Dante's Immortality

Dante's Immortality

by Idlefiber

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

Dante doesnt know where he came from and is ostracized as a demon because of his appearance.  However he has hope, a gift from the Goddess could be his key to freedom.  Every year any boy or girl who reaches the age of 14 can receive the blessing of the Goddess and the Status.  The Status allows them to freely manipulate the world essence around them and be strengthened through it (yeah, its a status screen). 

Pretty much the rest of the synopsis is the prologue, please read it and tell me what you think.  I tagged some of the elements i plan to implement in the story, so check there.  Also i left gore, profanity, and traumatising content in because i plan on going a little dark at times in the story let me know what you guys think on that.

Im a big reader but this is the first thing that ive written (may suck) go easy on me and give me all the critique you can.

cover is some fanart for devil may cry.  I couldnt track down original creator (just a bunch of repost) but if the author is out there, message me if you want me to take it down or give credit

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Shitty map (not chp) ago
List of names, houses, and places ago
Prologue ago
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Vowron Prime
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Review for a dead fic, but a glorious one

Reviewed at: Update/Future plans

Alright, so it's been two years since this stopped serializing, but that's irrelevant. I wanted to express my appreciation for this glorious story that we all got to read for free. I believe the author stopped because they were unhappy with the story and prose, but I disagree.

I enjoyed every minute of this ride, even when it turned tragic at times. I do hope it is picked up and finished one day. I'll be here, waiting.

maaekev
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Great story, hope it gets picked up again

Reviewed at: Schedule Update

It's been 2 years since the last update and I guess its probably not coming back to royal road. Hopefully boom 2 gets released on Amazon. This is one of my favorites and hopefully the author is doing alright, and will keep writing.

I actually had a dream that was reminded me of this story earlier this week, and I came back hoping that there were more chapters out. Sadly that was not the case.  Blurp Blu blurp

coalmine overlord
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Love the story unfortunate that it's dropped or maybe author is writing the rest of the story all at once for a massive update 

Jacob Little
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Been a while since I read this but still one of my favorite litrpg works. I think he could do to get some outside help to make some parts clearer and easier to empathize with, particularly for that "therapy" session. He could really grasp his readers if he worked with others when focusing on emotional aspects since it is clear it is difficult for him to write it down in words himself.

Arimathe
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Have reread this now for  the third time and loved it!

zero pr
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Waiting for continuation

Reviewed at: Update/Future plans

The part of the immortality story title, I had actually thought of something like “devil may cry”, or the regeneration ability will improve in some way. especially after the blood cocoon.

In the part about the academy, what you can understand is, the whole academy is used for someone's entertainment through betting or something; of course I think of other reasons but it is better not to comment. Other than that it really doesn't make much sense, a path of no return.

Dante's origin, I think, doesn't matter at the moment. Usually the MC finds out at some critical time. If I remember at some point in history, something about archaic is mentioned; but that's where the question is what would that be

johnopedia
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Solid LitRPG and strong world building

This review is as of chapter 8.

I put off reading this story hoping for a few more chapters before digging in. I'm actually glad I changed my mind and started it.  A long chapter a day is a brutal pace for any author, and it would be understandable if there were lots of spelling and grammar mistakes. So far that hasn't been an issue.  The regular updates and the glimpses of what may be coming have me anticipating each new release.

This story is litRPG, so there are things like charater classes, class upgrades, experience (called world essence), gear, dungeons, etc.  In this case all these things seem to have a bit of a twist on the standard that keep it interesting.

There's also the standard orphan, ostracized kid who's destined for greatness trope.  Yes, it's been done before, but so what, stories like this are escapism.  The kid starts out as green and wet behind the ears but learns fast and is boosting his wisdom rapidly, so we'll get to see how that turns out.

All in all, I'm enjoying the story and hoping it continues for a complete story.

jeaa1
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What i like about your story

Reviewed at: Update/Future plans

Love the system, the class, the skills and world you made. The rest of this review is just filler

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visigoth
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Pretty decent but if youre expecting the mc to be proactive instead of reactive this isnt for you, it felt like throughout the story he was consantly at someones mercy as well as being steered towards a path whether it be for good or bad intentions. Personally i prefer it when the mc develops on his own and interactes with the worlds major players once he is fairly competent and self sufficient but those are just my preferences.

King_Frost
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Early stage of a possible great story.

Edited and now at chapter 34.

Still giving an half-star as encouragement.

The story is good. Nothing as a whole new but not bad either. We've seen the usual cliché trope but the author still have some unique elements that are pretty cool.

What I have difficulty is the characters, especially the Mc. We know next to nothing about him. It's like poof, here you go a 14 years old mc. And I'm not just talking about background here but mentality, personality, views and others. Was he orphan from the beginning? Did he have to steal? Any friends? Did he worked for food? Did he have to kill? What about relationships? We start with a mc that we can't just put ourself in it's shoes. From all we know a mc that lived ostracized for all his life would probably not turned out how it is pictured. Way too sane, too confident, too.. good. I think what I wanna say is that without knowing where he came from I just can't see how he got there. And it bothers me. Like a lot.

Also, I couldn't give a crap about 95% of side characters. I don't know if the author wants to do an Mc VS the world type of feeling but it just seems like he is surrounded my enemies. On one hand it makes sense and it is realistic in a harsh world like that, but on the other hand it is just lacking something. A sidekick, a confident, an ally hell even a fucking pet would be good. The only characters that I actually like are Mia and Archie. And one of them disappear after a few chapter.

On a more positive note, I really like the world building. A lot of unique stuff and you feel the strongs eat the weaks vibe. Can't get all flower and unicorns in a world like this which is generally the case with op mc. The author also made a map which, albeit of poor quality, is nice to have.

Also, many things are not covered and explained. Either left for the audience to guess or just that it would be explain later. Can't decide if it is a good point or not. On one hand it add mystery but on the other hand I feel like i lack variable to make assumptions.

The grammar is also pretty good and the story as a whole is well written. A few plot hole(which most  were fixed) but it doesn't really affect the story. Grammar wise I would consider it at the higher tiers of RRL.

All in all I would recommend this story. Nice story and I expect it would only get better.

On a more personal note I saw the Harem tag. Please be careful and don't fuck up your story for a shitty romance with side characters bitches that only acts as cheerleaders and are only there to want his D. Harem is an art and a bad one would just destroyed everything that you built. **(Did this comment for first review at chapter 12 and I have to say that even if I don't like characters at least they are not shallow.)

SPOILER ALERT: Read at your own risk. In a poll of harem girl possible you put Layla and kayla. Just so you know that I hate both of them with passion. I don't understand why Kayla is even there. Oh I'm sure there's a reason and it's more of a personal rant and you should take it with a grain of salt but.. damn I don't like their characters. It's not even that Layla is a control freak bitch or kayla is a manipulative slut but more that they don't make sense. There's a million better ways for Layla to get what she wants but she used these dumb ways. Sure she is young but aaaaarg... whatever.

Keep up the good job Idlefiber, you're doing great!

King out!