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Upon discovering a strange portal one morning, Ian Hayes begins traveling between a near-future Earth and a world of magic known as Regnoras. Amazing creatures dwell in this new land. Incredible opportunities await. While trying to establish a new way of life as well as new connections and relationships, things slowly spiral out of his control. As worlds collide, Ian must learn to overcome his own failings and struggle to come out on top in a world different from his own in more ways than he could imagine.
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(This is based on the first 17 entries)
This is a good solid story that doesn't go too quick or too slow. I find the characters very likable and I am looking forward to more chapters being released.
If you are tired of stories all about fighting or just looking for something new, then I would recommend this title. It is a refreshing take on a Fantasy like world with a small bit of litRPG thrown in.
This is looking to be a story about a blacksmith(apprentice) who learns about not only the trade but also how to reforging the mistakes of his past or at the very least, create a better future. There are also some hints of a deeper plot and potential enemies for our main characters.
All in all, I'm really looking forward to seeing what AstralTempest comes up with.
Finally caught up (up to Lost and Found 13 at the time of this review)!
If I were to summarise the story so far, it would go along the lines of 'a-blacksmithing-story-where-there's-not-much-blacksmithing-going-on-as-life-seems-to-hate-the-mc-and-deliberately-prevents-the-blacksmith-wannabe-from-blacksmithing. Also, there's Magic and Women interested in the MC.' (Alayna best grill ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) )
Now on a more serious note:
As a reader, it is enjoyable and something I would recommend this to those who want something different from the normal tropes found commonly on RRL. It mixes Medieval fantasy with futuristic sci-fi in a clear and concise manner so if you want a dual world genre, this novel is for you.
On the whole, very good. Easy to follow, read and also brings out imagry needed. There are a few word choices that are iffy, which is why it's not quite 5/5 but that's beside the point.
A very good plot-line. A bit slow at the start, but I think it's needed to build up the worlds. Not only do you have to world-build for one place (Earth), but you have to do it for another (Ragnaros), so kudos to you.
It brings out the contrast between worlds based on fantasy and science fiction superbly. Though the systems in place haven't been fleshed out yet (like magic or the rules of the 'modern world'), I'm sure that would come with time. As such, this rating won't be that high, relative to the others.
The antagonist group, Napur, is also very well thought out. It makes me wonder what you were searching up for *ahem* inspiration for them.
My only true gripe of the story is that...
...how you make it seem like Ian doesn't really have free will due to the dark matter. I can understand deciding a profession might be influenced due to it (though it still gives a 'meh' vibe). However, when your brother is being a dick and grabs hold of you and your sister without letting go, getting angry and deciding to knock him out shouldn't be explained with 'Must be the dark matter influencing me'. It's a natural thing to do in that scenario.
Not much to say, as I can't see any faults. Word choices come under style, so shouldn't affect this rating.
All of the characters are well-defined. They're memorable and have their defining traits. I could talk more, but I think character is up for interpretation, and having my opinion stated might influence people while reading it.
As a fellow author, I have to admit that in terms of style, grammar and characters, this is much better than my own novel (story is up for debate). Because of that, it shows how much effort you must have put into it, and I understand the strains of how difficult it is to write consistently for your fans (which showed near the later chapters as you had to say sorry more often for lateness). If my whole review doesn't encourage you to read it, at the very least, read this novel to see the passion Astral has put into it.
This has been a very enjoyable story that has succeeded in drawing me in. It might not be as well known as some other stories (I found it on the most recent updates page), but it without a doubt deserves the title of "Hidden Gem". Likeable characters, and interesting setup with a mix between sci-fi and fantasy and what seems to be a solid direction the the story is going on. It has a consistant and fairly regular update schedule and the fact that the story is a member of the "Pledge" and will, one way or another be finished is just the icing on the cake. I hope that further reviews will see this story climb the rankings and earn itself some more readers.
Loving it so far! Up-to-date with chapter forging a foundation part 3
I have found little to gripe with. No tense mistakes that I can remember, chronology is steady, all that good stuff.
There are very few mystevens that I have with the story. A couple weird things was regarding the involvements between a couple of the characters. It seems very unlikely for the connection to be made immediately. On the whole though, it is very very satisfactory.
Nothing to say besides wow. Thinking back I don't think I have seen a single grammar issue. There are a few times where a different word might have been better but it is excellent quality considering most of the sections on this site.
The characters we're very in-depth for the most part. The first woman sexy isn't terribly fleshed out, but I assume that the character will be fleshed out further down the road. The interactions feel very natural minus the blacksmith's, I forgot his name LOL, insistence on him not being involved with Bianca.
P.S. sorry for any mistakes. I did this review on my phone LOL.