I am Urist

This is a story about a dwarven civilization starting from the ground up. Don't make assumptions just because they're dwarves it will all be mining and forging magical mithril axes of elf splitting. No this story has well researched primitive survival skill usage and low tech civilization building. And by royal road standards the grammar is excellent. You might find errors, but the story still comes across clearly.  But seriously, I hope there is a magical axe of elf splitting in the future. 

Such a waste. I had to drop this about 20 chapters in.

The story is AMAZING when it comes to base building. The details, wow, the details of the process is what I read it for. It's like I am watching my favouring streamer playing Civilization or Age of empire, and I am not bored at all. Every moment, even the bland infodumps are entertaining enough.

The Characters are fine, really. The main character of course is the best written and it's really easy to get into his perspective. The side characters might get a little bland after a while and their names might be confusing (one of them is called Urmom).

The only thing holding this story down so goddamn much is the grammar and all the typos. First few chapters are edited good. Then came the anarchy. Typos in every paragraphs, misplaced prepositions, repeated words, and to finish it off, missing puntuations.

It's atrocious at best after the first 10 or so chapters. I mean, you could argue that it is still 'readable' but when the story is so good all you want to do is enjoy it. Get into the character's head, immerse in their lives.

But here, you need to reserve extra brainpower for EVERY GODDAMN PARAGRAPH (In every sentece when the grammar errors get worse), FOR CHAPTERS AND CHAPTERS to make the the lines understandable, to actually figure out what the author is saying.

This is so much worse here because the story gets into many technical details. And because of the bad grammar you end up not understanding what the author meant. 

Then you start skimming the book.

Then you read ahead.

Then you drop it.

2 stars for grammar.

I have to leave this amazing story with a heavy heart. I was baited by good grammar and amazing storytelling, but good grammar left after a few chapters. 

I read a story to enjoy it. I enjoyed this at first, then I didn't. Because it was so frustrating. I 'wanted' to enjoy it, but with so many typos it broke my immersion every line. I had to reread sentences. 

So I think it would be better for me to move on to the next book. I am pretty certain many other readers are frustrated because of this too. I think taking a few days, even months off to re-edit the chapters would be a good choice. I shall check back in a few months if the story is edited. If not, I bid you sayonara.

P.S: Will increase grammar rating score if the story ever gets edited. Current score for me is, 16.5/4 = 4.125

Really Great conept focused on survival and crafting and shifting slowly too leadership and kingdom building 

Grammar is readable but gets better the first 40 Chapters need editing. 

The research that went into it is really incredible a lot of stuff is logical and there are always explanations why you are whit the Character as he makes the decision. 

Im no expert survivalist and a lot of the survival stuff could be wrong but it reads great and has internal logic and the author gets better first chapters are good but not great it gets better the Characters find themselves i really like the Dwarfs they start as children and dtard there journey to dwarfhut first the food then the booze and metal and hopefully to the great underground cities 

The main characters are becoming better only the other 8 starting dwarfs are a little bland and due to the naming a littel confusing 

Overall a great story with a lot of potential

(current chapter D11-P2)

I love the way this story has been going so far, while the grammer needs a little work i personally think itll get better with time. The story has great pacing and the characters so far are built up great, gives the feeling of being game like without drowning it in LitRPG tropes so prevalent on the site.

Good story. Good premise. Intresting plot. Well researched. Creative. Not bad language use.

only fault is flat characters (stereo types) (somewhat unrealistic thought processes / conversations.) but that is not the main draw to the story so it's still more than readable.

So, I'm a huge fan of dwarf fortress and immediatly had to click on this story, the urist name drew me in but a good story kept me coming back

The story is good in some aspects and not so much lacking on others like grammar and such; nothing an editor could fix. 

Differs in other civilization fictions as the author introduces a system that hastens the process of 'evolving' into a proper society (in my definition of course). 

Give it a try i know you won't regret it.

Amazing world building.

great story telling. 

no information dumps, no aspect that will leave you uninterested.