The Four Territories (Sample)

by StevieCollier

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

He was like a father to me... and I wanted to cut his throat.

In a world divided into four territories, each with their own unique sun, color, race, and culture, Esh is born and abandoned in the cruelest of all. The red territory of Reah. A land in which every day is an absolute struggle for survival.

One day, an elderly man discovers the boy mortally wounded on the side of the ash-filled streets and takes pity on him, a kindness unknown in the land of Reah. Then, using violent and unorthodox training, he teaches the boy the skills necessary to endure the harshness of the territory. Skills of a master assassin. Combat. Sorcery. Alchemy.

All is going well until a dark and forgotten energy finds its way into young Esh's body. Wreaking havoc on his mind, it threatens to drag his spirit into darkness.

If Esh doesn't use all his mental and physical strength to combat the ancient energy then he will surely be destroyed.

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Wen Adams

I remember browsing reddit for some books to read, when I saw a beta test read that I could do. I signed up, and got a copy. I read it over the weekend, only putting it down for daily needs. The story is phenomenal, it makes you feel who uncaring this world is. How Esh feels. This story has stuck with me after I read it. Always at the back of my mind, it sits, bringing me shivers when I think back. Steve Collier is a great up and coming author, and is worth keeping an eye out for.