Metaworld Chronicles

by Wutosama

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Contemporary Fantasy Female Lead Magic Reincarnation Slice of Life Strong Lead
Warning This fiction contains:
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Gwen Song awoke in a world that was not her own, in which everything she was familiar with had been replaced. Instead of airplanes and electricity, this 21st-century Earth is ruled by magic and dragons; humanity survives in a land of magical beasts and otherworldly beings, protected by shielded enclaves and magical constructs.

Follow Gwen across the world as she struggles to rebuild her life in this strange new reality. Behold a tale of adventure, friendship, and (of course), magic! Witness as she grows from a simple grade school student to a fully-fledged Mage, through university and beyond, discovering the secrets of a world made unreal by magic and mysticism.

 

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Bonus ::  Gwen's Outfits
Character Summaries :: Character Summary (Newest) 
Glossary and Magic System :: Glossary

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter 1 - Some Things Begin, Something Ends ago
Chapter 2 - Awakening ago
Chapter 3 - Pass Conceded ago
Chapter 4 - Familia ago
Chapter 5 - The Longest Day ago
Chapter 6 - It takes Three to Tango   ago
Chapter 7 - A Step in the Right Direction ago
Chapter 8 - No News like Bad News ago
Chapter 9 - A Team   ago
Chapter 10 - A Moment of Truth    ago
Chapter 11- Dark Ritual ago
Chapter 12  - Instructions and Instructors ago
Chapter 13 - The Calm ago
Interlude 1 - A Hint of Thunder ago
Chapter 14 - Oedipus Wrecks ago
Chapter 15 - The House of Huang ago
Chapter 16 - A New Leaf ago
Chapter 17 - First Blood ago
Interlude 2 - The Looming Cloud ago
Chapter 18 - What Great Beast ago
Chapter 19 - The Woods have Wolves ago
Chapter 20 - Riding Hood ago
Chapter 21 - Breath ago
Chapter 22 - The Snake, the Lady and the Maiden Fair  ago
Chapter 23 - Candles ago
Chapter 24 - Follow the Red Rabbit
Chapter 25 - First Impressions are Important ago
Chapter 26 - Secrets ago
Chapter 27 - Full Fathom Five ago
Chapter 28 - A Long Way Down ago
Chapter 29 - Sweet Hearts and Sweet Meats ago
Chapter 30 - Two Dogs on a Hearth ago
 Chapter 31 - Some Things Never Change ago
Chapter 32 - Coming Home ago
Chapter 33 - An Old Man's Favours ago
Chapter 34 - Apples from the Tree ago
Chapter 35 - The Grind ago
Chapter 36 - Here be Monsters ago
Chapter 37 - Of Monsters and Gwen ago
Chapter 38 - A False Start ago
Chapter 39 - The Woods are Lovely, Dark and Deep ago
Chapter 40 - Miles to Go Before She Sleeps ago
Chapter 41 - Sleeping Beauty ago
Chapter 42 - The Very Hungry Caterpillar ago
Chapter 43 - Crossroads ago
Chapter 44 -  Scar Tissues ago
Chapter 45 - Skeletons ago
Chapter 46 - A Slice of Paradise ago
Chapter 47 - He who Hunts Monsters ago
Character Summaries ago
Chapter 48 - Cruel to be Kind ago
Chapter 49 - Fortune's Fool ago
Chapter 50 - Close Encounters ago
Chapter 51  - Full Pelt ago
Chapter 52 - Great Expectations ago
Chapter 53 - Premonitions ago
Chapter 54 - No Harm in Trying ago
Chapter 55 Poor Boys and Rich Girls ago
Chapter 56 - A Curious Encounter ago
Chapter 57 - Show and Tell ago
Chapter 58 - Reunions ago
Chapter 59 - One Thousand and One Nights ago
Chapter 60 - Valkyries ago
Chapter 61 - True Lies ago
Chapter 62 - First World Problems ago
Chapter 63 - An Old Bird Dreaming ago
Chapter 64 - Into the Wild ago
Chapter 65 - A Favour for a Favour ago
Chapter 66 - Shortcomings ago
Chapter 67 - The Migloo Ghost ago
Chapter 68 - Dark Tidings ago
Chapter 69 - Until Dawn ago
Chapter 70 - House of the Rising Huang ago
Chapter 71 - Til the Fat Lady Sings ago
Chapter 72 - Sharing is Caring ago
Chapter 73 - So Long, and Sanks for the Fush ago
Chapter 74 - All work and No Lunch ago
Chapter 75 - Days of Our Lives ago
Chapter 76 - A Crooked Deal ago
Character and Magic Summary 2 ago
Chapter 76.5 - Interlude 3 - Dark Waters ago
Chapter 77 - Anticipations ago
Chapter 78 - A Rose and its Thorns ago
Chapter 79 - The Greater the Expectation ago
Chapter 80 - The Harder the Fall ago
Chapter 81 - A Sight for Sore Eyes ago
Chapter 82 - When the Levy Breaks ago
Chapter 83 - An Unfortunate Encounter ago
Chapter 84 - Broken Chains ago
Chapter 85 - Wave Break ago
Chapter 86 - The Devil's Advocate ago
Chapter 87 - True Lies ago
Chapter 88 - The Widening Gyre ago
Chapter 89 - The Falcon cannot hear the Falconer ago
Chapter 90 - The Worst are Full of Passion ago
Chapter 91 - Reeling Shadows of Desert Birds ago
Chapter 92 - The Darkness drops Again ago
Chapter 93 - Spiritus Mundi ago
Chapter 94 - When Time is Short ago
Chapter 95 - The Salty Saviour ago
Chapter 96 - Come Together ago
Chapter 97 - Picking up the Pieces ago
Chapter 97.5 - Epilogue for Arc 1- No Birds Sing ago
Chapter 98 - No News Like Bad News ago
Chapter 99 - Cabin Fever ago
Chapter 100 - Stifling ago
Chapter 101 - Creepers and Crawlers ago
Chapter 102 - O Captain ago
Chapter 103 - Respite ago
Chapter 104 - Detour ago
Chapter 105 - Taken ago
Chapter 106 - Suspicious Minds ago
Chapter 107 - An invitation from a Doppelgänger ago
Chapter 108 - A Sliver of Silver ago
Chapter 109 - A Meeting at the Threshold ago
Chapter 110 - Cold City ago
Chapter 111 - More ways than One ago
Chapter 112 - To Skin Some Cats ago
Chapter 113 - Remember Me ago
Chapter 114 - Introspection ago
Chapter 115 - No Longer Alone ago
Chapter 116 - A Tale of Two Towers ago
Character Summary 3 ago
Chapter 117 - Hold on and Let Go ago
Chapter 118 - Human Nature ago
Chapter 119 - Risk and Reward ago
Chapter 120 - Visions and Revisions ago
Chapter 121 - Spotty Hands ago
Chapter 122 - Night Whispers ago
Chapter 123 - A Matter of Face ago
Chapter 124 - Halcyon Days ago
Chapter 125 - A Course of Course ago
Chapter 126 - Off to see the Wizard ago
Chapter 127 - Dog Whistles ago
Chapter 128 - Questions and Answers ago
Chapter 129 - A Trojan Gift Horse ago
Chapter 130 - A Gift once Given ago
Chapter 131 - Prepatory ago
Chapter 132 - Fault Lines ago
Chapter 133 - The Great Divide ago
Chapter 134 - Picking up the Pieces ago
Chapter 135 - Regrets ago
Chapter 136 - Mixtures and Admixtures ago
Chapter 137 - Skinner's Box ago
Chapter 138 - Queries and Answers ago
Chapter 139 - Good Neighbours ago
Chapter 140 - Knots ago
Chapter 141 - The Age of Experience ago
Chapter 142 - Orientation ago
Chapter 143 - Lessons of Life ago
Chapter 144 - A bob on the Snout ago
Chapter 145 - Classes and classes ago
Chapter 146 - Mo Money, No Problems ago
Chapter 147 - Routine ago
Chapter 148 - The Troubles ago
Chapter 149 - Paternal Issues ago
Chapter 150 - A Charmed Life ago
Chapter 151 - Fight or Flight ago
Chapter 152 - The Wrong way to Duel ago
Chapter 153 - Indigestion ago
Chapter 154 - The Greener Grass ago
Chapter 155 - The Damned ago
Chapter 156 - When the Red Mist Rolls in ago
Chapter 157 - Blood and Guts ago
Chapter 158 - Hesitation at the Threshold ago
Chapter 159 - Between Concrete and a Hard Place ago
Chapter 160 - Once more into the Breach ago
Chapter 161 - No Place should Murder Sanctuarise ago
Chapter 162 - Mightier than the Sword ago
Character Summary 4 ago
Chapter 163 - Dreams of Tomorrow ago
Chapter 164 - Balance in all Things ago
Chapter 165 - Rest and Relax ago
Chapter 166 - Of Peaches and Men ago
Chapter 167 - Shadows on the Wall ago
Chapter 168 - For Thou art with Me ago
Chapter 169 - This Far, no Further ago
Chapter 170 - Nighthawks ago
Chapter 171 - Great Anticipations ago
Chapter 172 - No Mitigating Nourishment ago
Chapter 173 - Nothing Quite like Loneliness ago
Chapter 174 - Pinky Promises ago
Chapter 175 - Detours ago
Chapter 176 - Laughing the Night Away ago
Chapter 177 - Tempus Fugit ago
Chapter 178 - Hai Five ago
Chapter 179 - Goats and Monkeys! ago
Chapter 180 - Frogger ago
Chapter 181 - A Model of You ago
Chapter 182 - Bush Meat ago
Chapter 183 - Happy Campers ago
Chapter 184 - Come a-Waltzing Matilda with Me ago
Chapter 185 - Her Beauty and her Terror ago
Chapter 186 - Silencing the Lamb ago
Chapter 187 - Karma Comes Calling ago
Chapter 188 - Millstone ago
Chapter 189 - Calamity Gwen ago
Chapter 190 - Truth will Out ago
Chapter 191 - A Series of Unfortunate Events ago
Chapter 192 - The Black Goat ago
Chapter 193 - How to Make Gravy ago
Chapter 194 - Confessions of a Dragon-Kin in Hangzhou ago
Chapter 195 - How Much do I love Thee? ago
Chapter 196 - How to fold a Paper Tiger ago
Chapter 197 - Whetting the Appetite ago
Chapter 198 - The Undertow ago
Chapter 199 - A Stick in the Mud ago
Chapter 200 - Curtain Call ago
Chapter 200.5 - Interlude - A Prickling of the Thumb ago
Chapter 201 - Green-eyed Gwen ago
Chapter 202 - To her Door ago
Chapter 203 - The Cuckoo Crows Thrice ago
Chapter 204 - Don't Dream its Over ago
Metaworld Spellcraft & Glossary ago
Chapter 205 - Bookworms ago
Chapter 206 - Chekhov's Dragon ago
Chapter 207 - Where the Side Quests Roam ago
Chapter 208 - Trouble in Paradise ago
Chapter 209 - Dances with Deerhounds ago
Chapter 210 - Six Degrees of Separation ago
Chapter 211 - I have become... ago
Chapter 212 - Who let the Dogs Out? ago
Chapter 213 - Silence of the Apes ago
Chapter 214 - Monkey in the Middle ago
Chapter 215 - What lies Beneath ago
Chapter 216 - Favour of the Father ago
Chapter 217 - Many Jasons in Pursuit ago
Chapter 218 - Loftier Ambitions ago
Chapter 219 - Figuro Magnifico ago
Chapter 220 - A Step in the Right Direction ago
Chapter 221 - Who watches the Watchers ago
Chapter 222 - Credit where Credit is Due ago
Chapter 223 - Dai Harder ago
Chapter 224 - December Days ago
Chapter 225 - The Dumplings of Prosperity ago
Chapter 226 - A Tuft of Flower ago
Chapter 227 - A Tall Poppy ago
Chapter 228 - I guess that's why they call it the Blues ago
Chapter 229 - A Crucible's Caress ago
Chapter 230 - The Devil's Plea-Bargain ago
Chapter 231 - Fingerpainting ago
Chapter 232 - No Source of Honey ago
Chapter 233 - The Milk-Tea of Human Kindness ago
Interlude - Percy's Day Off ago
Chapter 234 - What doesn't kill you... ago
Chapter 235 - Some like it Hot ago
Chapter 236 - A Paradox of Prophesy ago
Chapter 237 - Brothers and Sisters ago
Chapter 238 - An Interview with the Void Sorceress ago
Chapter 239 - Flight of the Bumble Bee ago
Chapter 240 - Slippery Slopes ago
Chapter 241 - The Perils of Fame ago
Chapter 242 - Paranoid Draconoid ago
Chapter 243 - Many hands make Light Labour ago
Chapter 244 - The Fonder Heart ago
Chapter 245 - Second Chances ago
Chapter 246 - Milu No.5 ago
Chapter 247 - The Importance of a Strong Handshake ago
Chapter 248 - A City of Gold ago
Chapter 249 - Cocks and Hens ago
Chapter 250 - Chain Reaction ago
Chapter 251 - Old Fashioned ago
Chapter 252 - When it rains, it pours ago
Chapter 253 - Small Mercies ago
Chapter 254 - Foul Play ago
Chapter 255 - Shattering the Peace ago
Chapter 256 - Riposte ago
Chapter 257 - Virtue in Vengeance ago
Chapter 258 - Accounting for Victory ago
Interlude - One Night in Yangon ago
Chapter 259 - Burmese Days ago
Chapter 260 - Kitty come Home ago
Chapter 261 - Waiting for Godot ago
Chapter 262 - O Brother, where art thou? ago
Chapter 263 - Veni Vidi Vici ago
Chapter 264 - A Murderer and a Villain ago
Chapter 265 - Tricks and Trades ago
Chapter 266 - A Mage of many Talents ago
Chapter 267 - Hell hath no Fury ago
Chapter 268 - Sour Grapes ago
Chapter 269 - Homewrecker ago
Chapter 270 - Fight Fire with Lightning ago
Chapter 271 - Fair Winds and Ill Tides ago
Chapter 272 - How to Train your Wyvern ago
Chapter 273 - Between a Void-Beast and a Hard Place ago
Chapter 274 - A Brave New World ago
Chapter 275 - Land of the Risen Sun ago
Chapter 276 - Serpents in the Midst ago
Chapter 277 - The Sun Also Rises ago
Chapter 278 - A Modest Proposal ago
Chapter 279 - Birds of a Feather ago
Chapter 280 - Troll in the Trees ago
Chapter 281 - Where the Wyverns Crow on Trees ago
Chapter 282 - Out of the Blue ago
Chapter 283 - The Seeds of Trust ago
Chapter 284 - An Unexpected Boon ago
Chapter 285 - Into the Maelstrom ago
Chapter 286 - A warm up ago
Chapter 287 - A Tale of two Horrors ago
Character Summary 5 ago
Chapter 288 - Takanakuy ago
Chapter 289 - The Call of the Void ago
Chapter 290 - Battle Royale ago
Chapter 291 - The Hands of Victory ago
Chapter 292 - The Setting Sun ago
Chapter 293 - Gears and Levers ago
Chapter 294 - Nightmares ago
Chapter 295 - Lessons from the Underground ago
Chapter 296 - Prelude to Premonition ago
Chapter 297 - The Pale Prince of Pretoria ago
Chapter 298 - What Tomorrow Brings ago
Chapter 299 - Shattering Expectations ago
Chapter 300 - Caliban, Interrupted ago
Chapter 301 - Prelude to the Long Night ago
Chapter 302 - The Living and the Dead ago
Chapter 303 - Peace for the Dead, Life for the Living ago
Chapter 304 - The Three Little Necromancers ago
Chapter 305 - Wyverns First ago
Chapter 306 - Party Crasher ago
Chapter 307 - War Games ago
Chapter 308 - Et Victoria ad Defectum ago
Chapter 309 - Humbled Hearts ago
Chapter 310 - Call of the Deep ago
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flriley
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Consistently well written.

Almost 4,300 pages long, this story is as engaging and interesting years in as it was on page one.  

The author does an amazing job of maintaining continuity, resolving plot points, and introducing fresh and new ideas and characters to maintain the impetus of this world.

Gwen has become one of my favorite MC's, and I have this novel on push notification so that I can read the chapter as soon as it comes out.  And I'm still never able to comment first!.

The 'extras' the author adds, like wardrobe photo examples, character lists, and photo's of main characters, give it an extra dimension that other novels miss.

What's amazing to me, is that almost 4,300 pages in and there is still so much of the story left to conclude.  Gwen still needs to graduate college, win the UICC, move back to Australia.  Visit Japan and England.  Import her business ideas to her home country.  Establish her tower.  Save the house of M.  Improve the quality of life and create a better and more effective government for the NOM's, and kill the void sorceress and the cult of followers that continue to snipe at her wherever she goes.  I won't be surprised if the book reaches 20,000 pages!

Zethuron
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A New life on an alternate earth, with magic and monsters!

Reviewed at: Chapter 299 - Shattering Expectations

Started this story with already high expecations, and now like 4800 pages and 299 chapters later, i can safely say im happily surprised, with this story being actually one of my new favorites.

The story starts with the MC, Gwen Song, a 30 years old business consultant. One day she wakes up finding herself to be in the body of a 15 year old herself, with conflicting memories about two worlds. She finds out that it is now 2003, in another version of earth, one with magic, demi-humans and monsters, one where most of humantity lives shielded in the cities, away from the dangers of the wildlands. In such a world Gwen finds herself in. She has to go undergo many trials, the first being awakening her magical affinity which doenst go as expected, while there is also her family, one that gave her a hard childhood in her past life, and in this one it is no different, and thats just the start of it all, of a wild eventful life in the magical world Gwen is now in.


I like Gwen as a character, she is well written, but also flawed in her own ways, a character i can feel with, as she lives her eventful life, of making new friends, as she struggles and eventually triumphs over her enemies, or even losing those she knows and cared about.... While it may seem Gwen grows overpowered fast due to the powers she conviently has gotten, and has it seemingly too easy with recieving unique gifts and mentoring, the plot does quite require her to grow strong, especially with who is the main antagonist of the story so far. At times Gwen can act quite irrational for her mental age, but that is due to her physical age and the fact that her increasing magical affinity also affects her behavior, of her and other mages. 

At times it may seem she is without any set morals, as she kills to have more power, but actually its not that bad, she refuses to go wild with that, to be not like her greatest enemy, one that is so overpowered because of having absorbed so much power from her enemies, a path Gwen tries to avoid going on, atleast as much as possible, but its simply not possible for her to fully avoid that, since she needs power to defeat Sobel, her enemy.

Its true that at first it may seem that the transmigration aspect of the story basically doenst seem to matter at all to the plot aside from the initial reincarnation and that the story seemingly could have been done without it, however it does quite matter overall, even if its not exactly obvious, for example there is her mental maturity as a woman of 30 years old, which quite saves her in a lot of situations, even if that maturity gets limited by her physical age of 15 years old.

Then there is the fact that Magical world Gwen absolutely did not have a easy life, her mother Helena being a utter detriment to all she does, making M. Earth teenager Gwen a utter wreck, one that has nobody to even go to with her problems, to find stability in, not even her father who is simply useless as a parent. O. Earth Gwen had a similiar life, but overcame it eventually and worked to become a relatively succesful businesswoman, and would have kept doing that, until the transmigration happened.

 

Some characters may seem to be behave in a sterotypical way and seem cliched, but once again the higher affinity someone has for their element, the more their behavior is being influenced by it, this is especially noticeable with Yue, Elvia and Alesia, but to a degree also Gwen herself.

This story features such a wide variety of characters, while many of them may seem simple on the surface, they totally are not like that, not at all. For example Richard or Mia. Honestly the character im the most impressed by is Walken,  while at first he may seem to be a total jerk, one that can only be hated, and that hate is even justified because of what he did, even if there are circumstances. He however quite redeemed himself, to a way i grudgingly respect him, even if there is still what he did.

The one character im quite conflicted about is Percy, i dont exactly know what to make of him, at first he seemed like he would be a totally neglected character, one thats not important to the story at all, but then that changed by him being brought in the spotlight, in a event that made me dislike him and then that changed again, i honestly dont have a clue where the author is going with his character.

Then there are those characters that just provide something extra to the story, making the story much more bearable with bringing laughs, like Caliban does every time he appears before someone new, or Tao (even if he is near useless,he is still a fun character.)

This story starts off good, if not great yet, it takes some time for it to actually get to the action, as Gwen has to first sort of settle herself in her new way of life, returned to the body of a 15 year old, it takes a while for the story to go past that, but when it does, it really does it big. Later arcs are like that,  slowish plot  at first, with a large climax at the end.

While the setting for the story and its magic system, wich by the way is inspired by Dungeon and Dragons, may not exactly be original, they are however done very well in this story.

The setting for the story seemed to be sort of a standard one with the earth having experienced a apocalypse and humans having to hide in the cities, but over the course of the story it shows to be so much more, as it is revealed how the society of magic works, the functioning of the Frontiers and Tier 1 cities, and the differences between them, even what the place of the non-magical humans is in that world (spoiler: its not easy for them)

What is simply by far the greatest aspect of this story is the world Wutsosama has built for the story. There is simply so much there. Despite being a magical alternate version of earth, with sort of similiar history, it just feels like a realistic world, one that could actually exist.

The magical earth has a whole alternative history of its own, while it may follow a pretty similiar route for the most part, there are still major differences, that are due to the existence of magic throughout all of history, the author went really creative here with the differences and the similarities, for example Israel and Egypt who are eternal enemies of eachother. It is also interesting how at times the existence of Demi-Humans changed history, or actually took a place in history, like Centaur Mongol Empire.

I have to applaud the author for actually trying to show the world they have created for  the story, showing us much more than simply the likes of only China, USA or Australia. That does include the cultures of the nations and people. It is shown that the author has a lot of knowledge about other cultures by having journeyed to many countries, learning about their cultures and history, especially the Indegenious Australian people, or the Incans. This adds just more to the story, making it a even better whole.

As said, the magic system may be mainly inspired by Classic D&D, but its a system on its own, one that fits with the rest of the world.

An additional thing is that the author brings his expertise in economics to the story, by making that the MC's field of expertise before she got transmigrated, at first she does not have any chance of using that at all, considering there are just no oppurtinities for it, but later on it does get used. It may seem weird that nobody else has had such ideas earlier in that world, but remember that the world is a alternate one, one where technology never developed as far as in ours, due to the existence of magic negating the need for a lot of that development, and there is also the fact that some important events in modern history of our world never happened in that one, like the Great Depression which understandably never made it that neccesary to develop such advanced economics, while there is also Crystals being the main currency, one that is very resilient to inflation due to the massive practical uses it has, when compared to paper currency.

All of that combined makes for one of the most well constructed stories i have read so far in webfiction, only outdone by the likes of Wandering Inn, Mother of Learning and A Practical Guide of Evil.



This story mostly has good grammar, without barely any problems, but thats rather due to the amount of editing gone in it, this is due to the author making quite the amount of mistakes in his chapters, normally its not that bad considering those mistakes get noticed by readers and fixed, however problems still remain with the grammar, especially the first 80 or so chapters have a quite noticeable worse  grammar quality when compared to the later chapters. Special thanks to especially Andur and other readers for helping to make this story have a good steady grammar.

 

The writing style is just solid throughout the course of the story so far. Nice balance between story elements. Also the story moves at a fitting pace, switching speed when neccesary for the story, either slowing down to let the characters have time together, for conflicts to be resolves, or going fast to bridge a peroid of time, still following what happens without glossing over everything, but in such a way that the story also does not stall at a specific moment. The scenes are sufficiently detailed, with just enough to give some idea of what the scene is like, to at times more than enough to give the reader a image of just whats happening, though this story tends to go in the extreme at times with unnecesary details, like the dresses!

 

A extra thing i like is that there is all that additional material the author does provide, to give a better image of what the characters are like, how they look like, what are their skills and etc. And its only getting started with that, because the author is officially commissioning art for the story, i am interested in just what will come of that. There is even the published version of the story, thats professionally edited, with improved scenes and writing, if one has the money, i would recommend to buy to support the story so it can get more popular.

 

This story covered already so much in just 4800 pages, yet we still have a huge amount of the world left to still visit, the plot is nowhere near complete and there are so many things that still have to be adressed in the story, expect this story to be one for the long run, it wont be completed anytime soon.

Just a bonus, if you think yourself to be a actual 'first' commenter, then try to beat those madlads who always get first, its not easy!

With having said all of this, this is a story i just have to recommend, to the vast majority of readers, i really recommend to give it a try, to look further than what is shown in the story, to me this story is one of royalroads best, if one atleast gives the story a chance by reading far enough so it truly shows how good it is overall.

JackStiles
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A great twist on common D&D spells that U know by heart. Is the first thing that grabbed me to the story, after that I stayed for everything else. 

The Grammar is very well done, quirks in names and nouns when the point of view is that character are used, which I was interesting. Very nice descriptive writing style. Everything is easily understandable and laid out well, making it a treat to read.

 

The story is great but has some hit or miss moments, missed opportunity, here and there. While this does give it a more realistic feel to it than just a story written to please the reader. While the story is kinda hit and miss, the characters are very well done and believable. Every character is fleshed out and has an obvious identity. For instance, while Yue and Alesia are extremely similar almost identical character types they are obviously different people. This remains to be the same for every main character and even temporary side character or villain. 

This is currently my favorite story here on Royal Road and I enjoy reading every single chapter. Which is currently being released on a regular basis, by the way. If you enjoy a good story, well-done characters, and a solid fantasy world. give it a read.

SkrmnMrgsm
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A good, long view into a developed world, with some familiar aspects but otherwise very thorough worldbuilding. The occasional mistype or awkward word choice are the only indicator that it's written on mobile, and it's otherwise done to a very high quality. 

 

If you like fantasy, if you like stats-light LitRPG, if you like slice of life, if you like a meaty backlog to sink your teeth into, if you like a protagonist with unique skills that still has to work for their success, you'll like this story.

markostaras
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A surprisingly good novel

I am too lazy so I am going to keep it simple. Just read the whole novel and I have to say I am realy surprised. It definitely isn't perfect but is had some extraordinary qualities.


The best by far is the world build. The political system, the way humans live, their enemies etc have an amazing depth and complexity. The author has succeed in combining a western(Harry Potter) with an Eastern(Swallowed Star) set up.

The characters are quite well made. They have depth, feelings and there is a big variety of personalities. The enemies aren't most times the usual wuxia idiots and are often well portraited.

The author seems to be better educated than 99.99% of authors in this site. Her knowledge in history, literature, geography, politics and economics is quite admirable. Also either she has planned really far ahead or she is quite smart. I say that because there are no glaring plot holes and she gives hints about the future and the world without shutting her options.
On another note the AUTHOR IS A WOMAN and i mean nothing bad by saying that. What I want to say is that the characters and the writing are prone to be more interesting for women. Why I say that, wel because all those girls are VERY sentimental, they hug and hug and hug and cry all the time and they act like teens with serious social problems too often. And there is a ton of descriptions about their clothes and make up. 

Finally i want to comment about something really frustrating, which i think boarders stupidity 

Spoiler: Spoiler

 All in all, good job author and why not start accepting donations so you can publish your books?

Kialandi
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Astoundingly well done. On par with the greats of RRL.

 

Style 5/5: Your story incorporates D&D spells in an AU Earth with (in my opinion) perfect representation of 'elements' and also of the pseudo cultivation aspects while ALSO avoiding blatant explication of phenomena, stereotyped villains, and massive expositional chapters. Ergo, 5/5 for Style-you're doing it better than anyone else I've ever read.

 

Your story is actually fairly cliché. I give you kudos for a well-written female protag, for giving a good reason for a 16 year old to have maturity and wit, and for the fact that it seems as though you have put a lot of thought and effort into it, but it is still a story sufficiently similar to other stories that, if I read enough of them, I could not distinguish meaningfully between yours and their's (if my distinguishing were solely based on story). Your plot is not bad. But it gets lost amongst the rest of the stories that are like this.

 

There are occasional editing lapses and mishaps. Not too jarring, not perfect.

 

Your characterizations are great, all your characters are unique, and I find it difficult to track motivations and personalities. That is as it should be.

 

Thank you, and keep up the good work :D

smite2001
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This is my favorite novel on this site, not only because it is refreshing to read a novel taking place in a modern-ish magic world, but also because the author manages to keep the content fresh and interesting despite the high word-count.

While other novels have a strong protagonist that bulldozes over problems and enemies this far into their stories, Gwen, the MC here, gets stronger as one would expect, but is still at a level where all sorts of situations can potentially turn out poorly for her.

A large part of the reader's enjoyment comes from interpersonal interactions, not just from physical (or rather magical) conflict. And boy, are those well-written. This part of the novel is certainly one of the most outstanding, compared to every other novel here, and subjectively every other novel elsewhere, famous bestselling works included. Every major and many minor character on both parts of the good-evil spectrum comes with their own motivation, quirks and reasoning. Few bad guys/gurls are just bad for the sake of plot.

The drama is good without being edgy, the fights are exciting and the worldbuilding lacks any large holes.

If I had to name one thing I don't like, there is little romance or eroticism. There should really be more sex. Seriously, like ten times more. It's a bunch of powerful, excentric teenagers often times unsupervised, there should really be plenty of that.

Everyone should read this novel and force at least two more people to read it as well, for their own sakes.

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My favourite story on this site. Incredible in its creativity, characters and world building. Hundreds of chapters in, the quality of the story is still sky high. 

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I Believe this review will get lost in the hundreds of review this novel has, but I jusy gotta say that this story is really Reaally REAALY good, chapters are lenghty, the mc and supporting cast are believable and relatable characters, there's very few cliches, grammar is impecable, and mr author releases a chapter every few days (usually 3, 4 at most).

This story is in RR top novels for a reason.

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Absolutely absorbing

I am thoroughly enjoying reading this story. It starts of with a common theme used in reincarnation stories, the MC being reborn in another world and taking over the body of someone who just died. However this one has an interesting twist in that the MC is taking over the body of herself at a younger age in an alternate history earth full of magic and monsters. As the world she came from was ours the only advantage she has is the life experiences of an adult while occupying the body of a teenager. I think the setting and color the author gives to the world is outstanding. The cities and scenes are well fleshed out and the descriptions do a good job of bringing life to everything. For the most part the characters all have interesting personalities. There is good variety so that they don't all come off as cookie cutter. The story itself seems well thought out and well written with very few grammar issues. So far it has had some big plot twists that I didn't see coming which I enjoy. I would highly recommend giving this story a shot.