Super Novice ©

by Helios

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Fantasy LitRPG Male Lead Martial Arts Strong Lead
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

 

 

In the Union once their youths come of age, and determined to have a above-average level of strength they’re conscripted into the Union's army.

But before they’re shipped off to the front lines as cannon fodder, they first must go through a year long training camp at Newbie Town, where they will be given the Novice class to hone their abilities and given a chance to gain a more powerful class before the year is over, or else they will be ship off to the front lines with the second weakest class of soldier. But unfortunately most of them will only become corpse lining the battlefield as they lack the talent or ability to survive the front lines.

Now enter Atlas Mule, freshly freed from his father choose to go to Newbie Town of his own volition. But what will Atlas do with the time limit of a year to find a class, will he find a class or merely become cannon fodder? And what about the teens around him who have been granted superhuman powers and strength, and zero restrictions on using them? Well what do you  think he’s going to do?! Well read and find out!





P.s. He’s going to fight and make friends. That is what Altas will do. Incase you're curious.

Author's note: This is my first story so there will be mistakes aplenty, please help me find them.

The Update schedule will be whenever I feel like it, but I do intend to finish the story and I do have a vague plotline. Plus this story is my first attempt at writing, plus all and all just a rough draft, that I likely will heavily rewrite at some point.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter One: New Beginnings ago
Chapter Two: Newbie Town ago
Chapter Three: Day One ago
Chapter Four: Gear ago
Chapter Five: Filler Part One ago
Chapter Five: Filler Part Two ago
Chapter Five: Filler Part Three ago
Chapter Five: Filler Part Four ago
Chapter Six: Duel Part One ago
Chapter Six: Duel Part Two ago
Chapter Six: Duel Part Three ago
Chapter Seven: Recovery and Quest Part One ago
Chapter Seven: Recovery and Quest Part Two ago
Chapter Seven: Recovery and Quest Part Three ago
Chapter Seven: Recovery and Quest Part Four ago
Chapter Eight: Quest Part One ago
Chapter Eight: Quest Part Two ago
Chapter Eight: Quest Part Three ago
Chapter Eight: Quest Part Four ago
Chapter Nine: Quest Rewards Part one ago
Chapter Nine: Quest Rewards Part Two ago
Chapter Nine: Quest Rewards Part Three ago
Chapter Nine: Quest Rewards Part Four ago
Chapter Nine: Quest Rewards Part Five ago
Chapter Ten: Pets Part One ago
Chapter Ten: Pets Part Two ago
Chapter Ten: Pets Part Three ago
Chapter Eleven: Labyrinth Part One ago
Chapter Eleven: Labyrinth Part Two ago
Chapter Eleven: Labyrinth Part Three ago
Chapter Eleven: Labyrinth Part Four ago
Chapter Twelve: The Nameless City Part One ago
Chapter Twelve: The Nameless City Part Two ago
Chapter Thirteen: Fundamentals ago
Chapter Fourteen: Enigma ago
Chapter Fifteen: The Children Part One ago
Chapter Fifteen: The Children Part Two ago
Chapter Fifteen: The Children Part Three ago
Chapter Fifteen: The Children Part Four ago
Chapter Sixteen: Of Sen Part One ago
Chapter Sixteen: Of Sen Part Two ago
Chapter Seventeen: The Way Out Part One ago
Chapter Seventeen: The Way Out Part Two ago
Chapter Eighteen: Pets II Part One ago
Chapter Eighteen: Pets II Part Two ago
Chapter Eighteen: Pets II Part Three ago
Chapter Nineteen: Squad Part One ago
Chapter Nineteen: Squad Part Two ago
Chapter Nineteen: Squad Part Three ago
Chapter Twenty: On the Road Again Part One ago
Chapter Twenty: On the Road again Part Two ago
Chapter Twenty: On the Road Again Part Three ago
On the Road Again: Part 5 ago
Chapter Twenty One: Sparring I ago
Chapter Twenty One: Sparring II ago
22: Sparring ago

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Good story but characters lack depth

I like the premise of the story which is different than the normal fantasy or system based story but when it comes down to it the characters are kind of lacking. There is a great story lurking here with hints about his fathers past, interesting aquantainces he meets, and the mc's drive to grow stronger. 

The problem is the charaters. Besides the mc who only cares about fighting, not a bad thing if you spin it right. You have a noble that only cares about sleeping, his gay? servant, and a chatty merchant/leather worker. While they could use work I could live with it if it was just them. However every female character is an older women that falls in love with one of the young, 16 year old boys that star in the novel. I wouldn't mind it if it was just one but so far every female that has been featured falls in line with that.