Metaworld Chronicles

by Wutosama

Warning This fiction contains:
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  • Sexual Content
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Gwen Song awoke in a world that was not her own, in which everything she was familiar with had been replaced. Instead of airplanes and electricity, this 21st-century Earth is ruled by magic and dragons; humanity survives in a land of magical beasts and otherworldly beings, protected by shielded enclaves and magical constructs.

Follow Gwen across the world as she struggles to rebuild her life in this strange new reality. Behold a tale of adventure, friendship, and (of course), magic! Witness as she grows from a simple grade school student to a fully-fledged Mage, through university and beyond, discovering the secrets of a world made unreal by magic and mysticism.


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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter 1 - Some Things Begin, Something Ends ago
Chapter 2 - Awakening ago
Chapter 3 - Pass Conceded ago
Chapter 4 - Familia ago
Chapter 5 - The Longest Day ago
Chapter 6 - It takes Three to Tango   ago
Chapter 7 - A Step in the Right Direction ago
Chapter 8 - No News like Bad News ago
Chapter 9 - A Team   ago
Chapter 10 - A Moment of Truth    ago
Chapter 11- Dark Ritual ago
Chapter 12  - Instructions and Instructors ago
Chapter 13 - The Calm ago
Interlude 1 - A Hint of Thunder ago
Chapter 14 - Oedipus Wrecks ago
Chapter 15 - The House of Huang ago
Chapter 16 - A New Leaf ago
Chapter 17 - First Blood ago
Interlude 2 - The Looming Cloud ago
Chapter 18 - What Great Beast ago
Chapter 19 - The Woods have Wolves ago
Chapter 20 - Riding Hood ago
Chapter 21 - Breathe ago
Chapter 22 - The Snake, the Lady and the Maiden Fair  ago
Chapter 23 - Candles ago
Chapter 24 - Follow the Red Rabbit
Chapter 25 - First Impressions are Important ago
Chapter 26 - Secrets ago
Chapter 27 - Full Fathom Five ago
Chapter 28 - A Long Way Down ago
Chapter 29 - Sweet Hearts and Sweet Meats ago
Chapter 30 - Two Dogs on a Hearth ago
 Chapter 31 - Some Things Never Change ago
Chapter 32 - Coming Home ago
Chapter 33 - An Old Man's Favours ago
Chapter 34 - Apples from the Tree ago
Chapter 35 - The Grind ago
Chapter 36 - Here be Monsters ago
Chapter 37 - Of Monsters and Gwen ago
Chapter 38 - A False Start ago
Chapter 39 - The Woods are Lovely, Dark and Deep ago
Chapter 40 - Miles to Go Before She Sleeps ago
Chapter 41 - Sleeping Beauty ago
Chapter 42 - The Very Hungry Caterpillar ago
Chapter 43 - Crossroads ago
Chapter 44 -  Scar Tissues ago
Chapter 45 - Skeletons ago
Chapter 46 - A Slice of Paradise ago
Chapter 47 - He who Hunts Monsters ago
Character Summaries ago
Chapter 48 - Cruel to be Kind ago
Chapter 49 - Fortune's Fool ago
Chapter 50 - Close Encounters ago
Chapter 51  - Full Pelt ago
Chapter 52 - Great Expectations ago
Chapter 53 - Premonitions ago
Chapter 54 - No Harm in Trying ago
Chapter 55 Poor Boys and Rich Girls ago
Chapter 56 - A Curious Encounter ago
Chapter 57 - Show and Tell ago
Chapter 58 - When shall we Three ago
Chapter 59 - One Thousand and One Nights ago
Chapter 60 - Valkyries ago
Chapter 61 - True Lies ago
Chapter 62 - First World Problems ago
Chapter 63 - An Old Bird Dreaming ago
Chapter 64 - Into the Wild ago
Chapter 65 - A Favour for a Favour ago
Chapter 66 - Shortcomings ago
Chapter 67 - The Migloo Ghost ago
Chapter 68 - Dark Tidings ago
Chapter 69 - Until Dawn ago
Chapter 70 - House of the Rising Huang ago
Chapter 71 - Til the Fat Lady Sings ago
Chapter 72 - Sharing is Caring ago
Chapter 73 - So Long, and Sanks for the Fush ago
Chapter 74 - All work and No Lunch ago
Chapter 75 - Days of Our Lives ago
Chapter 76 - A Crooked Deal ago
Character and Magic Summary 2 ago
Chapter 76.5 - Interlude 3 - Dark Waters ago
Chapter 77 - Anticipations ago
Chapter 78 - A Rose and its Thorns ago
Chapter 79 - The Greater the Expectation ago
Chapter 80 - The Harder the Fall ago
Chapter 81 - A Sight for Sore Eyes ago
Chapter 82 - When the Levy Breaks ago
Chapter 83 - An Unfortunate Encounter ago
Chapter 84 - Broken Chains ago
Chapter 85 - Wave Break ago
Chapter 86 - The Devil's Advocate ago
Chapter 87 - True Lies ago
Chapter 88 - The Widening Gyre ago
Chapter 89 - The Falcon cannot hear the Falconer ago
Chapter 90 - The Worst are Full of Passion ago
Chapter 91 - Reeling Shadows of Desert Birds ago
Chapter 92 - The Darkness drops Again ago
Chapter 93 - Spiritus Mundi ago
Chapter 94 - When Time is Short ago
Chapter 95 - The Salty Saviour ago
Chapter 96 - Come Together ago
Chapter 97 - Picking up the Pieces ago
Chapter 97.5 - Epilogue for Arc 1- No Birds Sing ago
Chapter 98 - No News Like Bad News ago
Chapter 99 - Cabin Fever ago
Chapter 100 - Stifling ago
Chapter 101 - Creepers and Crawlers ago
Chapter 102 - O Captain ago
Chapter 103 - Respite ago
Chapter 104 - Detour ago
Chapter 105 - Taken ago
Chapter 106 - Suspicious Minds ago
Chapter 107 - An invitation from a Doppelgänger ago
Chapter 108 - A Sliver of Silver ago
Chapter 109 - A Meeting at the Threshold ago
Chapter 110 - Cold City ago
Chapter 111 - More ways than One ago
Chapter 112 - To Skin Some Cats ago
Chapter 113 - Remember Me ago
Chapter 114 - Introspection ago
Chapter 115 - No Longer Alone ago
Chapter 116 - A Tale of Two Towers ago
Character Summary 3 ago
Chapter 117 - Hold on and Let Go ago
Chapter 118 - Human Nature ago
Chapter 119 - Risk and Reward ago
Chapter 120 - Visions and Revisions ago
Chapter 121 - Spotty Hands ago
Chapter 122 - Night Whispers ago
Chapter 123 - A Matter of Face ago
Chapter 124 - Brave New World ago
Chapter 125 - A Course of Course ago
Chapter 126 - Off to see the Wizard ago
Chapter 127 - Dog Whistles ago
Chapter 128 - Questions and Answers ago
Chapter 129 - A Trojan Gift Horse ago
Chapter 130 - A Gift once Given ago
Chapter 131 - Prepatory ago
Chapter 132 - Fault Lines ago
Chapter 133 - The Great Divide ago
Chapter 134 - Picking up the Pieces ago
Chapter 135 - Regrets ago
Chapter 136 - Mixtures and Admixtures ago
Chapter 137 - Skinner's Box ago
Chapter 138 - Queries and Answers ago
Chapter 139 - Good Neighbours ago
Chapter 140 - Knots ago
Chapter 141 - The Age of Experience ago
Chapter 142 - Orientation ago
Chapter 143 - Lessons of Life ago
Chapter 144 - A bob on the Snout ago
Chapter 145 - Classes and classes ago
Chapter 146 - Mo Money, No Problems ago
Chapter 147 - Routine ago
Chapter 148 - The Troubles ago
Chapter 149 - Paternal Issues ago
Chapter 150 - A Charmed Life ago
Chapter 151 - Fight or Flight ago
Chapter 152 - The Wrong way to Duel ago
Chapter 153 - Indigestion ago
Chapter 154 - The Greener Grass ago
Chapter 155 - The Damned ago
Chapter 156 - When the Red Mist Rolls in ago
Chapter 157 - Blood and Guts ago
Chapter 158 - Hesitation at the Threshold ago
Chapter 159 - Between Concrete and a Hard Place ago
Chapter 160 - Once more into the Breach ago
Chapter 161 - No Place should Murder Sanctuarise ago
Chapter 162 - Mightier than the Sword ago
Character Summary 4 ago
Chapter 163 - Dreams of Tomorrow ago
Chapter 164 - Balance in all Things ago
Chapter 165 - Rest and Relax ago
Chapter 166 - Of Peaches and Men ago
Chapter 167 - Shadows on the Wall ago
Chapter 168 - For Thou art with Me ago
Chapter 169 - This Far, no Further ago
Chapter 170 - Nighthawks ago
Chapter 171 - Great Anticipations ago
Chapter 172 - No Mitigating Nourishment ago
Chapter 173 - Nothing Quite like Loneliness ago
Chapter 174 - Pinky Promises ago
Chapter 175 - Detours ago
Chapter 176 - Laughing the Night Away ago
Chapter 177 - Tempus Fugit ago
Chapter 178 - Hai Five ago
Chapter 179 - Goats and Monkeys! ago
Chapter 180 - Frogger ago
Chapter 181 - A Model of You ago
Chapter 182 - Bush Meat ago
Chapter 183 - Happy Campers ago
Chapter 184 - Come a-Waltzing Matilda with Me ago
Chapter 185 - Her Beauty and her Terror ago
Chapter 186 - Silencing the Lamb ago
Chapter 187 - Karma Comes Calling ago
Chapter 188 - Millstone ago
Chapter 189 - Calamity Gwen ago
Chapter 190 - Truth will Out ago
Chapter 191 - A Series of Unfortunate Events ago
Chapter 192 - The Black Goat ago
Chapter 193 - How to Make Gravy ago
Chapter 194 - Confessions of a Dragon-Kin in Hangzhou ago
Chapter 195 - How Much do I love Thee? ago
Chapter 196 - How to fold a Paper Tiger ago
Chapter 197 - Whetting the Appetite ago
Chapter 198 - The Undertow ago
Chapter 199 - A Stick in the Mud ago
Chapter 200 - Curtain Call ago
Chapter 200.5 - Interlude - A Prickling of the Thumb ago
Chapter 201 - Green-eyed Gwen ago
Chapter 202 - To her Door ago
Chapter 203 - The Cuckoo Crows Thrice ago
Chapter 204 - Don't Dream its Over ago
Metaworld Spellcraft & Glossary ago
Chapter 205 - Bookworms ago
Chapter 206 - Chekhov's Dragon ago
Chapter 207 - Where the Side Quests Roam ago
Chapter 208 - Trouble in Paradise ago
Chapter 209 - Dances with Deerhounds ago
Chapter 210 - Six Degrees of Separation ago
Chapter 211 - I have become... ago
Chapter 212 - Who let the Dogs Out? ago
Chapter 213 - Silence of the Apes ago
Chapter 214 - Monkey in the Middle ago
Chapter 215 - What lies Beneath ago
Chapter 216 - Favour of the Father ago
Chapter 217 - Many Jasons in Pursuit ago
Chapter 218 - Loftier Ambitions ago
Chapter 219 - Figuro Magnifico ago
Chapter 220 - A Step in the Right Direction ago
Chapter 221 - Who watches the Watchers ago
Chapter 222 - Credit where Credit is Due ago
Chapter 223 - Dai Harder ago
Chapter 224 - December Days ago
Chapter 225 - The Dumplings of Prosperity ago
Chapter 226 - A Tuft of Flower ago
Chapter 227 - A Tall Poppy ago
Chapter 228 - I guess that's why they call it the Blues ago
Chapter 229 - A Crucible's Caress ago
Chapter 230 - The Devil's Plea-Bargain ago
Chapter 231 - Fingerpainting ago
Chapter 232 - No Source of Honey ago
Chapter 233 - The Milk-Tea of Human Kindness ago
Interlude - Percy's Day Off ago
Chapter 234 - What doesn't kill you... ago
Chapter 235 - Some like it Hot ago
Chapter 236 - A Paradox of Prophesy ago
Chapter 237 - Brothers and Sisters ago
Chapter 238 - An Interview with the Void Sorceress ago
Chapter 239 - Flight of the Bumble Bee ago
Chapter 240 - Slippery Slopes ago
Chapter 241 - The Perils of Fame ago
Chapter 242 - Paranoid Draconoid ago
Chapter 243 - Many hands make Light Labour ago
Chapter 244 - The Fonder Heart ago
Chapter 245 - Second Chances ago
Chapter 246 - Milu No.5 ago
Chapter 247 - The Importance of a Strong Handshake ago
Chapter 248 - A City of Gold ago
Chapter 249 - Cocks and Hens ago
Chapter 250 - Chain Reaction ago
Chapter 251 - Old Fashioned ago
Chapter 252 - When it rains, it pours ago
Chapter 253 - Small Mercies ago
Chapter 254 - Foul Play ago
Chapter 255 - Shattering the Peace ago
Chapter 256 - Riposte ago
Chapter 257 - Virtue in Vengeance ago
Chapter 258 - Accounting for Victory ago
Interlude - One Night in Yangon ago
Chapter 259 - Burmese Days ago
Chapter 260 - Kitty come Home ago
Chapter 261 - Waiting for Godot ago
Chapter 262 - O Brother, where art thou? ago
Chapter 263 - Veni Vidi Vici ago
Chapter 264 - A Murderer and a Villain ago
Chapter 265 - Tricks and Trades ago
Chapter 266 - A Mage of many Talents ago
Chapter 267 - Hell hath no Fury ago
Chapter 268 - Sour Grapes ago
Chapter 269 - Homewrecker ago
Chapter 270 - Fight Fire with Lightning ago
Chapter 271 - Fair Winds and Ill Tides ago
Chapter 272 - How to Train your Wyvern ago
Chapter 273 - Between a Void-Beast and a Hard Place ago
Chapter 274 - A Brave New World ago
Chapter 275 - Land of the Risen Sun ago
Chapter 276 - Serpents in the Midst ago
Chapter 277 - The Sun Also Rises ago
Chapter 278 - A Modest Proposal ago
Chapter 279 - Birds of a Feather ago
Chapter 280 - Troll in the Trees ago
Chapter 281 - Where the Wyverns Crow on Trees ago
Chapter 282 - Out of the Blue ago
Chapter 283 - The Seeds of Trust ago
Chapter 284 - An Unexpected Boon ago
Chapter 285 - Into the Maelstrom ago
Chapter 286 - A warm up ago
Chapter 287 - A Tale of two Horrors ago
Character Summary 5 ago
Chapter 288 - Takanakuy ago
Chapter 289 - The Call of the Void ago
Chapter 290 - Battle Royale ago
Chapter 291 - The Hands of Victory ago
Chapter 292 - The Setting Sun ago
Chapter 293 - Gears and Levers ago
Chapter 294 - Nightmares ago
Chapter 295 - Lessons from the Underground ago
Chapter 296 - Prelude to Premonition ago
Chapter 297 - The Pale Prince of Pretoria ago
Chapter 298 - What Tomorrow Brings ago
Chapter 299 - Shattering Expectations ago
Chapter 300 - Caliban, Interrupted ago
Chapter 301 - Prelude to the Long Night ago
Chapter 302 - The Living and the Dead ago
Chapter 303 - Peace for the Dead, Life for the Living ago
Chapter 304 - The Three Little Necromancers ago
Chapter 305 - Wyverns First ago
Chapter 306 - Party Crasher ago
Chapter 307 - War Games ago
Chapter 308 - Et Victoria ad Defectum ago
Chapter 309 - Humbled Hearts ago
Chapter 310 - Call of the Deep ago
Chapter 311 - The Living Dark ago
Chapter 312 - How to lasso a Lich ago
Chapter 313 - All Good Things ago
Chapter 314 - Tis better to have Loved ago
Chapter 315 - Legion ago
Chapter 316 - After the Banquet Ends ago
Chapter 317 - Where the Kookaburra Laughs ago
Chapter 318 - Love's Labour ago
Chapter 319 - The Old Man and the Gwen ago
Chapter 320 - The Snake Giveth ago
Chapter 321 - All Stations to London ago
Chapter 322 - The Monkey's Paw ago
Chapter 323 - Naked Villainy ago
Chapter 324 - House Rules ago
Chapter 325 - Knight Errant ago
Chapter 326 - The Enemy of my Enemy ago
Chapter 327 - The Root of Elvia ago
Chapter 328 - The Gift of Simplicity ago
Chapter 329 - The Perils of Infamy ago
Chapter 330 - Three Ring Circus ago
Chapter 331 - Gold Digging ago
Chapter 332 - Modern Mythology ago
Chapter 333 - Ivory Tower ago
Chapter 334 - The Rich get Richer ago
Chapter 335 - News on the March ago
Chapter 336 - The Garden of Delights ago
Chapter 337 - Blessed by Blood ago
Chapter 338 - Stratums ago
Chapter 339 - Tremors ago
Chapter 340 - The Early Bird ago
Chapter 341 - Watering Holes ago
Chapter 342 - Friends for Hire ago
Chapter 343 - Honour's Tongue ago
Chapter 344 - A Cold Welcome ago
Chapter 345 - Past the Shallows ago
Chapter 346 - Bride and Groom ago
Chapter 347 - From Kith to Kin ago
Chapter 348 - Buyer's Remorse ago
Chapter 349 - Dolls' House ago
Glossary ago
Chapter 350 - Little Seeds ago
Chapter 351 - Twist and Turns ago
Chapter 352 - The Best is Yet to Come ago
Chapter 353 - No Rest for the Wicked ago
Chapter 354 - A Little Web as This ago
Chapter 355 - Bitter Fruits ago
Chapter 356 - The Gift ago
Chapter 357 - Power in Restraint ago
Chapter 358 - The Price of Progress ago
Character Summary (357+) ago
Chapter 359 - Dig Dig ago
Chapter 360 - A Full Revolution ago
Chapter 361 - Not with a Bang ago
Chapter 362 - But with a Whimper ago
Chapter 363 - The Coven Gathers ago
Chapter 364 - Knowledge and the Power ago
Chapter 365 - The Blessed and the Damned ago
Interlude - The Great Shoal Forward ago
Chapter 366 - Flower Picking ago
Chapter 367 - So Long, and Thanks for the... ago
Chapter 368 - Even Death may Die ago
Chapter 369 - Rest and Respite ago
Chapter 370 - Tree Rings ago
Chapter 371 - Close Encounter of the Demi-kind ago
Chapter 372 - A little Knowledge ago
Chapter 373 - The Burden of Knowledge ago
Chapter 374 - A Grimoire of one's Own ago
Chapter 375 - The Past Behind ago
Chapter 376 - Gwen Song Observation Diary Part I ago
Chapter 377 - Gwen Song Observation Diary Part II ago
Interlude - A Duck's Tale ago
Chapter 378 - Gwen Song Observation Diary Part III ago
Chapter 379 - City Hopper ago
Chapter 380 - Like Salmon to the Stream ago
Chapter 381 - Can't Die if you Don't Die ago
Chapter 382 - Like Old Times ago
Chapter 383 - The Face of Spam ago
Chapter 384 - Mama and ? ago
Chapter 385 - Like Dew in the Rain ago
Interlude - Fire and or Ice ago
Chapter 386 - Support Pillars ago
Chapter 387 - Back to the Grind ago
Chapter 388 - The Isle of Dreams ago
Chapter 389 - Taking the Low Road ago
Chapter 390 - Deep Politics ago
Chapter 391 - When Life gives Aberrants ago
Chapter 392 - The Flesh is Willing ago
Chapter 393 - Between an Anvil and a Hard Place ago
Chapter 394 - Dwarves in the Dark ago
Chapter 395 - The Calamari Among Us ago
Chapter 396 - Bait and Switch ago
Chapter 397 - Octopus Pot ago
Chapter 398 - Writhe ago
Chapter 399 - All of the Above ago
Chapter 400 - More Money, More Problems ago
Chapter 401 - Friends in High Places ago
Chapter 402 - A Steep Steppe Forward ago
Chapter 403 - All in Accord ago
Chapter 404 - Lost and Found ago
Chapter 405 - Where the River meets the Sea ago
Chapter 406 - Where the Shadows Burn Bright ago

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Written after Chapter 349

Reviewed at: Chapter 349 - Dolls' House

I have enjoyed most of parts of this novel and as it is my first find on RR I'm pretty happy I managed to find something readable right out the gate.

My problem with this novel comes down to pretty much one or 2 things

- Descriptions of what people are wearing, at first I though it was an ammusing inclusion but when multiple paragraphs are consistently devoted solely to describing someone's outfit, I was like (CLAP)WHERE(CLAP)IS(CLAP)THE(CLAP)STORY?(CLAP)

 

- YES WE GET IT, she has LONG WHITE LEGS and apparently people find that feature attractive. I don't know if I'm using the word appropriately but I thought it made sense but I guffawed (not in a good way) and eye rolled so hard when great pains are taken to ensure that physical feature is mentioned EVERY SINGLE TIME fashion is involved.

 

- regarding the MC, how unrealistic the MC is as a "30 something" grown woman in a teenage body. She is able to anticipate and counter any attempts at disrupting anything that would get in the way of her BIG ASPIRATIONS. She uses her OLD WORLD knowledge to advance her goals which included intense long winded lectures that involve said knowledge. So I almost believe her character and personality. But than we hit the back and forth internal dilemna of I can't kill them or they are intelligent beings to. Cut immediately towards end of arc after MC killed or wiped out entire city and this happens EVERY SINGLE TIME. Lets not even get into wearing mini dresses that show of the LONG WHITE LEGS to a batlle scene. I really struggled to pair an intelligent, knowledgable and mature 30 something year old woman with a character that has a virtually obsessive compulsion to wear highly impractical clothes into a dangerous situation. My ONLY conclusion is that the MC is in reality not Gwen Song but ELLE WOODS.

- Lastly as a queer person I barely tolerated the queer relationship baiting as the MC's habbit of leading other characters on really started to grate on my nerves anytime a possible love interest appeared. In a sentence the MC, No we can't be in a relationship but you can totally touch me inappropriately, kiss me, hug me and I wan't to touch you, hug you, smell you, kiss you. And this is dismissively explained away as the MC's tendency to be masochistic. I think it was at that point I started to serously wonder if this novel is worth following. But then again the Romance genre is not my cup of tea so I'm highly biased against romance novels which I thought this wasn't because I didn't see it in the catergories. So the Catergories NEED TO BE UPDATED

Confusedscistudent
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(tried my best to avoid spoilers)

I was hooked to this novel for about 300 chapters, until I realised that I was just reading for the sake of reading, and not because the story was any good.

The first few chapters (maybe 30 or so?) were quite good for a beginning arc and had me hooked into the story. While the worldbuilding wasn't as initially on point as I thought it was, it wasn't bad by any means. Author is consistent in world building at least.

However, once you begin settling to read more than the first few chapters, you tend to see the same patterns and the same thing over and over again. The main character and her relationship to many of the side characters doesn't progress emotionally at all. Yes, they may progress plot wise, but emotionally, the characters still have the exact same reactions to each other as always, and they don't have much emotional depth. The character Elvia is the weirdest of all, where she is described as a very cute, angelic type person due to her angellic properties, and is literally treated like a baby in every other chapter. The characters all rush to protect her and treat her for every single thing. I guess that's cute and fits in with the emotional maturity of the teenagers that this story initially has. Fine. But then this emotional dynamic is kept throughout the story at times where it isn't needed, isn't significant, and barely relevant to the story; in the China arc, where the protagonist moves to another country, the character puts herself to sleep by saying the name "evee", multiple feats of magic are performed through just thinking of her and saying her name repeatedly, and even when the character tries to grow as a person, Elvia comes through and bashes all of that to smithereens, even if the character is nowhere close to interacting with the protagonist.Her other friend, Yue, is the exact same except that instead of Elvia's angelicsm or whatever you call it, it's just hotheadedness.

You know how I might joke to someone, something along the lines of "haha, I shall protect you and be your knight, milady" or something silly like that? The parts about Elvia is almost written like if that joke was serious, and for literally no reason from the beginning other than that she's really cute and innocent as a teenager. Yes, eventually the story grows on to justify this by saying that it is the protagonist's loved ones, and that the MC will go to any lengths to protect her or something, but for a lot of the story this theme was there and weirdly brought up when the characters are just teenagers who share a dorm.

Aside from the lack of emotional development with the protagonist's relationships, the protagonist's... magical? development is also very repetitive. Protagonist gets magical problem, but she hasn't shown off her terrifying eldritch monster yet, so all is good! Every few chapters she gets a new spell or some other thing of the sort, and every other chapter, there's some poor idiot who doesn't know of this thing and dies. There are almost no challenges, growth is virtually exponential and eventually everything starts becoming monotonous. Even if the type of problems are changing, the character handles them all the same. Essentially, a very extreme Mary Sue, and once in a while, when she actually does encounter a challenge to her personality where she might actually learn and improve, she shrugs it all off after she overcomes it and it feels like "why was that point even there". 

The story's initial theme of a "reincarnation story" doesn't have much to do with the plotline after a while other than that the character is much more powerful than normal in general, and once in a while she steals a business idea or a poem from Earth to impress someone; even then it doesn't feel very fulfilling, but something that's just thrown at us to fulfill this reincarnation plotline every once in a while.

Stylistically, the story is written decently. However, when you look at the overarching story, you'll realise that there is often no payoff between chapters. It's very easy to get lost in this story, not because it is good, but because the author, Wutosama, is very good at keeping us intrigued while constantly baiting and switching. The chapters language (when it comes to the main character) is very unrealisitc. A lot of the time it feels that the main character is throwing in words that are uneccesary simply for the sake of showing off the author's language, rather than actually contributing anything. The author also constantly talks about clothes of the main character. Normally I wouldn't mind and I'd appreciate an extra detail like that. However in this story the author goes on about it to the point it becomes downright detrimental.

Also, the author is obsessed about the character's white legs to the point it becomes very creepy. It's there every other chapter.

There are many other criticisms I have, and not much strengths, so I won't go on. But while the way the story is written doesn't start off bad, the plot, characters and story elements are masochistic to read.

The grammar is the only part where I have no critique. i'd have said the grammar was a 5, as I did not find many typos and I know the author is at good at fixing typos and other small errors consistently.

Don Oby
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This isn't a reincarnation story

Written on ch 55.

This isn't a reincarnation story.

Why?

Because the MC who is supposed to be a 30 year business woman with a difficult past and strong character has all the wit, resolve, and social ability of a 16 year old girl. 

Now, this isn't to say this is a bad story. It's fairly good for a pretty standard wuxia, which it is. Just because the MC is a woman and the world is more magic, less cultivation, doesn't make the plot armor any less thick nor the characters any more deep. Personailty is literally affected by elemental affinity, leaving about 12 or so character templates, NoM are general simpletons, and everyone thinks the MC is the best thing since sliced bread, not to mention she gets a power-up every fifth chapter. But, all-in-all, it's totally readable, downright binge-worthy, if it wasn't for the false promise that this was a reincarnation story, because it isn't. The MC is supposed to be a business-savvy mature woman so why is she as clueless as an already pretty stupid teenage girl? Why can't she handle awkward social situations with the 15+ years of emotional maturity she has over nearly everyone around her? Why is she so needlessly reckless in a world she barely understands? There are so many holes in her character backstory, you could pass a truck through them. She thinks and acts like a teenage girl constantly and only pretends to be mature by stealing famous lines from authors in her old world. Just because she dresses fancy and reminds the reader every chapter of how secretly old she is doesn't mean she acts like it. It's more like "Upgrading Specialist in Another World," where the soul that was supposed to travel to another world gets destroyed along the way and the actual MC just gets his power; the story would be more honest if it was written that way. But it wasn't, so now I have to read about a 30 year old woman whose never been in a relationship and can't handle horny teenagers, thinks she can beat evil Magus with her less than a year of training, and wanders around slums in stilletos. 

The grammar is great, the style is above average, and the story is okay, but the characters, especially the MC, just leave too much to be desired for me to give it a good score.

Not that you need care. 

flriley
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Consistently well written.

Almost 4,300 pages long, this story is as engaging and interesting years in as it was on page one.  

The author does an amazing job of maintaining continuity, resolving plot points, and introducing fresh and new ideas and characters to maintain the impetus of this world.

Gwen has become one of my favorite MC's, and I have this novel on push notification so that I can read the chapter as soon as it comes out.  And I'm still never able to comment first!.

The 'extras' the author adds, like wardrobe photo examples, character lists, and photo's of main characters, give it an extra dimension that other novels miss.

What's amazing to me, is that almost 4,300 pages in and there is still so much of the story left to conclude.  Gwen still needs to graduate college, win the UICC, move back to Australia.  Visit Japan and England.  Import her business ideas to her home country.  Establish her tower.  Save the house of M.  Improve the quality of life and create a better and more effective government for the NOM's, and kill the void sorceress and the cult of followers that continue to snipe at her wherever she goes.  I won't be surprised if the book reaches 20,000 pages!

patlican
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This story would've been much better if she was a teenager instead of a grown woman in a teenager's body. She already acts, talks and thinks like a teenager. She is actually a decent character when you think of her as the portrayal of a troubled teenager. Not so much when you try to think of her as a strong, grown woman. The reincarnation/soul-travel bit does nothing but detract from the story.

natris
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Author writes very well, has good imagination, world building is very good. Beginning used to be shaky but after the edits it is now fine. I have now read 255 chapters but had to drop it.

My main gripe is his need for the protagonist to solve everything (Marry Sue). I think it is due to the format, it is really hard to do edits and writing it chapter by chapter probably forces the author to concentrate on the "main plot", however it simply does not make SENSE for her to do everything. The amount of "admirers" who are in her thrall now is huge, people much stronger/more experienced than her amongst them.

I would suggest thinking hard how to make her only a minor player in parts of the plots. It would make it all more believable. And adding more cases where she fails. If not everything is on the line, it is easier to sneak this in. Because as this is now, it is getting ridiculous.

Overall I would recommend trying this, it was fun for me most of the time. Not a literary masterpiece, but a somewhat fresh take on the genre.

Barnmaddo
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Well written story, interesting magic system, really detailed and unique setting... My only gripe is how many semi erotic scenes there are. The main character is basically a Lolita who freezes up with panic attacks when talking to her mom or when men look at her lustful or when she's not wearing long pants and men can see her legs.

Lots of scenes of her choosing just the right outfit to wear to some event, often with a corresponding picture from the internet that the author used as inspiration... then going on and on about how many heads she turned or how many people can barely contain their lust for her.

For example there is an early scene where she rides the train and a man starts groping her and ask she can do is freeze in terror. At first I thought this was just a comment on the human condition, or an example of the stories setting, but no, the author just likes writing scenes like that, and you'll find another one every few chapters with some contrived excuse why.

Utekishi
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I picked it hopping for over 200+ chapter wild ride only to be severely disappointment.
 
Firstly lets talk about the setting, soul of our MC jumped from our earth to modern techno magical equivalent where strong reign and magical best run rampant. Humanity only saving grace are Magicians, capital M magicians the living nuke type. Thanks to them their non magical counterparts can live a peaceful life inside shielded cities. Live as the slave like drones to humanity cause. Sound cool, doesn’t work at least not in this novel.
 
Using our earth as a template for a counterpart was a good move with a great potential, potential utterly wasted. What we get is description standard technological world with renamed stuff. There is no or petrol engines, but magic ones, trains don’t use electricity, they use magic! There are cellphones, old trusty Noki the same but better as it have magical screen and magical buttons. Even thought world is magical everything is the same, trains working only on ley lines, that's no problem to have a new “old room” in the same place. Even geopolitical situation is the same or very similar, countries and cities have same names. We have wilderness where bad guys live, monsters that can decimate hundreds of humans, sentient demi-humans that have their own civilization. Humanity was struggling for a hundred or thousand of years to stay alive but everything turned out the same. Carbon copy of our world may be there so a reader can feel at home, but it simply a deal breaking inconsistency. The bad thing is the world is best thing this story has to offer.
 
Magic supposed to be a good part of this story unfortunately its mediocre at best. You need to be born talented, just another thing to win in genetical lottery - a standard common stuff. The bad part is execution, there is no dao, no patch just gut feelings, with is a disgrace to techno magical setting. We are assaulted on how ever present and omnipotent magic power is. You can heal wounds, erect a shield ,bring down elemental Armageddon and power the car. Unfortunately, nobody thought to put this all power to actual use. Magical students are handled magical crystals so they can replenish their power and train more, nobody thought to use magic from earlier mentioned ley lines to create magically saturated place to train, they don’t even use them to power their facilities at least not the useful stuff. They can create true wonders with magic if it’s convenient for the story, but you don’t feel that presented world is magical. The world feels more like mundane world coated in magical terminology and the paint is peeling away.
 
The worst part - characters. Autor seems to believe that bland characters are bad, or at least unwanted in this magical story. But why bother adding depth to the characters when you can spice them up by magnifying their traits. So we have fire girl with explosive character, so explosive she starts bitching at her new roommate literally on the doorstep. Then we have healing girl, small, cute and innocent, of course looking younger than she really is. So sweet she can give a toothashe Just a pet character without a spine. Our main girl, a successful businesswoman, man-eating, beautiful and charming. Hard past but already over it, transported to another world into her teenager body. Well transportation process must have been faulty cause she's a wreak. Emotionally unstable, deprived of her previous life experience, bratty girl finding all fault in others. You would expect her to get a grip of reality, with all the memories but no, she get emotionally unstable - zap a molester (usage magic on non-magical is a severe crime), get emotionally unstable, wreck shit in the park and lose memory, get emotionally unstable and zap your mother, so she can have leverage. You have whole magical world, people can heal internal injuries with hand waving, yet there is nothing that can ease problems that comes with magical affinities, or just help with teenager hormones.
 
That was a point where I had finally enough of this book at the ripe chapter 19.
Grammar and style is on a high level, it fells wasted at this kind of story.
 
If you like over saturated teen drama and lots of emotional instability (bad kind) then you may like it.
 
Ps:
Now it dawned to me why this story feels so irksome, imagine a world where everyone is a Runner girl from the Wandering Inn.
 
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The story has a strong start and sets itself up to have some interesting characters.  However after the first story arc the power creep sets in and everything starts to settle into a rinse and repeat of the main character overpowering every obsicle in her way.

Chyra
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It's a shame, this story started out really well, but it's completely lost it's way.. I used to look forward to reading it but no longer.

I can't tell if it's being milked, or if the author has run out of inspiration, or what. Set an end goal and actually work towards it, like Gwen actually building her own tower instead of all the mucking around going on.

We've now got a bunch of uninteresting and annoying characters, the worst of which is some duck who's purpose appears to be comic relief, but it's anything but.

Another thing that kind of annoyed me is that practically every female MC ends up bi on here (RR that is), to cater to a predominantly male audience I suppose. The worst thing about it is it's obvious, and badly shoe horned in. I wouldn't care if it was done well and appropriately, but eh.

At this point the story is completely missable.