Dungeon Quest Online

by Balr0g

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Fantasy LitRPG Magic Male Lead Strategy Strong Lead Virtual Reality

Tristen Alexander is a GameMaster and Techno-Genius that sets his sights on creating technology to bring players into a fully immersive game world. A game modeled after Dungeon Quest, an epic fantasy board-game he and his friends played religiously through childhood.

Can he create the technology to achieve this feat?

Will his pursuit of a self-aware Artificial Intelligence culminate in the evolution of a sentient digital life form to create his game world?

Ultimately, can he really bring his favorite pastime to life and truly experience the life of his character?

Follow along with Tristen as he sets out on a journey capable of changing the world!

 
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njt07
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I like this story so far. The back story fleshed out the charactors more than the norm on this site and blended well with the actual story.

there are some timeline areas the author may wish to revisit on a future rewrite, or at least explain away. The  speed of the AI and neural chip development and the single handed founding of his company being the main areas. 

There are some grammatical issues as well as word choice, but nothing that would make a reader stop.

I look forward to reading more chapters!

LtDan12
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Really enjoy watching this story come together, some of the characters seem very familiar, almost as if I had met them before. Keep up the great work. I can not wait until the final product comes out.

Jenn7983
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I’m very much enjoying reading this book. It opens my imagination to new ideas of possibilities that I never considered could exist. I’m looking forward to the completed copy. 

Jenn79831
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I’m really enjoying reading this book. The characters are interesting and have a history and I love that. The cute little crushes that the 2 have are perfect and innocent. The friendship and bond shared are flawless and the incorporation into adulthood to share the experience they once had as kids into an advanced scene is perfect. 

ivoSF
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so far really interesting, i do hope some table top based fighting will hapen next.

Aayush Bhattarai
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Author God tier for world building

this is what i comment in one of the chapters about how i feel about this novel upto  chap 10.dont get discouraged by lengthy explanation cuz that needed later on  to get reapect for author like i do.

...everything else gets 10/10 from ..u are such a beast.I hope you becomes great like ypur mc in real world of novels and i can feel great when i see you looking at this novel looking at past and act just like when our mc thought and imagined how vowed for AI of his dream and S.A.I calling him father and you calling this novel your son.I get this absolute reaction and feelings.this is what we came for not fight or anything cuz every readers can imagine that but cant properly give a character a personality and make it realistic throwing away stuff like cliches and booring characters and just power up styles. I thank you for this novel and i wont say it was good ride cuz first arcs of building and real life was too descriptive but now i can feel it was necessary to get a feeling like what i did reading this.

DarkAether
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I must admit that I was surprised when i discovered that this series didn't either give us this sob story about how horrible their life is and how their game pays for them, or completes them. Neither does this series just immediatly jump us into the game, instead it literally takes 11 CHAPTERS!!!! and you know what.......... it was worth every one of those :) Now as for the starting 11 chapters instead of the before mentioned sob story that vrmmo's normally try to sell us Balr0g instead show's us how our mc builds up everything he needs in order to make vrmmo possible, all just to be able to play with his friends.

Now on another note if Balr0g every decides to go through the hassel of trying to put a completed book onto Amazon I gotta admit I would buy that book in a heartbeat.

HamsterDesTodes
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review as of chp 21-Slow pace is an understatement

 A tad too wordy for my taste. Everything before chapter 13.5 is basically one big prologue that doesnt do a lot for the actual story. I skipped vast parts of the various chapters.

Even when the game fiiinnnaaallllly begins, we get 6(!) chapters of shoping around for a tiny amount of starter gear.
Then 2 chapters of actual action and there we are. chapter 21. The End (for now)

I hope the author is in good health, because he'll need to live to a ripe old age to finish his story at that speed.