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- Traumatising content
Death means losing a piece of yourself.
Death means losing a part of your memory.
Death means losing precious life experiences.
Who a person is can be boiled down to their choices and experiences. When those experiences are whittled away, the person changes.
Through a cycle of death people are reborn and remolded.
Follow a disoriented young man jaded by repeated deaths and numerous betrayals. Watch how he discoveres the rules of the world and the hidden power therein.
Story contains magic, leveling, crafting, building and a system that can be interacted with at times.
WARNING: Contains graphic violence, sexual content and profanity.
Cover is a cropped wallpaper from Elderscrolls online
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It's rough in the edges but it's quite good and readable.
I enjoy the flowing, airhead kinda storytelling if it’s done right. A good example would be „the Aeon Tree“ Isekai. If you work on when to turn it up and when to turn it down you should find a style that works really well for your story.
Unfortunately at the moment it’s all over the place to be honest and sometimes a little bit of structure would do a lot of good for this story. It happened quite often that there was a time skip/scene skip and I got confused because it was neither shown clearly in text or indicated by paragraph structure. Definitively work on your formatting. It’s not a lot of effort and doesn’t need to be perfect but as I mentioned before, structure will do wonders for you.
I also feel like you lose a lot gravity you could give your story if u had it deal more heavily with the memory loss. Maybe give a prologue of Mcs first few deaths or something, this could give it a serious edge but at the same time guide it to the Mcs current State of being and his more lighthearted /lowkey crazy Character.
Nonetheless while this story has a lot to improve on it was still a fun read and I am excited to see what is to come
ps.: feathers are naturally hollow.