Metaworld Chronicles

A great twist on common D&D spells that U know by heart. Is the first thing that grabbed me to the story, after that I stayed for everything else. 

The Grammar is very well done, quirks in names and nouns when the point of view is that character are used, which I was interesting. Very nice descriptive writing style. Everything is easily understandable and laid out well, making it a treat to read.

The story is great but has some hit or miss moments, missed opportunity, here and there. While this does give it a more realistic feel to it than just a story written to please the reader. While the story is kinda hit and miss, the characters are very well done and believable. Every character is fleshed out and has an obvious identity. For instance, while Yue and Alesia are extremely similar almost identical character types they are obviously different people. This remains to be the same for every main character and even temporary side character or villain. 

This is currently my favorite story here on Royal Road and I enjoy reading every single chapter. Which is currently being released on a regular basis, by the way. If you enjoy a good story, well-done characters, and a solid fantasy world. give it a read.

An interesting discovery that should soon be trending.

The styling is very good, the writing is understandable and you really enjoy reading it.
The grammar is almost perfect, a typo here and there in the last chapter, a few odd words in a sentence but the author fixes this errors so it's a plus.
The pacing is ok, no confusion arises from reading and advances at an ok paces, thankfully there are no 400 pages chapter just for the lore and world building.

Now the story is a bit bland, yeah the mc soul was sent to another plane/world/realm very similar to earth however there are few places that really cause any inconveniances to the mc (plot says that has access to the body owner memories however the "personality" in charge is the one from earth and there are plenty similitudes in both) and they are all the same kind of problem, "i don't know about X", answered by the "do you live under a rock? well it's like this". This is a good method for the author to skip the world building and show important things only when they matter however it feels like it could be used for more.
There are few confrontations (except last few chapters, and no cliffhangers (again except chapter 24), so there is little pressure in the MC and the reader.
This is by no means bad, just simply, that it's a bit more bland  because MC life is more quiet and calm even when the story had said that there could be trouble nothing happened (mc was object of jelousy on the school but there were no incidents, mother is a controlling bitch however impacted very little in the plot of the novel which, arguably, there where few reasons for her to do so).
There are several foreshadows that were not used yet so that could change, however the foreshadows mostly looked like they expanded the backstory instead of changing the world.

The characters are well written and logical, however they are a bit stereotypical (the childhood friend/rival, the best friend with almost opposite personality, the calm, quiet  and reclusive friend). The father is a big question mark, the brother is just explained as being a younger brother with particular show of personality. The rest feels like they are specifically there to be useful to the mc and not because they need/want her for something (none of the seniors pointed out why they stayed with juniors, the other teams are there but are not named, etc)

All in all, a very good novel that (I hope) continues and grows to the potential that it has. It's an almost relaxed reading and very interesting. I'm also wondering how will the author balance the magical power of the humans, seeing as a person with less than a year of experience is blowing a lot of stuff up, how is the older generation of geniuses doing in terms of power (there are no comparison, the teacher killed only one little guy by selecting what to target and the tryed to blow a mythical class snake and failed).

TL;DR: Great novel, good base and future to explore, an easy and "soft" read. Please keep going author-san.

I  first reviewed this when there were 9 chapters out, now there are many more and while I think one or two of the chapters are a bit confusing, overall this story is of exceptionally high quality.

The language used is noticably better that most of the things I've read on this site and I hope that it continues to be updated.

If you like an urban setting for your fantasy, with an interesting magic system, you should definitely give it a go. I would recommend everyone to at least try it, to see if it fits your tastes or not.

Bookmarked and Favourited.

An outstanding story, well worth favorite status. A bit week on the plot line but seriously well worth the time and effort to read. The MC is a bit lacking but looks to be developing right nicely. Def looking forward to reading future installments. To be honest wish it was on amazon in a whole form so I could just read it all at once.

Written on ch 55.

This isn't a reincarnation story.

Why?

Because the MC who is supposed to be a 30 year business woman with a difficult past and strong character has all the wit, resolve, and social ability of a 16 year old girl. 

Now, this isn't to say this is a bad story. It's fairly good for a pretty standard wuxia, which it is. Just because the MC is a woman and the world is more magic, less cultivation, doesn't make the plot armor any less thick nor the characters any more deep. Personailty is literally affected by elemental affinity, leaving about 12 or so character templates, NoM are general simpletons, and everyone thinks the MC is the best thing since sliced bread, not to mention she gets a power-up every fifth chapter. But, all-in-all, it's totally readable, downright binge-worthy, if it wasn't for the false promise that this was a reincarnation story, because it isn't. The MC is supposed to be a business-savvy mature woman so why is she as clueless as an already pretty stupid teenage girl? Why can't she handle awkward social situations with the 15+ years of emotional maturity she has over nearly everyone around her? Why is she so needlessly reckless in a world she barely understands? There are so many holes in her character backstory, you could pass a truck through them. She thinks and acts like a teenage girl constantly and only pretends to be mature by stealing famous lines from authors in her old world. Just because she dresses fancy and reminds the reader every chapter of how secretly old she is doesn't mean she acts like it. It's more like "Upgrading Specialist in Another World," where the soul that was supposed to travel to another world gets destroyed along the way and the actual MC just gets his power; the story would be more honest if it was written that way. But it wasn't, so now I have to read about a 30 year old woman whose never been in a relationship and can't handle horny teenagers, thinks she can beat evil Magus with her less than a year of training, and wanders around slums in stilletos. 

The grammar is great, the style is above average, and the story is okay, but the characters, especially the MC, just leave too much to be desired for me to give it a good score.

Not that you need care. 

Absolutely gripping. Though the first few chapters left me a little confused and wondering where this was going, it didn't take long to hold on tight and enjoy the ride. And when the [SPOILER] happened I was thrown for a giant loop, only compounded with where the story is now and all the history involving her [SPOILER]. Though light on the LitRPG elements, the DnD references make it all the better for an old tabletopper like myself.

Definitely a must-read for any fans of Alt-Earth or Urban Fantasy.

Honestly liked this story. I got caught up in the trials and tribulations of our MC, Gwen, as she tried to adapt to a world like and unlike her old one. 

And like Emily back over in Schooled in Magic, our Gwen, has to get a grasp of the magic that is around her and deal with the social and political landscapes that is corralling her. 

So if you did like Emily in Schooled in Magic, you'll really get a good read out of this one too. 

Overall, I'd really like to someday own the first Ebook of this story. If it ever gets to that point. 

btw, to the Author, I KNOW it's reall you Chris!! Hiding behind an "aussie" facade as a writer on RRL. hahaha! Nice one mate!

Just kidding. 

Gwen the MC is thrown into a magical society with its own rules and obstacles.
Mages have thereby a dominant postion while Non Mages have only limited influence.

The world building creates many options for future content but focuses so far only on mages. The visible main plot line has grown a lot more exciting with the first interlude. The introduction of side characters is solid.

The editing lacks in parts but i am sure the author will fix the minor mistakes.


Genres:
LitRPG - the magic System is loosely based on RPG magic Systems but there are no pop-ups and the "magic rules" are not strict in areas like mana consumption.
Male Lead -  No male lead so far.

Reincarnation - the reincarnation plays only a minor role but allows the MC a more mature personality with more willpower.

Call me sexist if you want but I usually don't usually enjoy stories with female leads, this, however, is an exception.

Absolutely love this story so far, 50 Chapters in and the development of the story is great, and is always keeping me on my toes. it is a great take on Modern-day Urban fantasy.
The English used is excellent. Can't wait to see how the story turns out!

The only downside of the story of the story so far I can pick out is that Forestville doesn't have a train station. kills my emersion every time I read that ;P
- A Northern Beaches Local 

P.S. (sorry for not giving you a 5/5 but I don't believe in perfection)

Long post ahead with a LOT OF SPOILERS, sorry for the errors, i am not a native English speaker.

RANT MODE: ON  REEEEEEEEEE!!!

As of chapter 179

I am glad she finally get "strong", because i was really getting impatient with her as a main character, she:

• is not strong-willed
• is not super smart
• is not creative
• is not original
• is not funny
• have (and still have) no awareness of the world she lives

 With all the things that happened to her, she still too naive, too clueless, too weak-willed, too trusty. that doesn't make any sense she was nearly abducted, nearly raped, got personally mentored by team of experts, nearly got sold by slavers, her familiar killed innocents, killed 2 defenseless slavers, betrayed, kissed and played by a shape shifting horror, nearly got eaten alive by the horror, lost one of her former close friend, survived an invasion of merman man-eater, witnessed the destruction or her city, lost her master, got imprisoned, questioned, killed a defenseless person again, got mentored by a team of experts again, killed a defenseless person again not once but twice in a row. AFTER ALL OF THIS, her character development feel pretty weak.

It would have been pretty good if one her close friend, would have been severely injured because of her naiveness during her field trip in the slums of Shanghai. Her remorse for killings Slavers (people who are solding human beings, WHO ARE FATED TO BE EATED, RAPED OR ENSLAVED) was really out of place, she was nearly a victim of one of them for FUCK SAKE. 

What I also find annoying is the fact that every time she do something, something wrong happen:

• First mission outside, she get abducted
• First mission in the slums, shit got batshit crazy
• First team match outside, an invasion happen her city is destroyed
• First time outside Australia, she get abducted (again)
• First time in a club, she get harassed and to duel a Magus veteran body guard
• First exam of the year, she get dueled for a whattheheck reason 
• First time outside Shanghai in the slums, shit go crazy (again)

She have no control of what's happening to her, no control of her environment. She is a victim of her “talent”, a victim of her beauty and all the times she was in a real pinch she was saved by plot armor and not because of her competences.

Most the thing she got was given to her because she is an exotic guinea pig and because of family. The only times she earned anything by herself was in the first nightclub, the exam duel and in some extent the dungeon but it's still insignificant compared to all the tutoring (which was priceless), opportunities and tools given by her mentors and family.

She didn't have a main character vibe at all, just a pretty vase who won the genetic lottery with a lot of plot armor with a lot of inspiring stolen quotes and with a lot of naiveness, not substantial at all, only superficial.

AND after 170+ chapters she finally get some strength and gut. F.I.N.A.L.L.Y !

We also have some hint of where she will use her economic and management expertise from her past life. Because her past life so far just gave her maturity, which I concede is pretty important but also pretty underwhelming.

Anyway, what she need now is to be dropped in combat zone and survive by herself ALONE to get some good character devolvement and reality check. And finally get to the Asura path, the path of carnage you teased us so much.

RANT MODE : OFF

So after all the trashtalk what is good about Gwen and this story? Her maturity, her femininity, she is not a social outcast (like most of the MCs of fantasy novels), she is literate person, she know how to talk to people, she know how to dress herself, she is someone who you want to be friend with, a really good cousin, a little bit too flawless, her only flaw is her naivety (I think you will do something about it), her character is logic (most of the time) and understandable.

What I also really like is her shamanic power, I really hope this become her trump card (not lightning, not void) and will not just stay like it’s right now. The trek in the Outback was really good, would you kindly, add some more mystery and spiritism, please!

The world building is interesting and original, a bit messy, we have some difficulty to really imagine how it is. The parallels with our world make things even more confusing, I know you want to reveal it little by little but I hope some we get some library montage with a bit of info dumping (too much of it is annoying, but a bit of it doesn't hurt) to avoid Gwen being clueless of supposed "basic" knowledge all the times.

SOOO, finally the strongest point of this novel are the side characters most of them are colorful and interesting. We REALLY need more SIDE TORIES and more of their P.O.V.

But first a little critic about her situation in her family. When your father is irresponsible shitbag and your mother is a superficial psycho, the responsibility of the home (and even more with a mono-parental father) fall on the big sis, she should have been a lot more closer and concerned about her brother and also lot more responsible (even with a traumatic divorce) and also more mature.

Now for the side characters: 

• The brother Percy: Jealousy and rivalry is pretty common amongst siblings so his character is OK, I am not really worried about him and what you will do with him, the resolution of the siblings relation should be good, I have faith in Gwen, I just hope you give him more screen time and development if he could get a bit of Jun, Richard and/or Hai (the womanizing side to piss off Grandpa) that would be good.
• The father Morye/Hai: He is a shitbag, an absolute garbage of human beings Gwen should be a lot more critic about him, he cheated his wife multiple times, was an irresponsible father, an insensible son, he broke the hearth of his mother. Gwen should not forgive him so easily and she should confront him about what he have done, I know he is there for the comedy relief. But I really hope he change the way he is with his new wife (who loves him) and future child, and do some introspection of what he have done and finally get more responsible for someone of his age.
• The Mother Helena: She is a total psycho, she is just there to be mean. I hope you give her more background story and the reason why she was like that. Like the father I hope she do some introspection, stop being so prideful and ask her daughter to forgive her (with a lot tears from both of them, as it should be.)
• The best friend Yue: The side character I dislike the most, she is vulgar, abrasive and full of herself, with little self-restrain, she is not cute at all. She really need some character development, a good occasion for that would have been when you teased and cliffhanged us during the Dryads Grotto arc and then … Nothing, that was such a bummer seriously, give her some side stories or a training montage to get her some maturity and self-restrain, because right now she is unbearable.
• The mascot Evee: She is cute extremely chibi-moe character, I don’t think she need more development. What we really need his more SIDE STORIES from her, more FLUFFY adventures! Please for the love of cuteness! What is happening in the UK seems really interesting.
• The cousin Richard: Really cool, strong and snarky. He would have been a really good male lead if he was not Gwen cousin (cousin fucking is a big NONO!) he lost some luster during the Shanghai arc his obsession with Gwen is a little creepy, and I really hope get with Mina.
• The cousin Mina: a cool girl, nothing much, nothing less. I really hope she end with Richard, even if she doesn’t deserve him, at least they would be cute couple (?).
• The cousin Peaches: YoYooo Biiiitchess, he is cool bros even with his weird antics he is really likable, one of the more colorful side character and a good comedy relief with his bros.
• The cousin Petra: cool girl too, nothing to say about her. She is cool how she is right now. I hope she stay in contact with Gwen and became her personal magical tools supplier.
• The new friend Mia: She was way more interesting before the revelation of her motives, she is still ok but a lot less interesting.
• Mia’s bodyguard Kitty: Dunno what to think about her, I don’t really dislike nor do I like her, she need some development she may have some potential.
• Mia’s big bro Marong: You teased him as a mid-boss and asshole but he was pretty inoffensive, future male lead maybe? Right now we don’t know much about him yet, but I hope you give him more screen time, he seems interesting.
• Lulian AKA Lulu: She is clueless about the world outside her clan, but she is simple and just cute. I hope she get closer to Gwen and became a permanent member of her entourage, some sort of bodyguard and protector for Gwen (she really need one). We also need some side stories of her clueless adventures.
• Big sis Alesia: the cool big sis, she is flamboyant even if she has little self-restrain she is still likeable (contrary to Yue). Clumsy but cute, really charming.
• Big bro Gunther: The handsome big bro, his “she is my WIFE” during his presentation during the high school arc was really out of place. Expect for this nothing more to say, he do his job and his dependable. A-OK
• Master Killroy: He was ok? A lot of drama, if you rescucite him, please transform him in a treant or nature spirit. He and Sufina would be earth warming couple.
• Grandpa Guo: A bit of crazy old man, but I can understand why he is like this, like Gwen’s brother Percy, I am not really worried about him, I can foresee (haha!) where this is going.
• Babulya: A lovely Grandma, everyone would want a grandma like her. Nothing more to say. She is just adorable.
• Uncle Jun: Really like him, I really hope he get some development with Gwen where she become her adopted daughter and her disciple, she need him (as a father she never had) and he also need her (as a child he hoped to have). I hope we can get some backstory and I also hope Gwen can meet his ex-wife (with some funny misunderstanding) and help them to go back together and find a solution to their child problem.
• Ariel: Cute and fluffy would have been the mascot if Evie was not here, compared to Caliban she is not that interesting, perhaps some light adventure when Gwen don’t see her would be interesting (something like hamtaro).
• Caliban: Really interesting creature, he feel like a baby armed a Mini-nuke launcher, I can see it a lot potential with him, I really hope he get smarter and it would really to had a cute “trap” form like a big giant cute caterpillar 12 feet long 6 feet tall with a chubby head and chubby legs (something like a water bear) in resting mode, then get full spawn of Azatoth when in combat mode. Maybe ?

So that’s it for the side characters

A side note for the teasing…

I mean in beginning the awakening ceremony was like big drama and shit but nope nothing wrong she is actually super OP…

Then she try to find a solution to make money by contacting her Opa, will she use her past life expertise to make big money? Nope, she forget about this and end totally sponsored and tutored by her Opa and Killroy…

Then she prepare the super big competition where she will be against to TOP school of Sydney, How strong are the elites of Prince and Lilith, how far can she go ? DunDunDaaa… Nope, shit go wrong, crab men invade and Killroy ex-wife do a comeback…

THEN, Yue and Co are teleported in middle an tropical jungle where uberstrong dryad lives, Yue go batshit craycray, They finally find Sufina : “You are in big trouble” Then Cliffhanger ! THEN, then… Nothing…

…

Pleeeeassseee… Don’t do thisssss…

Finally one of the big reason I like your novel, is because I can relate of a lot of thing in this novel, I am a mixed race (Chinese-Polynesian-French) with Asian heritage born and living in an western environment in Oceania (New Caledonia), I spent a lot of time in Australia and Sydney and I can totally see what you an talking about in your novel. Its good see this, most of the English modern novels are US-Centric and this environment offer exotism and originality.

In conclusion your novel have some flaws, but it’s still pretty solid, the Female lead is a bit bland and need some development. The side characters are nice and colorful, the world is a bit confusing but interesting, no more teasing please…And thanks for the read, one of the best of RR.