A Virus Life For Me

by tenqui

Original COMPLETED Action Adventure Comedy Fantasy Magic Non-Human lead Reincarnation

Poor Mark just cannot catch a break.  First he dies saving another person and is summoned in front of the "Overbeing".  The "Overbeing" gives Mark choices for his next reincarnation due to his selfless act.  However, all is not as it seems.  Just before being sent off to experience his next life as an evolver Mark overhears another person talking to the "Overbeing".  It seems Mark was somehow a threat to the "Overbeing" and was eliminated and sent on his way before he could cause problems.  Now that Mark knows what happens he vows to attain enough power to overcome the "Overbeing" and thus fulfill what he was eliminated for in the first place.  However, to do that he must master his evolver abilities and make it through a new world where magic and monsters are real.

Man reincarnates into a simple virus.  Must figure out how to evolve into more dangerous and significant things.  Hijinks, hilarity, and hopefully action occur along the way.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Death and Rebirth ago
1 - Becoming A Virus ago
2 - The Infection Spreads ago
3 - Call To War ago
4 - Chimera Achieved ago
5 - Mana Rainbow ago
6 - Evolution Is Fun To Do ago
7 - My Progress Goes Viral ago
8 - Magic ago
9 - I Can See ago
10 - Teleportation Success ago
11 - Bugs Can Be Cool Too ago
12 - My First "Real" Battle ago
13 - Back to Basics ago
Announcement (Good One) ago
14 - Dying is NOT Fun ago
15 - Starting Over ago
16 - Training And Exploring ago
17 - Honey Trap ago
18 - Sweet Plans ago
19 - Beepocalypse ago
20 - Level UP ago
21 - King Of The Pond ago
22 - Moving On ago
23 - Magic Makes Things Easier ago
24 - Goblin Extermination ago
25 - Plains Hunter ago
26 - Mountain Man ago
27 - Mysterious Cave ago
28 - Dungeon Dive ago
29 - Dungeon Boss ago
30 - Choices and Grinding ago
31 - Meeting The Neighbors ago
32 - Solo Is Much Easier ago
33 - Idiot Ivan ago
34 - Final Challenge ago
35 - Senior Level ago
36 - Mantis In The Big City ago
37 - Vulcan Academy ago
38 - Impressing The Teachers ago
39 - Finding a Mentor ago
40 - Headmaster's Tasks ago
41 - Gearing Up ago
42 - Miss Helen's Training ago
43 - Getting Stronger ago
44 - Training and New Spells ago
45 - End of Training ago
46 - Demi-God Level ago
47 - Power Up ago
48 - Tournament Time ago
49 - Tournament Ranking ago
50 - Deity World ago
51 - Merit Debt ago
51 - Merit Debt ago
52 - Back Too My Roots ago
53 - Mystery Of God Power ago
54 - Breaking A Monopoly ago
55 - Leveling Up Again ago
56 - Universe Level Spell ago
57 - Revenge!!! ago
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Acheron Cynbel
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A gaming system with a story attachted

As with the last story this one falls into the same trend. The only character development is in stats. The characters whole personality so far is "Look new stats."

There could have been some interesting adventures he had while he was a virus, evolving into some tiny little thing inside a magical creature and fighting other things like himself instead it was sleep stats sleep stats sleep some more. 

I see a LOT of potential with the ideas you have but you really need to work on not using your gaming system as a crutch for writing. As for right now, you are not writing a story with a gaming system in it but a gaming system with a story attached.

G4merSylver
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I really can't work out a better score here.

You might notice that the stars and the overall score *really* don't match up right? I'll explain, but let's get to the four ranked categories.

Regarding style and grammar, tenqui has a decent style. His style established across KOTH and it stuck along, the style of yours works fine to describe happenings - I really enjoy the 'reports' you write, finely crunched down and rarely going overboard with the information dumps. However the immersion during action scenes are … *lacking,* if worded mildly. It might be a little exciting but I never got a sensation of epicness or another strong emotion from your writing - I hope you'll gain enough experience to convey these as well.

Character wise I don't have all that much of a complaint. Character has established himself … I wouldn't call that one character (*hint* *hint* **ONE!!!**) shallow, but as a consequence of your style they are a little … two dimensional. Try to convey emotions more, focus on finer details and see that you don't make the mistake of turning your supporting characters into background noise. You don't need a FOV to clearly define a character - experiment around.

Now … The mystery where your 1.5 points in score vanished to. The thing here is, first: why 3.5 - I took away half a point here because it is an overused cliché. I always reserve one of the five story stars for the Uniqueness of a story. You got half the score for taking the virus route though. The other *missing* star however … is because you didn't stick with it. It took away one star from the story rating **and** made me drop the rating to what you see up there - you would be around 4.0 if it wasn't for the route you took towards the latter chapters (12 at this point.)

**Note that beneath this point it'll contain story specific spoilers.**

You had a virus theme. But you decided to add "flesh" to it. Control of the creatures. Having a real body. It really broke the magic of the story for me, I adored the thought of you sticking to a theme like you did in KOTH and not abruptly jumping genres, *I thought we'd get Plague Inc as a story!* That's what makes this rating significantly lower then the others.

Of course it is reflecting my own thoughts here, I don't know whether others share the same sentiment as I do but I think it'll reflect on the vote count.

It's up to you to decide what you'll do with those numbers that'll appear.

Anyway, in case a reader got to this point I suggest for you take a look at the story. Don't let my score deter you.

Necessity
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Bland, non-virus, basicly immortal life

Spoiler-ish

Starts Okay, guy dies for a dumb-ass reason and becomes a virus.

Guy basicly evolves out of virus and throws that part away.

Goes to school but does nothing and learns nothing.

Secondary characters are not proactive but are very responsive, info-dump machines.

Gets no power up for evolving into divine race.

Then leaves for deity world... well he made no great connections, so who knows if he will ever be back.

More indepth, more Spoiler-ish:
Lord Joyde
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I just have one complaint...

"A VIRUS life for me"

Virus is wrong.

"A VIRAL life for me."

This is the correct version. Unless the title is meant to be a pun in a bun, then I'm just a jackass. :D

Eitherway, good story.

Aselo
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As of chapter 6 this story is very interesting. It has no grammar errors that I remember from when I read it yesterday which means any errors were minor enough to be forgotten. I also like the title every time I read it I think of "it's a pirate's life for me. I don't know whether that was intentional, but it is still funny.

Gigatony
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I'm a big fan of LitRPG ! (even if the tag is missing...)
I've seen all sort of non-human MC and i'm bored of goblins, dungoens and slimes.
But a virus in a fantasy world ? The concept is really enticing me.

Its a bit too early to judge but i want this story to flourish and encourage the author to keep going with it to see the end product, so i will give it 5 stars for now and give the score it deserves when it will reach a decent number of chapters to rate it.

Good luck.

Pierre le loup
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I really loved king of the mountain and I hope I will also love this one.The idea of a virus is not overuse so it let people wonder about what will happen next. For the moment we don't have a lot of information on the character but he has a lot of potential. I really waited for a story like this and the one I saw were dropped and I know that the author doesn't drop story so I'm truly happy. Five star just for the potential. Sorry for grammar.

crasher32
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good job mate this is a pretty good story and i've only read the first chaps

good luck and god speed

monoliith
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Chapter 7 and looking great!

Looking really good say far (as of ch. 7). I loved King of the Mountain. Can't wait to see what you do with a Re:

Be careful, most of the Re: stories i've read all end up stagnating after making the MC so overpowered they have trouble with the story. Then again, you did that in KotM and it was great all the way to the finish!

M8D3
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i am enjoying this new story as much as I did the previous one and look forward to seeing where it goes.