to retaliate against the superiority & manipulations of the female MC (because all hail the feminist collective). Despite her being the sole antagonistic persona in the first place. She shows no reflection or remorse.

Verdict

It's ok.

. . .

Thats it.

Ok to waste time on a slow day, but don't take it seriously.

If you invest yourself in the characters or story you will only end up tearing your hair out, trying to avoid the cringe inducing sections. I.E. the 'romantic tension'.

You write some amazing stories, don't ever stop or let anyone tell you otherwise.

one of my fav ff, and im looking forward to it everyday.

Story is awesome, grammar is always being fixed and characters all have their flaws... despite the sometimes confusing present tense style it is written in, this author has done an amazing job of creating yet another world that has blown my mind.

mmm... just love it.. thanks for having a new story to share :) your the best Andur