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Carball-Tunnel
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It's a Great Story to keep up with!

The Story itself has great characters, getting into dangerous situations and almost every action taken is understandable.

Few Grammer errors though, but nothing too major. Roy and Jackie Wei both come off as two Partners/Brothers who understand each others and each others antics that you really can hate and love both of them, their Boss is very stricted but fair as well. Overall the Story so far is great, highly recommend giving it a shot.

Rayhoo
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Good job setting the tone and the describing the characters/setting. Also I like how the dialogue is used to give the characters personality. There are some gramatical errors here and there, would recommend an editor of some sort