Think of avatar the last air bender vs pokemon/digimon cross over. But instead of pokemon/digimon it is movie monsters better yet fantasy monsters. With a story.
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I want to read this story, I really do. From the description, this seems like the kind of story that I like to read.
But those long walls of text are incredibly off putting. Your grammer is not absolutely terrible but needs to be touched up by someone who knows better.
I hope that this gets edited and made into the gem that it seems to be.
I can only describe this novel as physically unpleasant to read. The grammar and syntax are so choppy that I find myself having to read and reread paragraphs to try and understand what is going on. I am unsure if paragraph structure counts as part of syntax, but then again, I very rarely have to comment about paragraph structure at all so I suppose it generally doesn't matter.
This web serial desperately needs to break up it's dialogue into their own sepereate paragraphs. Parsing through the words of the three sepereate people talking in the very first section of dialogue was unpleasant and made reading difficult.
It certainly did not help that breaking the conversation down revealed it to be nonense bordering on pure gibberish. The lack of proper contect is exacerbated by the grammar errors as well; I am honestly unsure if Zeus, the god, exists, if 'Zeus' is a title given to powerful users of lightning, or if this is some kind of multiverse where there are multiple 'Zeuses.' (For lack of a better term. Multiples of pronouns which end in 's' are simply unpleasant)
Getting more than a few paragraphs into this story would be difficult, and I would recommend even the least discerning reader to not spend the effort to try. From what I can understand, even if it was edited, the story would be unlikely to reach beyond a 'barely passable' level, and even that is likely being overly generous.