Cry of the Mer

by Fantasy Ocean

Original HIATUS Fantasy Sci-fi Female Lead Grimdark Multiple Lead Characters Non-Human lead
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Katherine Waters has several goals on her list. Graduate high school, get accepted into an advanced photography course, add another ten meters to her personal free-diving and deep-water diving records respectively. Waking up in the stark, sterile environment of an underground lab, part of a secret and illegal experiment definitely didn't make the list. Nor did discovering not only were mermaids not the stories of legends people thought they were, but advanced genetic manipulation had slotted her for an extreme physical transformation.

Faced with an unknown future in captivity, forced to adjust to a new body and lifestyle completely alien to her, with only a psychologically damaged young Mer for company, Katie's life has taken a dramatic turn and she'd do anything to escape it, return home, and regain any sense of the normalcy she lost the moment she opened her eyes.

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arashifufu
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I like the story: it started off exceedingly interesting, and the writing's fine. The post rate is amazing. There are a couple of typos every now and then, but very rarely. The theme is dark, but it only makes you smile more when something nice is happening to the characters. My only complaint is that the characters are portrayed as black-or-white; either evil to the bone or completely nice, for the most part. But it's a minor concern. I reccomend. 

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Good lead with nonsense plot

Reviewed at: 25. It Begins

First of all I’m going to talk about my thoughts on this story. The story has a dark feel to it that draws you in. The main characters are fleshed out and feel like you can relate to Katie. She’s in this horrifying scenario with no escape in sight with a small person depending on them. It’s good.

Here’s the bad. The villains and the plot are hard to take seriously. The doctors are so evil it feels like a parody or caricature of a mad scientist. One is a Dr Mengele type sadist, and the other wants to create mermaids in a demented sceme to make mad money off a water park attraction.

Theres no hint that the government has any plans beyond just ‘kidnap people’ and “????”. It’s not really addressed why this shady government group is hiring random grad students to help their highly illegal human experiments either. Supposedly this is in 2016 or so and they just let unvetted uni kids with phones work at their highly illegal facility where they torture and mutate people.

Miralin
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Up to Chapter 12, this book is an emotional rollercoaster, but it is so well written that you really relate to all the characters introduced and hate on all the evil things happening. So far I am blown away and I would recommend you definitely give it a read, it's really good!

Ryan Slaier
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Beautiful Writing with an Intriguing Story

Reviewed at: 37. Home Sweet Home

Just the writing should be enough to catch your attention. Completely entrancing that I get lost in no matter how many times I reread this story! The style is all the author's own. I've never felt so strongly about a work of fiction like this. It is more of a realistic fantasy, with the science never being ignored. The unnerving sections of the story are so interesting to read. A few grammar mistakes, but nothing that detracts from the overall writing. 

While beautifully worded, yes, some characters feel too much like stereotypes, but it is still an experience to enjoy. You love the heroes and hate the villains. A simple story with so much to discover.

Hyperion915
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I love it, but i dont think i can read it

phenomenal writing, amazing characters, spectacularly well crafted plot, this story has it all. just one thing tho, i feel like im torturing myself, its so depressing. im really sorry that i have to drop this (probably, havent closed the tab yet), but im only 12 chapters in and i feel like im choking on the depressing shit thats come with reading it. for any potential readers, know that this is one of the best written things to be published on this site, but also not something you want to read to escape reality and have fun like i do.

 

btw get this published at some point, i can see it getting really popular once youve done so

xanthelol
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Wow, this is some amazing content. I personally think in some places the paragraphs could be shorter, so it doesn’t look like a wall of text, but other than that, 10/10. It’s too bad you can’t continue posting it, but hopefully some day we’ll all get to see it in bookstores. :)

Werkrat
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This is the best story (In my opinion) that I have ever read I love the story so much it is just perfect.... either that or I am just fucked up for liking it so much

Anyways the story is crafted great every about it is just fucking stunning I really wish you would update this sometime anways thank you for writing the story.

Serinphora
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A story to fall in love with

The story has only one issue I have ever felt with it. Not updating fast enough. This story is beautifully written, wonderously heartbreaking, and completely endearing. Please give this story a read since it deserves every view it gets. Fantasy Ocean as an author can capture the hearts of their readers and leave you wanting more and more.

You will be moved and rocked emotionally by this story. Happy, sad, furious, you will experience it all. It truly is a beautiful work of fiction.

Gandrasch
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Well written, but literally mostly torture

Reviewed at: 12. Cruel Punishment

Very well written, but the story feels like an excuse to write down torture scenes. Why does a scientist want to put his research subject into a waterpark of all things to make money, if its actually government funded top secret stuff? And that's just the most glaring thing.  

LightningShadow7
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The only problem I have with your fantastic work is the long paragraphs, when people see extremely long paragraphs they skip, so it would be fantastic if you were to edit your work into smaller paragraphs into the future for better digestion. I find myself skipping any of your long paragraphs.