Jack at World of Syntaria

by 7dcris

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content

Story Completed! (Not sure how to tag as complete yet)

 As one of the five chosen heroes in the other world, one has mistakenly chosen utility skill...

A cooking skill which all housewives normally have.

Our protagonist request a little wish because of his weak constitution "if I only have at least... cough*! cough*! a healthy body"

An unknown world, without a powerful skill, whats more...a baby?

Conquering world from start not as heroes but as civilian... 

Note: It's a Light hearted story

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Lynnaryas
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First the story is great.

The plot is well made and interesting.

The characters are good.

 

But the grammar ... this is just abyssmal. You baldly need a proofreader. Or even simply a spell checker, there is one on word or google doc.

The sentence often make no sense and you have to re-read it to understand what you want to say. I'm not a grammar nazi, but your story is just too hard to read. I don't mind a few mistake, but when the sentence no longer make sense, it just became unbearable, no matter how good your story is.

royaldarknes
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better than most of the new novel,except grammar

the story is very interesting and he make a twist with those usual cliche in a interesting way,the more later I read the better it is (except grammar) ,and chapter 19 and 21 is the highlight of this novel ,overal I recomment reading this ,especially for those who can read those machine translate novel thing since it even more harder to read than this 

small spoiler : at the end of the chapter ,it feel like the end from Mushoku tensei here (just the lesser version of it),if anyone of you have read it then you know what I talking about (manly tear)

sergioGM
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A great novel with a lazy author

I hope that the author read this review.

My english is not the best, even your english is better.

I am reading chapter 7, and until now many times I almost dropped the novel.

This is not for the story or characters, what until the moment I like very much. The reason is that you are the laziest man. I mean, you dont read what you write. If not, I am sure that many of the mistakes in grammar would not be there.

You said that this is for improve your english, but if you dont correct your mistakes how do you think you can improve?

Well that is all. By the way, this is my first review even when I have read many novels in this site, and this is because I hope that you and your novels will improve with a bit of your effort.

GL :D

Gilgamesh137
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Great story, atrociously bad grammar, I like the style, and enjoy the MC's character... Though the pffft* are annoying as hell.
tenqui
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Excellent little story.  Lots of grammar mistakes, however I did feel that it improved grammar wise as the story progressed.  Do not get me wrong the grammar was still bad but I felt I could see improvement.  

My favorite part is the author told his story and ENDED it.  Maybe not the greatest ending, but it at least stopped.  There was no trying to drag it out and write more just because.

Not every story has to be a novel, and this is a good quick read if you can get past the grammar.

Mariana1000Trench
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Loving the story.                                         

Azkan
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Has lots of potential

This is great

 

 

Keep up the good work hope you update