When the first derelict alien spacecraft fell to Earth, humanity took what was found in it and propelled themselves to new heights. In their new Golden Age, humanity developed technology that they had only dreamed about. The following years saw hundreds more ships crash into the planet, spurring even greater technological leaps.
An unassuming spacecraft, one of the dozens that fell yearly, descended on Siberia in 2021. The world took no particular notice of it. However, this one contained something beyond the miraculous technology that had made humans so prosperous.
Three years later, in a top-secret underground facility in eastern Colorado, the automated construction of an army of Paladin Mobile Infantry Suits was underway. With this new, state-of-the-art weaponry, the military would turn the tide against the alien incursion that was consuming the planet. Humanity fell before that could happen. Sam was an engineer responsible for overseeing the facility. Now alone, he lives in utter boredom and near insanity, his only company the base’s pseudo AI and an army of empty Paladins. With the world gone to hell around him, and the things that caused it still living above, he decides that he is much better off staying exactly where he is. Unfortunately for him, that is no longer an option.
This is the first novel I've written. The first fifteen or so chapters are going to be a little slower. I want there to be time to get to know the characters before they start blowing stuff up. Also, though the MC will be strong relative to the world, he won't be OP, and won't win every fight. Not every fight will be physical either.
Currently, I'm aiming for something like 5 fairly short chapters a week, after the introduction part is done, but we'll see how that goes. Thanks for reading, and please let me know if I've made mistakes!
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I have been on this site for the past 3 years, this story is, by far, one of the best stories that this site hase to offer and I can't wait to see it on the first page of the weekly popular stories. Keep it up, I'll read every chapter!
This story is so good and unique to what you can find normally in RRL, its a genre that its kind of unexplored and in a sense i've only read one similar novel here in RRL in the way technology and sci-fi its portrayed (Two Worlds) so here are some points that might get your attention:
- First and most important of all war and combat with uber cool mech suits of utter destruction (Check)
- Apocalypse by an alien invasion to earth (Check)
- Excelent story telling reavealing bits and pieces of how all the mess in the world came to be (Check)
- Character devolopment and "The Feels" (Check)
- Sassy AI trolling the MC here and there (Check)
So if you like any of the list above go ahead and read this story because its awesome.
PD: Other things like grammar and the style are polished and i cant seriously find faults with it so nothing to worry about in that sense.
Reviewed as of chapter 23.
EDIT: author is back! Yay
426 pages in 38 days, all at far far above the usual quality for webnovels that release this quickly
it made me laugh, it made me cry (like a child), it made me exlaim aloud while reading at every exciting and sometimes completely unexpected twist and surprise, ive marvelled at the excellent worldbuilding, it even made me squee like a fanboy at moments of genuine badassery
many novels here try to seem "badass" but its always artificial seeming and shallow, just having the protagonist be an angsty brooding antihero with superpowers and introducing equally shallow enemies for them to smack down
but sam our intrepid engineer seems genuine and his struggles seem legitimate and you feel so pumped up when he pulls off some incredible feat because you could with sam easily believe it could have failed and he could have died, unlike other main characters with artificial forced badassery that you know will never lose
sam is fantastic, he feels real, the one thing that makes me go from "this is a fun read" to "this is actually really good" is good character work and this story NAILS its characters
this story is up there with the other greats from this site like iron teeth
heck even outside of this site this might just be one of the better pieces of science fiction ive read, maybe even one of the better peices of fiction ive ever read
this doesnt read like your ususal webnovel it reads like an actual professionally written novel but written in just over a month, this better get finished and keep up its quality because this story could become one of the greats
but hey what about the actual details of the story you may be asking this reviewer? We got post alien invasion apocalyse done extremely well with humanity having had a believable chance at fighting them, we have also believable power armor mech suits with our engineer hero being the designer of them, we have amazing beleivable character moments exploring reactions to life post apocalypse, we have the single greatest training montage of all time (no really never seen it done better, unless you count most of enders game as a training montage) and our hero sams moment of realisation that he has to help
no "well i just felt i should be a hero" shallow motivations here, this is an emotional struggle that leads to sams determination to help and that moment in the story was what elevates the story to greatness (if author or someome who already read it reads this you know what im talking about)
Well written, with a few grammar mistakes.
Story is original, with NO REINCARNATION, which is a godsend in these dark times, where the shared plot device is "I CAN SEE THE FUTURE", and "I KNOW HOW TO MAKE A GUN". Also Mecha, which is a huge plus in my book. But as the author says, it takes a while, it is a slow burn. This is similar to Code Geass, in the way that Mechs, while important, do take the sidelines to make room for good storytelling and character development. Which ties into my next point.
Next point, Character Development. Sam here, has lived through the world going to shit, locked in a bunker in Colorado. He has barely held onto his sanity, with help from the base's pseudo AI Adelaide, and his (bordering-on-sexual) love of his fabricators. He has some trauma, which makes sense and affects him like a trauma should. I have no way to tie into style here, so.......
The style is great, well written, well paced, (I'm starting to realize that I should have done this before or after the story section, but Granny Dapper didn't raise no quitters) and has moments that make you have fun, feel kickass, or down right depressing . Everything is detailed enough to let you build the image in your head.
So, final thoughts are, read this. Definitley made my night, and morning, reading this.
P.S. ME-CHA! ME-CHA! ME-CHA!
Honestly, I'm not a huge fan of SciFi fictions, but mostly it is because of the lack of detail or originality. This, though? This is a masterpiece.
The characters developement is felt, and well described, giving this fiction a personal touch, a "I'm not from a fiction fabric, I'm handmade!" You may think this doesn't do much, but it's actually one of the things that calls you to stay on a fiction, even if it wasn't the thing to call you to read it.
On the Style? I love it, It's true style depends on the person, and liking it or not on the reader, but it's neither too detailed nor too shallow, a perfect "descritive detailness", in my opinion. Either way, the author writes with an idea of what happened, what's happening and what will happen, meaning he doesn't improvise that much, giving the story a steady flow, allowing the reader not to lose the liking for the fiction.
On Grammar, I'm really picky about this, and I've ditched countless promising fictions because of a poor grammar. Well, more than the grammar, the fact that they don't seem to care about it. The Author here, though, repairs on grammar mistakes and provides us with a almost clean reading. Usually seeing obvious mistakes during a reading can kick us out of the history, luckily he doesn't, making me soak on his story and enjoy it all the more.
Well, I don't think I have nothing else to say, because it's not like I want to make a spoiler, but I definitely recomend this fiction to whoever has ever liked a SciFi serie, film or book, it doesn't matter, this will hook you up and you won't be able to stop reading.
This story grabbed me by the horns(yes I claim to have horns), and threw me around until the last chapter, and I absolutely adored every minute of it!
There is a real tension in the MC's journey that had me eagerly consuming every chapter until the fateful moment(I'm being ambiguous to avoid spoilers), that I find lacking in so many other stories.
This story was very influential in the formation of my own story, so thank you author, for being an inspiration. I do hope you will come back one day :-)
~Don't judge a book by its cover~ or in my case "don't judge a book by its name"
The name 'Paladin' turned me off for such a long time, we all know what the stereotype righteous paladin is about and such 'good is good, evil is evil' people make my skin crawl, so i thought this story would be about such a person. i was wrong, very wrong.
Paladin is not a person in this story but a combat suit designed to shield humanity.
One boring afternoon i figured, 'meh why not give it a go', and im so glad i did, so very very glad.
Good formatting and pov's are clear, the flow makes sense and the inner monologue isn't a tedious repeat of actual conversation.
Can't say i noticed any at all. parhaps some typo's here and there but not distracting.
The setting is great, i especially love the realism of factions/clans/communities and the chaos of the relationships between those communities, the world as we knew it is gone, the cause is still there, yet new threats emerge from within our own kind.
Do we work together to defend our species against the primary threat, or do we only try to survive within our own communities, or do we... what can we do really.
Seems there are multiple plot lines/stories going on that has me wondering, longing even, about whats going to happen next.
The mc is likable and doesn't get things just handed to him, he works, he suffers, he's human.
The ai is interesting and not just there as a conversation partner for the mc.
Great background story telling, it fits and doesn't come out of nowhere, doesn't have to much 'bla bla' info we don't need.
I'm looking forward to each new chapter release, i would definitely recommend this.
One of the best Sci-fi, Post Apocalyptic novels I've scene so far in this site.
- The world building in the story is great as compared to most other authors in RRL and will definitely not disappoint most.
- The setting for the story is in a futuristic earth with advanced technology taken from aliens similar to "Independence Day" the movie and does well in making full use of it.
- The characters are fleshed out and are given realistic emotions and reactions from "anxiety" to "depression" all the way to "suicidal thoughts" that you would expect from a normal human being faced with an almost entirely hopeless situation rather than the more common "I must save the world", "I must immediately get stronger to protect myself and those I love" and "Zero to Hero" immediately after the apocalypse type of characters you would get from the genre.
- The author was smart enough not to make the scientific advances in the story so adavanced it would be impossible to even somewhat explain through current scientific theory, so you don't need to worry much about bad/horrible explanations for the technologies used in the story.
- Author does not immediately dive into the action to make the more hot blooded readers happy, rather he/she focuses on the character development early on into the story.
I highly recommend this novel to any that enjoy a good post apocalyptic story
...at least for RRL standards ;).
The worldbuilding is excellent and well paced, the interludes and flashbacks are a great way to introduce the reader to parts of the world (and parts of time) that the character does not have access to.
Characters are amazing, there are emotions!!1! And there's a mind, a psyche - honestly, you couldn't have portrayed them better, IMO.
The story and plot are unique but/and very well executed. Timeskips are placed appropriately, and progress feels natural.
Grammar and spelling are excellent, I did find the occasional error but nothing a little (very) light editing couldn't fix.
This easily dwarfs 99% of other RRL "literature", keep this going and you will make it to the top.
The first part is very good. However, once more characters are introduced, the plot and stakes get lost in "slice of life" exposition and "luckily I have engineered a solution" moments
Also, the first person point of view is sometimes journalistic and sometimes almost as if the MC is a 3rd person narrator.
The combat description is very good and action-oriented. The world building is good, esp the alien technology stuff. On the balance, I'm giving a three for style.
The characters and their interactions are humorous at times. But, honest, a significant amount of dialogue is either painful to read or a slog to read.
The grammar is great considering the pace of releases. 5 stars.
In summary, the author starts off great and then begins breaking Vonnegut's sixth rule of writing. Captian Marty Stu ... oops ... Paladin Captian Sam and his awesome robot suit is boring military science fiction after 500 or so pages.
But, read part one for sure.