Alternate Dreams

by Crazysurvivor79

Original HIATUS Adventure Fantasy LitRPG Magic Multiple Lead Characters Supernatural
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content

People always go to sleep. Everyone everywhere and anywhere must sleep. Generally we welcome sleep as a time to rest and relax, but what if that changes?. This is a story about 4 young adults whom dont remember how they got together in a supernatural cavern after falling asleep in their homes. Follow them as they hope to emerge from their unexpected circumstances while wondering what could have possiblly taken them there.

*Authors Note: Feel free to give me pointers, this is my first time trying to write and I'm doing it in hopes that practice indeed does make make perfect. If your going to say bad things about it please say it in a constructive and professional manner. I'll try to get a chapter out every week around Friday-Saturday.

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Antice
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This is what story writing is all about.

My greatest favourite so far on RR. The story takes an old clasic litrpg, and dispenses with the silly "interface" bullshit in an ingenious and in hindsight rather obvious way.

I won't post anything plot related in this review, so it's spoiler free.

The main characters are belieavable and relatable to the extreeme. They have the feeling of being real people, with flaws and strenghts that could fit people you know, or just met on the street. You do feel for them, be it the desire to smack them on the back of their heads, or to pat them on the back and tell em good job.

The style used is easy to follow, and there is generally no jarring shifts in perspective that leaves you wondering who's pov you are reading. The flow is good, and the story feels like it's flowing rather naturally from one event to the next. You get to know the people gradually trough their interactions with each other, and there is no glaringly obvious info dumps going on, and those that do happen are well integrated into the story as part of interactions between the mains and other characters. their sizes are also small enough to not go far into exposition territory.

The grammar is simply good. By RR standards I'd even go so far to say it's excelent.

I highly recomend giving this story a good read. you won't regret it.

Lord Vile
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Great story, the mark of good writing is when you feel for the characters, the characters are believably flawed, at some points I've wanted to slap both of the girls and alexs dumb ass. There is little issue with the overall style, the story is a nice new spin, there is nothing wrong with the grammer that cant be fixed with a quick edit. You have written a great story, dont stop, dont give up, good luck and I look forward to the rest of this story.

azarth
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Well done with a side of adventure

 This is an amazing first story. I hope he keeps writing this story long term. If you think the story is slow stick with it. The writing is well done.

I am loving the magic system, I hope the characters continue to advance rapidly. However I am enjoying the fact the characters didn't instantly become OP

Kaellom
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Top quality story, just needs proofreading

Brilliant story. The characters are well fleshed out, it hints at what's happening but saves the big reveal for the end. 

The story just has a few grammar and spelling issues in each chapter though, might want to sort that out.

ImMrMeeseeks
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So nice to have another story to look forward to!

I love the story so far. At first I had skipped clicking on this because I saw it was a group story and I hate how almost all group stories are written, but since I have thoroughly exhausted reading material I had to check it out. Now I am glad I did. What's even better is the sexual content tag.

britael
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Really good. Give it a try!

Great story and characters. Some of the main characters actions will make you cringe, but that is the result of developed cahracters and not bad writting.

 

That said, after 65 chapters I still wanted more. Can't really point the best part of it because all parts are excelent.

 

Author, keep up the good work!

Fellow readers, give this one a chance, you will probably like it.

Cheers!

Alex Raal
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story is not bad. three of the four main characters are annoying, but understandable though in no way sympathetic. as for grammer, well, ever since i read age of heros i don't put much stake in the idea that bad grammer can ruin a good story.

despite all of this however; it advertises its self as a LitRPG but it isn't. there are no little blue boxes, well defind stats, or skills. technically there are stats but there skyrim stats: body, mind, and spirit that is it and apparently atleast as far as i have read it has implyed the existance of a diffrece in ability between people with the same level in any given stat. which pretty much invalidates the need for stats at all.

on top of this is the as mentioned above non-existance of little blue boxes to provide the reader and characters with objectly real knowladge about the world the characters are inhabiting. witch just leaves us with the assumptions of the characters who are not very trustworthy regardless of what the mind stat might indicate. they are all overly emotional and act like children in desperate need of objective facts that allow them to get on with the story.