Endless Online: Oblivion's Blade (LitRPG)

by MH Johnson

Original DROPPED Action Adventure Fantasy Sci-fi Cyberpunk LitRPG Magic Male Lead Portal Fantasy / Isekai Reincarnation Strong Lead Virtual Reality
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Author's Note: Thank you all so much for your incredible support, it means so much to me! Great news, Endles Online books 1&2 are now out on Amazon and Kindle Unlimited! 

In the meantime, the story continues in Book 3, link here!

Please note that I do plan on pulling this story down on 4/25/18! I am giving a week's 'heads up,' so anyone who wants to finishe reading the first two stories on RoyalRoadL can. Of course, if you were to check it out or leave a review on Amazon when it comes out, I would be EXTREMELY grateful! - As always, thanks for checking out my work, and have an awesome week!

Endless Online - Book 1: Oblivion's Blade (A LitRPG adventure)

 

Val had returned from his latest tour of duty maimed and scarred in body and soul. At an age when most kids were still in college, he had been fighting for his life in global hotspots no government official would dare admit to, with crippling wounds and horrific memories his only rewards for services diligently rendered. Barely able to walk and drugged to the gills for pain, he thought his killing days were finally behind him.

 

He couldn't have been more wrong.

 

Endless Online, a hyper futuristic game where players could truly live another life. Val's friend couldn't resist the siren call to embrace that thrill and when she turns up missing, Val knew it was time for one last covert mission, only to find that the game was far more than it seemed. Far from being the masters of this grand new game of epic space battles, wizards, warriors, and intergalactic conquest, the people of Earth were about to become its greatest prize.

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Sir Bronn
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The author writes in a very unique way, unlike the vast majority of other authors I’ve seen on Royalroad. Why some who appreciate the finer attentions to details and thoughts can resonate with this story, I am sure others will not be so inclined. 

The style is what sets in apart. Long descriptions and analogy’s onto why the main character feels the way he does, and why he acts the way he does. Vivid storytelling on his background, on what makes him who he is, and placed in appropriate parts in the story that support how he acts in the present. 

The style has a tendency to get too descriptive, or better yet, too through. It’s something I certainly resonate with, but I can understand why it may alienate some possible readers. On a website where the fast paced LitRPGs and the slightly different than the next dungeon story thrives, Johnson’s narrative is set a little to far apart. 

The story itself is one that churns the imagination of the reader. One that brings alongs emotions that they can only understand if they had felt it before. While I am not a huge LitRPG fan, finding the trope to be largely overused as a crutch for a lazier authors work, I sense Johnson has a larger scheme in the works. His world leaves endless possibilities in the future, a world of both the modern and magical. A world of races abound, each with their own histories and complexities that set them in the changing society of the planet. Something I can appreciate to be sure, and if it was any other author, I would say it would be next to impossible to fully integrate the possible cultural complexities without making readers feel like there reading from a textbook. Though based off what I’ve seen so far, I believe Johnson to be able to pull together vital details that will not only lengthen his story, but engage with his audience as well.

The grammar is easily above the norm on the site, with only a few typos that could be counted on one hand.

The character is excellent, though I must admit I am biased. I come from a largely military family, and even the simple interactions between father and son bring back memories of my own. Certainly through different circumstances, Johnson’s ability to capture readers feelings and experiences into ways they can connect with his main character is commendable. The main character is great, though you have a long road ahead of you. Building characters that are influenced by their own thoughts and experiences becomes even more important of a task every chapter your main character grows, but I think you will be fine.

 

Please excuse my possible grammar and writing mistakes as I just typed this all up on my phone.

zapking5
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Interesting Ideas, but Poor Characters and Style

I enjoyed some of the worldbuilding and magic, but the story had some problems that made me drop it near the start of book 2.

Character development was not apparent, to the point that they felt noticeably stagnant and shallow.

The various scene breaks, dreams, and flashblacks were confusing and there were far too many of them.

FalseLuck
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Really good story, I suggest you read to at least chapter 12.

 

I ended up dropping it because the character interactions really bothered me.

Dawn Sky
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Incredibly dissapointing bait and switch

The story starts of with a lot of potential. It is well written and the MC is interesting, a former black ops soldier now crippled and struggling with the pain of his injuries to his body and soul.

The story peaks at around chapter 6-7 when he is desperatly trying to survive against what seems to be an otheworldly being of immense power.

Then we enter the bait and switch. He barely escapes by doing something rather insane, and his body is reformed on another planet, nothing spectacular but acceptable none the less (and ofcause the girl he was trying to save gets taken away from him at the last second so she can be tortured until MC can save her again because retarded plot) except it is no longer the MC.

The veteran soldier is completely gone and in his place we get some angsty teenage bitch. But if that wasn't bad enough we also get 4 incredibly annoying, very pointless and very two dimentional side characters forced onto us.

I am increddibly disappointed, although i still reccomend reading up to the end of chapter 7.

dan.paulus
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Thoroughly enjoyed it.  Took me a few chapters to really get into it, but it has great imagery and is cleverly written

Dreamheart_Dragon
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I normally don’t bother to review or just forget to, but this story is so good that I felt it unjust to not review it.

Style: the style is unique in that it is a story that can be very dark and gritty and in times of fights and darkness it slightly flows like a song or poem without overdoing it. It almost seems to revel in those dark moments. It echos some of the themes of the story well.

Story: The story is hardcore. Dark and gritty in a very realistic way without being needlessly depressing. It instead has themes of embracing inner darkness and harnessing and moving past it. It also has may world mechanics and aspects that are unique for a litrpg and even fantasy and sci-fi novels, and blends all the genres marvelously. It makes it truly captivating.

Grammar: haven’t noticed any issues that would break immersion in the slightest.

Character: A very engaging character that comes off as very real with real struggles and issues. Only suggestion I have is to add more of his murdane habits and mannerisms.

Overall: ^see review title.

Fhaedra
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Amazing story, very wellwritten. Recommend Reading it!

Mattaj
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I will be honest, after reading the first couple chapters I wanted to drop this story due not being to my taste but I couldn't. It was simply to good, too much of addiction that made you want to read more. Sometimes I enjoyed it, sometimes I hated it.

I finished first book and a little bit more than 10 chapters in book 2 and I must say that this is a pretty good story. Fairly dark but not too much. It feels like it gets lighter in second book but I am not sure how it will end. Characters and the world are pretty good, believable and some aspects of world building explains different things that occur in other stories like how technology usually cannot exist together with magic which is pretty interesting. And good grammar to top it all produces a good book that may be enjoyed by many.

Long chapters mean lots of time required to read which on daily basis I do not posess so I decided to be happy with what I read and give my thanks to author but I am sorry that I will not follow this story as it develops. I wish you (author) the best of luck and for all the readers, have fun!

isomin
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This fiction truely has the potential to become one of the most popular on the site, certainly after a bunch more chapters are released and it attracts the attention of the binge-readers.

So far the story has managed to pay incredible attention to detail, as well as moving at a pace that would satisfy most readers. Some may find certain sections too drawn out which can be excrutiating for a novel that is released chapter by chapter, but most should be satisfied.

The characters so far have been likeable (or if their character is meant to add some conflict, the perfect mix of a cautious asshole who is only looking after their friends) and all contain that essential hint that there is more to them than we see which would make for some fun exposition later.

So far, it has been really enjoyable and I hope this continues.

 

 

NelttjeN
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Even the parts of the story that I usually find boring, grab hold of me in a way I can't put it down. 

Showing how broken he is, how dark and without hope. A broken heroic spirit, given up on himself yet still struggling to aid others at great personal cost...

Thank you for the story