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WARNING - This story is moving to Amazon slowly but surely. The later chapters are remaining so up-to-date readers can continue to enjoy new chapters. There are 5 chapters, 10,000 words, at the start to inform a reader whether they want to take the plunge. After that, the reader will need to go to Amazon to access the rest of book one. This will also happen with book two soon.

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Daedalus encompasses Etana Daedo's early years and his first steps within the Fortescue Military Academy where he forges friendships and alliances which will last a lifetime. The story takes place within a futuristic, dystopian earth in the year 2142 and explores concepts such as the rise and impact of robot labour and artificial intelligence.

The story follows him, his friends and enemies while they attend Fortescue Military Academy where they learn to build and fight with exos at the first year cadet level. The young cadets are primarily concerned with their academic and competition success within the academy.

Each squadmate is special in some way, it's up to Cadet Daedo to unlock their potential in order to facilitate the success of their squad.

The Squad will evolve as they age and progress through year levels at the Academy, they have the potential to be the best mech engineers and pilots the world has ever seen but will they be ready to defend planet earth by the time they graduate?

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Promise: NEVER DROPPED.
This work is a life goal for the Author.
Even if I have overlong breaks. I will return!

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Winged Thing
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Mechs, Exo Suits and Sci-Fi done right!

This novel is worth your time and you owe it to youself a read if you like one or all of the following:
-AI
-Mech
-Sci Fi
-Good Fiction

It may seem slow to start for some, but I enjoyed it from it's start to where it is currently. Authour has some things he can improve on but it's as close to a perfect novel as you'll find.

Vaati
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I enjoy the world and characters this author has created. Mecha stuff is pretty dope. I like how detailed he gets with it.

I am a big sci-fi buff so whenever royal road gets a good one its always a treat.

There were about four months where the author went AFK, and I was pretty sure this was dead, but he is back, and I'm glad he is.

Update 09/12/2019

It has been three months since this novel has gotten a new chapter. I hope the author will come back one day, but I am not holding out hope. As it stands, this is a dead novel which is unfortunate as it was terrific.

 

Daedalus is a good read, but as it stands, I have to revise my rating until/if the author comes back and also proves a consistent release schedule as this is the second time he has left readers in the dark.

 

 

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Suspension of disbelief can only go so far

Despite being well written and with a compelling, intricately crafted world as a backdrop, you'd have to stretch your suspension of disbelief very far in order to take this story at face value. I was unable to do that. 

Some egregious examples:

-12 year olds caught up to current technological and scientific progress to the point of innovating/advancing those fields. (even if you're a supergenius, there's hundreds of years of science to catch up to)

-12 years developing technologies in days and weeks that billion dollar companies didn't  in ~40 years of mech technological development.

-12 year olds running a corporation, and making deals with other corporation, and being taken seriously by adults, and signing deals worth billions of dollars.

-12 year olds physically outperforming teenage kids several years their senior. 

 

-Despite being aware of an impending invasion for decades, for some stupid and incomprehensible reason the EU government has absolutely no military funding whatsover. I believe the value quoted is .25% of gdp? So 20x less than the current OECD average during the most peaceful period in human history.

-Instead, all military funding is done through tax credits to corporations(wat), who themselves get to maintain standing armies(wat x2) and those corporations publicly intend to fuck off the planet asap. 

Which of course leaves the 12 year old wunderkids to to step in and save the world! Yeah, this story is not for me at all. 

 

(i could actually see myself liking this story if it wasn't so unbelievable. The writing is good, the characterization is decent, except for Daedo (who became good at everything, even the things that he is stated to suck at), and the setting is for the most part very interesting and well imagined. I'll keep an eye on this authors next project, maybe it will be more to my liking)

Totchaa
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The writing is good, and the grammar is not perfect but pretty good for this site. I’ve also been craving some good sci-fi stories, so I was hopeful when reading the positive reviews of this story. Alas, as often happens on this site I feel like the reviews are way too positive without a single critical mention.

My problem with the story is the characters. Not in their behavior or depth because I think that the characters are well described with different backgrounds and personalities that makes them interesting. The problem I have, which makes it impossible for me to get immersed in this story, is that they are 12 and 13 years old. Every time they do something genius, know how to build a railgun, super advanced AI or whatever I just can’t ignore that they are 12 and 13 years old. They seem to just be born with these concepts already in their heads because I don’t know how else they would have time to learn it all, even if they are super genius children. It takes decades to learn the things these children know about math, science and technology. Their personalities do not match their said age.

Maybe had the story taken place later, maybe at a University, which would make more sense since it’s a military school anyway. Then the setting would be more fitting, and it would make more sense for these people to know how to build these things if they are geniuses.

Since the setting is so alien and I have such a hard time getting immersed I had to stop at chapter 25. I don’t think I will be able to continue this story unfortunately.

 

 

manhw
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Story itself is decent with flaws, and many other reviewers talked more in detail about it.

However one thing I believe that is overlooked is the egregious behaviour of the author. It is literally his standard operating procedure to disappear off the face of the earth for 6-7 months depending on his mood, which makes this story pretty horrible for those expecting any sort of consistency.

Let's also not mention the author's greed. I once subscribed to his patreon when this story was at its first 100~ or so chapters. He was making more than $4000-5000 a month from patreon at that time, going past his patreon goal of full time writing.Until he just disappeared for 6 months and naturally people stopped paying him.

When he returned, he started to put things on amazon while removing it from other platforms, in order to milk his supporters for more money. Until yet another disappearance. Suffice to say, you shouldn't expect anything from the author.

BocaDeSiri
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Really enjoying this story! I like how the backstories of the characters deliver the resources for the team to progress. Really looking forward to where this goes. Good Job!

Leser
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I just didnt want to put it down.

Really great story

i like the Charakters even if the main Character is a bit too Op with his A.I. After the first 40 Chapters it gets alot better. I also felt like the autor knows his sience.  The writing is great. I especially like the team that gathered in squad Zero they each have a lot more personality than most other non protagonist on this site.

I read a lot and it is one of the great ones on the internet. If you put it on amazon i buy it .

 

 

camperbee
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Its just too good

My bet would be that this could actually be adapted to an anime or whatever

its just too good

 

it has story, style, spyce and everything nice

No problems with grammar

so what are you waiting for?

read it right now..it wont be long until it reaches top 10 fictions

renoraider
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Excellent potential, not so excellent grammar.

To be brief, the idea for the story, the theme, and overarching plot are both interesting and well thought out. The approach to the academy system and the nitty-gritty when it comes to the tech and scientific aspects of the story are one of its main highlights.

However, the grammar suffers horrendously. Not in the manner of errors or the like, but to how it's used. This also bleeds into the characters and how they are portrayed. Take Daedo for instance. His intelligence and talent can be attributed to a personality and persona akin to Ender from Ender's Game, considered a genius and prodigy at such a young age. But the dialogue leaves much to be desired. One moment he speaks with little to no contractions and endearingly similar to Spock. Then all of a sudden he says 'hell' and calls his dad 'old man' like some 21st century suburban teen. It's utterly frustrating considering most of the squad ends up talking like this. Even Barran, who's supposed to be more laid back and normal in attitude speaks like a perfectionist in an English language course.

Another hang up I have is that every so often the sentence just runs on long enough or haphazardly enough that some form of punctuation is required much less a comma such that it feels like you're speaking on and on. And if you paid attention it's kinda like my previous sentence

So overall I'd give the fic a 3.5. Awesome theme and excellent detail curbed by atrociously lackluster approach to grammar.

Grayshade
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Story just pulls you in.

No errors found. Interesting story. Weird but likable MC. Side characters are interesting as well.