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"The body is but a vessel for the soul, a puppet which bends to the soul's tyranny."
Death is not the end but merely the beginning.......
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Azreal is brought to a new world upon his death, a world of gods but he later finds out that this was the home he left seventeen years ago
Unknown to him, when he met his grandfather he was set on the path to becoming one of the strongest gods.
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It's a good storyline, and good grammar actually, just not the best.
It's the writing that's bad, it's something you can't blame on grammar or plot or cliches, just inexperience. Given time I'm sure you'll get much better Mr. Author, for now just avoid using so many adverbs and you should use full stops more often.
Try telling the info needed through a whole chapter rather than dumping it into one paragraph, and remeber to show not tell.
The title says it all. The story is interesting, and im thrilled to see where it goes, but the story is full of typos, wrong punctuation, and missing or wrong words.
I suggest getting a proofreader
Grammar and spelling errors in every second sentence.
Character development is non existent.
Story is a random sequence of unrelated events.
World building does not exist.
Magic system is not explained.
"Power system" of the entities in the "worlds" is not explained.
MC so OP, even when he is outclassed in power by a lightyear, he still survives because screw logic.
tl;dr: If you value your sanity, don't bother reading.
Really cool story hope you can continue to develope it and not let it go flat. Could be a bit more discriptive but I have a pretty vivid imagination. Review has to be at least 200 hundred charters long sooooo bllllllaaaaaaaaah ion have anything else to saaaaaaaay. :/ don't know how to follow an author so I just added it to favorites