Closed Beta [A Star Nova Prequel]

Closed Beta [A Star Nova Prequel]

by NoahBarnett6

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Charlie and the Misfits have been invited to join the closed beta of a new space-themed MMO, Star Nova Online.  Together with hundreds of other test pilots, they hope to defend Earth from a descending menace.  The Roth—a lizard-like warrior race—has nearly wiped humanity from the face of the universe.  However, in a special event, the players successfully destroyed the alien outpost on Mars.  With nowhere to retreat, the surviving Roth forces are left with one option.  To destroy what's left of mankind in an all or nothing battle set to take place over Earth.  Charlie and his crew have just seven days to train and prepare themselves.  

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markdsm
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You take characters from an erotocentric LN and then plug them into a 'PG rated' sequal. Except you don't. Remy is still getting it on with anything that walks and you elude to it with the others. So when you end up with is a story were everyone else is getting it on except the MC with no explanation, it's like he suddenly declared celebacy out of boredom. If that is the route you're going to take, stick with an eastern anime trope, they love that stuff there. 

Please don't get me wrong. i liked Gun Miester. I like what you started here to. Just there is a reason some of us like sexual content in our stories. It doesn't even have to be graphic. Too many good stories go out of their way to ignore it or make it so implausible why it's not there.

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Thanks for the chapter. If you want to keep the novel tamer you can always add erotic chapters/scenes and make them patreon only.