Toy Box World

by Royetta Core

Original HIATUS Action Comedy Drama Fantasy Female Lead Gender Bender LitRPG Magic Reincarnation School Life Slice of Life Strong Lead

Have you heard of 'Alternate Realities'? 

My story begins as all others do...
             ... With a dead man.

I was never a high-functioning person in life. In death, I could only sigh a breath of relief as that trainwreck came to an end. Yet, even for a failure like me there was one thing that I placed all of my pride in. The one creation and accomplishment in this disaster of a life of mine. A sad truth; it was a high-levelled character in a crappy Pay-to-Win MMORPG that was months away from shut down. I loved it simply because it was mine; because it was the one thing I created, cared for and nurtured.

So when a small boy with a metal bucket on his head gave me a chance to redo everything with the one thing I found most precious, I jumped at the chance.

However, there was one thing I didn't take into consideration as I scribbled down my signature. It was the fact that my character was female...


             ... And so begins my everyday new life in the kind of fantasy that I could only interact with from behind a screen.

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Depho
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Yup. The content is not new, nor is the genre. However this is not about an OP MC trying to do something worldly or noble. Toy Box World is a slice of life where there are loveable characters and adorable scenes. I hate to liken it to another book, "New Game Plus", but both that and this capture what most mainstream literatures on here do not, and that is a cast of charaters that are relatable and charming. 

It is unfortunate that the author here feels (perhaps) compelled to write a story that cater to it's readers. However Core does a perfectly good job on making this tale light hearted and overall enjoyable to read. Then there is the juxtaposition between  Nao's current life and her past, bringing a backbone contrary to her soft demeanor and thus her actions she takes on the world around her.

Whether Core decides not to complete this -similarly to "New Game Plus"- or not, this is something to keep in your back pocket for a smile or two.

 

Tl;dr: If you want an MC f-ing stuff up where problems pop up like weeds don't read. Story so far is about Slice of life, good feels.

ShinyRock
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Good, people feel real so far

Toy Box World is not your typical OP protagonist story. While I cannot yet effectively rate the plot as the current 19 chapters have not revealed much of the overarching story as far as I can tell, the story itself is very enjoyable. Characters are beleivable with emotions, reasons for what they do and while some may be fairly cliche they are done in a unique manner that makes them interesting despite this. The MC is OP, and weirdly calm but considering his/her/xe/whatever backstory this is quite possible within the realm of common human psychology. Grammer is good and I have yet to notice any major errors so far.

Over-all a good story well worth a read, just make sure you have some time free as you will want to see where the story is going to find out what happens to the charecters.

SpiralBaka
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Spoiler Review (maybe)

Title: Toy Box World

Genre: Fantasy
Protagonist: Male reincarnated as female. starting from baby to currently a child. S rank power or higher.
Setting: Fantasy world with magic, monsters, knights, etc.
Tension Level: Mid-High

Basic Premise: a guy died, and when choosing what to bring when he reincarnates, he choose his game character. and he reincarnates as the said character. it's not the game world though.

Chapter Content: about how the protagonist spends her days. like training, messing with other people, saving other people, holding back her urges to assaults her maid, etc. and some action (maybe).

Personal Opinion: the usual reincarnated as strong guy/girl story. I like it. but I hate that the arc can be needlessly long. I don't hate side character pov. but I prefer if it still advance the story, or being a side story that doesn't matter if it was skipped. and I hate antagonist pov. since they usually don't matter much to the protagonist and we can't cheer on them since they are the antagonist. but I still like the fiction (for now).

redman s trials at writting
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original but with a few minor flaws

This story is one of the best ones I've read, of course it falls to a couple of minor extremely nitpicked sins that no one really actually cares about.

But, being the annoyingly nitpicky yet bad writer that I am, I'm going to write them down here.

-Japan, really I love japan as much as the next weeb out there and really it didn't have that much of an influence over your story except for: the reincarnated into another world idea, the fact that instead of using actual adjectives like childish you use child-like and basically your entire style and word choice, because here in the west no one says to their new born daughter thank you for being born.

-Grammar, Although this only really applies to the first thirty maybe more or maybe less chaapters it entirely disappears as the story progresses.

-Pacing, like the lime profile picture guy whoose name I can't spell properly I feel like there is an incredibly high amount of exposition especially in the early chapters but this didn't really bother me that much seeing as I personally like reading world building exposition and character 'building'? 

So an advice for the people who don't know how to wait for a few tens of pages patience is the key but really if you are that impatient you can just read the first introductory chapters and then jump over to the chapter named 'castle golem assault...?'

 

 

Now that I'm done pointing out those three easily ignored complaints I thinks it's about time I got to the praising part of the review which will be structured similarly to an advanced review.

The characters 5/5: I find them to be both at times steriotypical and yet original, The mc himself is just a random dolt who suffers from extreme pessimism at first, but thank the lord he didn't just make him a retarded suicidal prick like in the manga En passant (https://myanimelist.net/manga/17360/En_Passant) instead you give proper reasons and general feelings you didn't give him a generic and well, laughable bullying backstory but instead gave him a massive character flaw, you also made him pretty relatable or well you made him seem much more real than anything I could hope to write right now, even what would normally be just forgettable side characters, like, gil and robert, they're  stuck in my mind, although they are at first introduced as the generic big bros you were able to turn even those basic af characters into actual realistic people.

And the 'villains' good lord are those some good 'villains' you managed to do what not even the more professional japanese writers could do and you actually managed to give reasons other than just for the sake of being evil or corruption or whatever other authors, myself included, have done, they are smart and not in the sense that they make a 'complex' plan that they never bother to actually explain because the mc just fucks it all up, so in a language other than fanboy, what I just said means that he managed to keep the 'bad' guys in a, yes morally ambigious zone but one that follows good logic and works towards an actual goal which is arguably good, and boy, it seems that my prayer for an 'evil' yet competent ruler in a fiction were answered.

The story 4.5/5: sadly despite your story being actually interesting and well written I can't give it a full 5 stars due to the fact that the mc's self conscious stupidity too often acts as a plot device to further the story, and yes, it did happen only two or three times in seventy or so chapters but those are still too many, although I do admit I am just as guilty as you of this, a little hipocrisy has never killed someone before has it? Also some people in the future may or may not point out that 'the mc is never actually in any danger' and while I have to agree that he himself is never in any danger as the book itself shows he doesn't care about himself he cares about the people he loves and they aren't indestructible, he cares more for their love than for himself so much so that he put on the mask of the cheery air headed little girl just to make sure everything was fine because unlike many other novel on rrl he isn't a selfish asshole who only works for himself, well he is kind of selfish if you look at the local big picture but he isn't a mindless killer he doesn't kill to keep his secrets, well not always, but unlike many other stories he is a true human with true remorse who doesn't just spout some random lines of "regret" for killing people and then just forgetting about it in the next chapter, like a few other mcs that I've read of.

Either way that too is highly 'overlookable'? Is that a word? Do I even engrish? 

The grammar 3.5/5: boy is the grammar bad at first, well not to the point of not being readable but it could have used some help and even those errors get slowly fixed in the later chapters, well it is never perfect but it gets much better. 

The style 2.5/5: although this is personal and some may disagree with me on this one, I feel that the 'japanese translation-like' style of wording and writing is not a good one, the way it reads or speaks just feels wrong, tell me now who geniunely says to their old war buddy 'if it was the you of the past I would have hated you but the you now is different' while this is not the exact line it's just an example because really if I wanted I could go around and fish any one number of them from basically every chapter, so despite some people who I've never heard of preferring the "translated" style of writing, I really don't.

Overall 4.5/5: once again I can't give you the full five stars due to the fact that despite being plenty of good at creating a world and actual charcters the grammar, word choice, style and the fact that you suffer from the japanese  isekai trope just like me you get four point five.

P.S: the part where I wrote 'japanese translation-like' style of writing is indeed just a poor messy attempt at something vaguely resemebling a four year old's  sense of"humor".

P.P.S: By lime profile picture guy I mean djeurkpnis.

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How many chapter until problem arise? Where's the meat? Why first 5 chapters (maybe more) only consist of exposition? Do you expect readers to be uber patient?

Grammar - good. Never the problem.

Character - cookie cutter. Never given chance to proof they're quirky, or identifiable, or adorable. Not exciting.

Setting - feudalism by look. But without problem or wonder associated by it. Oh, and beastmen.

Advice -- Limit world building to about 1/5 of chapter length. 1/3 if the setting will be truly important. Build slowly throughout the story. Give characters the chance to see problem and tackle it as early as possible. Some readers will just throw away your novel if the first 100 page is empty musings.

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This story is extremely underrated in my opinions. It's fun with many memorable moments. The characters feel almost too real, they have their own worries and problems and aren't just a bunch of one dimensional fodders. The style is good enough, nothing profound or such but it's easy to understand and extremely fun to read. As for the story, we haven't seen much so far since the author has been putting lots of work into the characters (which is good), thus I can't say much 'bout it, but I feel like even if the plot turned out horrible, the characters' interactions and personalities would be able to make up for it.

To end this review, i gotta say i'm following over 200 novels currently, but this is one of the few that i truly appreciate. Nice job author, hope you'll be able to get more chapters out. I know i'm slaving you around but demanding shit from authors is what readers do best, right?

Níðhǫggr
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This has only happened to me a few times.

When I read the latest chapter (Then 66), I couldn't help but turn away for a bit to calm down as the story was really drawing me in. This does not happen to me so much anymore as I've read a lot of Books, so when I find one that can do it, I like it very much.

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Ambiguous mc sexuality and exposition dumps galore

I am just over 30 chapters in at the time of this writing, and I've finally had enough of certain things.

The issue that made me drop out at this point is side-story arcs, I call them arcs because while generally the story is written from the MC's perspective, twice already has the authr jumped from the perspective of the protagonist for multiple successive chapters of multiple different povs. She even wrote a whole chapter about some stupid goblins pov! what the hell?! Needless to say I'm no fan of pov changes, I only read them if the pov is that of a character which I care about, and there's not a single character in this story that I care about yet, which brings me to the characters.

They're generic through and through the lot of them, there has so far been no interesting character added except one mildly mysterious (but not really...) guy. People don't really seem to have any real motives in their lives, they just react to the surrounding events none of them have ambitions of their own, nevermind two dimensional, the characters are one dimensional. Except maybe the protagonist, who is still mostly two dimensional, but the most annoying thing about the main character is that her(his?) sexual orientation has been nearly completely ambiguous, while it's been made clear that he has a strong sexual attraction towards women that he seems strangely adamant about not acting upon... He proceeds to flirt the living shit out of some eight year old boy in the name of sadism and teasing him, but as it progresses it starts getting worse and worse to the point that maybe possibly mc turned gay... I mean straight, I mean bi?

Personally, I hate it when stories don't front load the gender and sexual orientation of their characters, it depends on different people what sort of shit they'll tolerate and this is the kind of shit that makes me cringe in more ways than one, while to begin with I'm not a fan of romance stories with female leads (obviously, as I'm not a female myself, and I don't get off on imagining being banged by a dude at all...) what makes this churn my stomach is that this is 'potentially' gay and worse, 'potentially' pedophilia. It's left up in the air but it's hinted increasingly strongly that mc is slowly turning gay even at the beginning he stated he originally wasn't. A person reincarnated in a new body having their very sexuality changed with 'hormones'? That's a fucking sick fantasy dude. Basically by itself it 'potentially' enters 3 territories I am very uncomfortable with, but it's left up in the fucking air for so long! In the early chapters it was all about not jumping on the sexy maid, and then it transitioned to teasing the eight year old boy with slowly increasing hints of the MC's sexuality swinging that way instead.

 

I don't know man, this shit's just annoying to read through, it's like I don't know if I should drop it or give it a chance because it's not like he's flat out said "ok I'm gay pedo now, plz give me 8 year old penis!" so it could all just be for the lulz. But at the same time it's increasingly likely that it's not, it's infuriating and the author needs to get the fuck on with it whichever it is because it's long gotten out of hand already.

Lastly the pacing, side stories/pov changes grind the pacing to a halt usually, and there's an annoying amount of them too. And even without them, after the early chapters the pacing of the main story is just slow, it's horrendously slow, and the primary culprit (besides stupid pov changes) are exposition dumps explaining the most basic rpg mechanics in the most detailed terms, talking about all the details about some fictional game that's barely relevant to the protagonist's new world. It's like the author doesn't expect his audience to be a bunch of nerds that know how fucking rpgs work.

To top it all off, despite the large quantity of exposition dumps on the subject, the worldbuilding is incredibly shallow it's like it's feudalism in concept, but with more rainbows and unicorns. It's an idealistic and perfect fantasy world with no flaws and everyone living happily forever and ever, and a protagonist who is super op but doesn't really have to do anything with it because everybody's happy without it anyways so instead he just flashes his panties at the 8 year old every chance he gets.

There's a harem tag, but by the looks of it the harem element is going to be something only bisexual readers will ever make it through. I think I'm done with this story, besides all the issues I have with it it just doesn't have anything special to offer, everything else is completely and utterly generic.

Bottom line: It's a generic reincarnation fantasy but only readable by bisexual pedophiles.

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OP MC that wants to enjoy life by acting childish

Over all plot - MC got transported to a Pay to Win game world with the character he "Payed to Win"...by a lot.  So MC is Maxed leveled with all the tricked out stuff you can have if you dumped all your cash into a "Payed to Win" game.

Other then the above, it's a great story about a gender-bender OP MC in a serious situation that tries treating everything in as simplist and childish manor as possible.  The MC knows s/he's got serious events happening around her but as long as they don't effect her, she can ignore them.  That when the serious events do effect her, she tries to take the route that gives her the most "fun" and none of that pesky responsiblity.

One nice thing about the MC which I'm really enjoying.  The MC knows s/he's not the smartest person.  In fact the MC believes her intelligence is slightly below average and uses that 'lack' of intelligence as a excuse to try and get away with some crazy stuff.

...sort of like what I see some very smart people I know try and play characters with low INT scores.  They're going have fun and do st*p*d sh*t and blame everything on their character not being smart.  This is the MC of the Toy Box world.

swordking123
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 A really good story that had a bit of a rough begining. The only complaint I have is that as of the posting of this review the entire story has been deleted.