Kain, the Caveman

by drazaello

Original HIATUS Adventure Comedy Sci-fi LitRPG
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

Take an early hominid sponsored by the spirit of Progress, drop it on a spacefaring civilization.  Prepare for hijinks to ensue.

 

*Dry prologue warning!*

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lolitacore001
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muito  bom   adoraria que  estte  personagem  foosse   invocado  para  o mundo de  fantasia vaarios    herois invocados  de   variadas   epocas

junto de  nosso heroi,  homem das  cavernas

 

seria   epico  

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Should gain more traction.

A thoroughly enjoyable experience to read, I want to give five stars in all categories but it needs more content to judge. 

His main character is very strong, His struggle with his broken soul and his inhuman morals plus thought process contrasts with the sci-fi setting. Although the side characters need work with their bland personality and little description.

The grammar is in the top percentile of this website.

One of the strong points of this fiction is status screens. It gives alot of perspective and an interesting progression of both character and strength.