Dragon, Silver Dragon

by MArienach

Original COMPLETED Adventure Fantasy LitRPG Magic Male Lead Non-Human lead Reincarnation Strategy Strong Lead Supernatural

Michael has a few problems... besides being dead... ish...

He finds himself in a new world. In a new body.

 But with a few more appendages than he is used to and the concept of near immortality facing him, he is having a rather hard time coping. Luckily, the body's ex-tenant is there to help.

 

(Should have started here first. The story is being updated and revised. There will be several chapters added and Revelations will be incorperated into it as well. Revelations will then be removed.)

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Psiioniic
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Review as of chapter 16:

 

A great story with lots of potential. The story seems vague and rather clichéd through the first few chapters, which could be attributed to the author developing the direction of the arc and writing style dynamically. That said, the author does a wonderful job of telling his story without becoming too detail oriented. He really captures the combination of a modern human viewpoint on cultural issues with a dragon's aloof nature and disregard of time.

 

The characters are well thought out, left be developed as the story progresses. No character exposition overload,  as befits the point of view of a being who cares little for small details. Instead of focusing on everything, focus is limited to the wider scope, giving a dragon's eye view of events.

 

I look forward to seeing where the author takes this. Grammar is great for someone without an editor, although small mistakes exist. Usage of complex literary devices and high level writing is minimal, made up for by the exceptional grasp on viewpoint, scale, and scales.

 

Update as of finish:

 

A fundamentally different story to many on royalroadl.com. Most focus on the minute, the details, the soul razing journey from point to point. Instead, a a wide angle approach is taken leaving a finished story halfway between a skimmed epic and a fable-esque amalgam of morals and ideas.

 

While a great read, the story feels slightly rushed. It feels like we never leave the "civilization manager" view except for a couple pithy tidbits. Expansions with minor adventures and mishaps beyond simple engineering and ruling would not havehgone amiss. That said, it is a complete story. Few authors have a clear ending in mind when they write, and despite the accelerated pacing it shows for the better. Well done.

iLikeToast
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If you are looking for a quick, highly enjoyable read then this is for you. seriously it had me captivated the whole time.

Story:

The story is centered arround a human becomming an OP dragon and basically trying to make life interesting. The story hooked me as soon as i heard he was the strongest dragon in existence, what can i say? im a simple man. It continued to amuse me throughout the story ranging from the humorous moments or just the over all fuzzy felling it gives off. As mentioned the story is more of a happy, light-harted story that leaves you craving for the next chapter.

Grammar:

Overall grammar is good enough that i can read sentences and understand them without having to look back at them. Few and far-between spelling mistakes. The only thing that i didnt like was that the paragraphs where just one big clump of writing that made it a daunting and confusing task to read and had me sometimes looking at it agian because i lose my place. 

Characters:

The Main Character is a simple one really; a happy person (Dragon) that only wishes to unite all the races and do something different from the whole 'fear the dragons' kinda thing.

The main character has a goal, Motivation and personality wich is enough for me.

Side Characters: 

This is one of the weakpoints of the story. The side characters dont feel real and are just agreeing to everything the MC does and says, And  they dont really have any progression throughout the story. Overall MOST characters feel a bit bland but with that said some are unique and i can understand the task of creating personalities for the charcaters especially if you are only writng as a hobby.

Overall I enjoyed this series enough for me to make my first reveiw on so yea... 

if you've read up to here Thanks :) and what are you doing? go and read the damn story already!

 

 

Fillear
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Nice story but... I dislike how dragon followers readily accepted his ideas and world view without any misunderstanding and disagreement.

Tywami
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This has been one of my favorite stories on rrl (I couldn't get more specific, I was unconfident in my ability to show its true awesomeness) though I am pretty sad to see it end so soon ;-;

idanallmighty
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You ever wonder how the old dragon emperor got his kingdom in all of the stories? The ones that prospered till he left? This is how, and it is written beautifully

tenqui
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This is an absolutely fabulous story.  It explored a creature (dragon) that all of us are familiar with, but in a completely new and unique way.  The story is cohesive and well written.  The characters and interaction are fantastic.

The best way to put it for me is this.  I try and write fiction also, I hope one day to reach this stories level.

Great job!

callmesteve
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Interesting and good food for thought.

What do you do when you have become the most powerful being known? Not that much. What can even cause you problems, after all?

A fascinating, somber reminder of the need for challenge, and a dragon's path toward the more subtle joys of life, such as massive terraforming. laughing

I find the idea of easily mastering (well, already knowing) all the OP stuff and needing to learn the simpler spells an interesting take.

 

I remove a star because of the sad ending and the bonk-fests that happen in later chapters. (Edit)

It really isn't a surprise, but I still feel bad. Still, aren't Elves immortal or next-best thing? How large WAS that time-skip?

Raile21
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I am a writer in RRL that write a Dryad in a scifi setting and I found this story to have a charm of its own. 

The story have a lord of the ring feel to it combined with the dragons from the book Eragon so it does have more of a fantasy charm with a dash of modern day sensibilities and ideas common to the typical self-insert or transported to another world type of stories which can be often found in RRL.

The most challenging part in writing an OP character is that often the story would have no meaning as everything the MC do would be guaranteed to succeed. However this story achieved it by setting up an empire from scratch not through strength but mainly from working together with the weaker races even if doing it through power would be simpler and easier. The story teaches that power without guidance or purpose are wasted in the world.

As the author have announced his intention to make a sequel of this story, I wish him luck. As I know that it is very difficult for a story to progress if the MC already has everything and is at the peak of his power. At that point there is only stagnation as the MC have now reached the ceiling. Even if the MC travel to another world, and have to make another empire from scratch, there is no point making the same story twice by repeating what he have already did.

If I have to give recommendation for the sequel of this story I would recommend for the MC to be transported some time to the future where his empire is in ruins in order to rebuild after a civil war. Or have an extra terrestrial threat to the empire in the form of monstrous swarm like the Zerg or Tyrannids or a hyper advanced machine like the Reapers from Mass effect or Necrons.

Also, it would be nice to have a space in between sentences as it made reading easier when there is a clear separation between each point the author is trying to make.

 

Boubouh
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Nice and interesting story

The story is really good. It has an interesting theme about what to do when nothing can stand in your way and I found that it was well told.

It just needs proofreading and layout editing. And maybe more fleshing for the side characters.

PS : Some people might find that the sexual relationship(s) came about a little abruptly. And it is just mentioned as "entertainment" for those who are spooked by the sexual content warning.

rapidReader
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This was an excellent story, my only complaint being that it was over far too fast. From start to finish, it took two years in the book for the endgoal to be achieved.

Excellent read, I look forward to the second.