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I did not expect to die, but for the same outcome I would die once more.
I did not expect to wake up again, but as soon as I did I was told to die.
I did not expect anything from this new life, which has since given so much.
I still do not know what the future holds, but there is one thing I am certain of;
I will fight to get there if I have to, and I will fight twice as hard for my family!
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I find the characters interesting and the foxy is adorable.
I'd like BloodMama to tell a bit more of her knowledge about other creatures in the forest.
However we need to know: is she human or a beastkin?
Waiting for new chapters.
I've read up to chapter 40 when I made this. Beware of spoilers.
TL;DR, a good pastime read if you're looking for a dose of fluff. Rather than action/adventure, it feels more like a slice of life because although it does have some tense moments, there's not really any sign of a larger plot.
The only glaring problem I found is the pacing, where it can be an easygoing pace at one part, then suddenly a long-drawn action sequence that stretches for a dozen chapters.
The style is pretty consistent. If you're used to reading WNs then you'd be pretty comfortable reading this (first person present).
I personally liked the laidback style, but honestly this part is the fiction's biggest weakness.
First of all, the MC has a really weak motivation to... actually, I don't even know what he's doing. Travelling with mama to see the world? Fair enough, could be great if done right like Kino no Tabi as in focusing on many different stories rather than specific characters. The story doesn't seem to be heading in this direction, though, due to how much attention the author puts into the main characters. I suspect there's a larger plot to tie everything together later on.
Now the biggest peeve I have with this is the pacing.
So first we get a fluffy adventure following this adowwable fox meeting her new family, travelling together, trying out a job, becoming adventures, and then BAM! We get a twelve chapter long dungeon adventure with no real plot progession. Literally just twelve chapters of hack-and-slash grinding (with a conspiracy miniplot), which, I think, could've been summarized in one or two chapters. Maybe the author intended that arc for some kind of character development, but good character development, IMO, is one that is done alongside the plot, not a whole arc dedicated for it.
I honestly skimmed the dungeon parts and ended up getting confused about the chronology because I skipped right past the part when they left the dungeon. I'm adding half a star because the recent developments feels interesting.
Nothing worthy of note. It's not bad, but not exceptionally good either. The writing is bland is all it is.
Author would do well to expand on the vocabulary. A thesaurus, maybe? Also consider using some idioms and expressions to spice it up a bit. Just a simple analogy could go ways in making better visualization.
Could've been better. I'm sure you're bored of this already, but remember; "show, don't tell".
To be honest, this fiction's finest moments is in the beginning where the MC first met the bloodcat family. There's literally no dialogue, yet the emotions conveyed were real. Then they start talking and yapyapyap goes the bloodmama, it all feels so forced. Oh, and those siblings? The author just lazily plastered their personalities when they're introduced. Sure, this is done in part because the story is about to move on anyway, but it feels jarringly rushed.
It would be better if more of the character's action are portrayed through their actions rather than dialogue. You could've made an interesting conflict out of it, even a sideplot of the characters affirming their relationships with each other if you hadn't made them bluntly say everything in their mind outloud.
Most of what I said are just critics, but don't get me wrong -- this fiction is one of the better ones I see on the site. I personally liked it as a light read and I would hate to see it get dropped. I love premise, the character interactions, and who doesn't love some fluff in their life? I mean, I just can't get enough of that 'aww your pet is so cute' then 'actually shes me daughter' badumtss, their imaginations goes wild.
This book is sipmle just fun. I am also enjoying the slow world building that is happening. I wish the MC would be more interested in her own development though, I feel like she could have advanced a lot if she took more interest in herself. The stuff with the symbols is very interesting and I love her relationship with her 'Mama'. I really hope she doesn't end up in a silly romance with a human though, I am much more fascinated with her as a beast.
I'm loving the story so far and can't wait for more! :)
Nothing new, Nothing Special.
Just a Less Super OP storyline, MC is a Lil Cute Fox.
Current chapters have her travelling with her mama.
Was Generally a Nice Read.
Read it.... You will regret it if you don't. Your regular dose of Floof. Nuff said.