Original HIATUS Fantasy Reincarnation Strategy
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The story of someone named DK.

 

 

PS: Feel free to inform me of any mistakes, english is not my mother tongue.

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Unique idea that needs alot of work

The idea itself so far is unique, 

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 but the grammar and spelling itself is just plain horrible, it makes it hard to really see the true story as the spelling makes it so hard to read. It distracts from the story when the author is spelling thought as tought and really as realy. It has the spark of an amazing story, it just needs TONS of editing. With a change of some words, correcting the spelling and then change of some sentence structure i can see this story truely becoming popular. It would help the charecter development and would improve the grammer and style by leaps in bounds, then it would make it easier for the unique story idea to pop out