Dawnlands, A New Beginning

Dawnlands, A New Beginning

by Grimbo

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Energetic Entertainment, The most popular game company in the world,  decide to upgrade their popular and  longest running  virtual world game by introducing a greater reality into it, along with  groundbreaking access hardware, never before seen, or expected. Gordon "Gordo' Rammidge, the original games longest playing person and also its number one player receives an unexpected job offer to serve, yet again, as a beta tester to some  unreleased technology within the new game platform.

Having to restart from the beginning, while his fellow player keep their old characters, will Gordo manage to regain his prized number one position, and will he be able to survive a year testing this  new hardware......

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Cogcro
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Just binged through the first 15 chapters and am throughly impressed. The story takes unique spin on the LITRPG style with a underpowered main character who is slowly clawing his way to power. The world from what I have read so far has been thought out with a couple foreshadowing points already being dropped. Altogether the story shows great potential and the best part about it is the lack of grammatical errors. I am really looking forward to where this story goes!

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Minor story spoilers. Read at your own rist.
 
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Dragon8495
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 Writing is good, no blatant mistakes, interesting premise and story so far.

Ash Dread
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A good start for all you grammar ninjas

Only through chapter 3 so far. The action is written well and dialogue is easy to follow. A basic world build through the chapters I have read. Not enough yet to tell if I like the characters but a lot better then whats out currently.