A Snake's Life

by Kenaren

Original COMPLETED Fantasy Anti-Hero Lead LitRPG Male Lead Non-Human lead Reincarnation Strong Lead
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An old man died in his sleep. Upon arriving in a pure white plane. 'God' Told him his wife that he had lost years earlier had been chosen to become the Hero a world needed. The man pleaded with the 'God' to send him as well. And though the God agreed the man would not be born a human. The man accepted anyways. Now he's in this new world trying to Evolve into something that can survive until he meets his wife again. Think he can do it?

Many thanks to Aizen-Sama for the cover!

This book is complete and all new chapters will be posted here! |  http://www.royalroadl.com/fiction/15886/a-snakes-rise

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dima bajadze
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Definitely worth your time!

There is only one thing I can complain about: Please don't stop writing, I started having expectations :D

The idea is new, unique and has a lot of potential ( 300 years is a lot of potential :D ) 

Your story-telling flows smoothly and there's no grammar mistakes that distracts one from it

So keep up the good work, I'll be waiting for more

dbp
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The popularity of this story confuses me.

TL;DR: Amidst the constant *sigh*s and monologuing, there seems to be a resemblance of a decent premise. I would reccomend it for a quick read, but not if you're looking for something great.

I have only read up to chapter 9, which was a major turn off for me. I doubt I would continue to read, unless the dialogue and *actions* improve in later chapters.

Spoiler warning.

 

Style:

The story flows pretty fluidly. I'm guessing this is a combination of the formatting, with separate sentences rather than chunky paragraphs. While this might be a good thing for some, this makes the story seem to progress very fast. 

I detest the way the character constanly monologues and talks to the reader. The author does not provide reason for the main character to do so, by putting them in a narrator position, or a storyteller position. It's an awkward attempt to break the 4th wall. The story makes the main character out to be completely senile, with him talking out loud constantly, most likely so the druid child can conveniently overhear him. 

The author also uses *double asterisk* to indicate motion like some emo kid from 2009. "...*sigh* You know what? It isn't worth the trouble it would bring if I attacked them." Would the MC pronounce this 'asterisk sigh asterisk'? Try actually indicating the action taken, such as 'I sighed. "You know what? It isn't worth the trouble it would bring if I attacked them."

 

Grammar:

The grammar is pretty good. Here and there there are a few mistakes, such as at the start of chapter 5, "Not being about to see or hear anything for an entire day, would have driven me crazy, otherwise." thhe about was probably meant to be be "able", but there isn't a very big problem.

 

Story:

Spoiler: Spoiler

Character:

Is the MC really an old man? His personality is more like your typical, light novel, power trip mc rather than an elder. If the 'god' stripped everything from his personality, it would make more sense to be like a baby or a gluttonous snake. 

Spoiler: Spoiler
Sitna
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Very nice monster reincarnation story.

Now, I'm not one to give 5 star reviews, so 4.5 it is.

Into more details, the story itself is very solid, although not quite developed yet, but that's simply due to the lack of chapters out right now. That'll probably change.

Style is amazing. I really like the colored text for each character, it makes them feel unique.

Grammar's good, and as a grammar nazi, that's saying a lot.

The character is a little lacking in my opinion. Read: MY OWN OPINION. I personally don't like when characters really want to do something, in this case find his wife (not really spoiler cause it's even in the synopsis). However, everyone else would probably like it, and if I ignore that, the character is really good. Determined, sharp-minded and doesn't have a deus-ex-machima at his fingertips... or scales, I guess. 

Overall: READ IT!!! You're not gonna regret it. I sure didn't, at least. 

 

Without love, from the Cat-loving author. And snake-lover now, I guess. <3

randompeeps
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For once, there is a non-human MC who doesn't turn into a human and live among them. He actually stays a monster and acts like one by eating humans and monsters alike. 

Several people complained about this, however. Obviously, as he was previously a human, he should at least show some compassion for the humans and not become completely heartless, right? But the God from before clearly stated that he will lose much of his memories, besides knowing about his wife and his goal of finding her. This happened in order for the mind to adapt to his serpent body. The being never mentioned that he would still remember being a human. 

Anyway, the only complaint I'd have to say is that the characters need more depth. So far, it doesn't seem like they have a personality, really, and it just seems sorta forced. But overall, it's pretty great! 

I don't get why the other reviews are being so harsh by saying it's shitty. I never seen such critsicim. Just ignore those, alright, and check it out first! Then you'll know the answer yourself. 

Have a nice read! 

Belga
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I don't get why people like this.

This story isn't great. The characters interactions are cringy as hell, I can barely read a dialog without shaking my head.

The destination is given in the first chapter, there are no real surprises on the way: the latest chapter with the "gods" fighting it out is not entertaining, with rules made up as the author goes along.

The idea at the beginning of the story is nice, the concept could be very well used to write something entertenaing. This isn't it.

Encoded
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At first glance, this story is good for a RoyalRoad story, there is a plot, tables are well done for a litrpg and the progression of the main character is interesting.
The thing is, EVERYTHING feel awkward, forced, its like the author has never spoken to anyone and doesnt know how a conversation is like. The plot is subpar at best, taken directly from a soap opera, the motives of the "gods" revealed so far are dumb or even downright child-like and not representative of being of such power. The plot progression is also awkward, we get random pov change to the so called gods, the plot feels childish and everything feels like a mean for the mc to get stronger, now or in the future.

Spoiler: Spoiler

 One good point is the world building, while it has been sided for more of those tasteless conversation, it is well done, the system is logical and intriguing the main character evolution lines are innovative and are keeping thing fresh wich is probably the only thing keeping me from dropping this.

The characters are one-sided and every single conversation so far (Chapter 19) are awkward. Not a single one feels genuine, you're using conversation to expend on your world building, exept you dont know how to do it and it ruins a lot of the charm of said world.

I could go on for a lot longer but i feel like i said what need to be said.

TL.DR: This fiction had a lot of potential, the world and the evolutionnary system are really well done, the rest is subpar or even downright bad.

Voidwrath
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Keep up the good work.

Even though this has only gotten to one chapter, I have to say that it starts pretty good right of the bat so far. I like how the main isn't a young boy or young adult that gets reincarnated but an old man that's missing his wife.

I don't see any bad grammar.

Hope that this story goes far.smile

deadxmo
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good feeling for this!

author has some skill and the story feels it will be interesting from just the pro+ chapter one worth a read and bookmark imho.

Awkane
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I really liked it so far, waiting for chapter 6!

It makes me wonder what will the mc become until he meets with his wife.

darkject
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At first I suspected it will be just like some other evolution story but I was wrong.

MC has definite goals, unlike other evolution stories i've read.

So far loving the story and awaiting what will happen on the reunion of mc and his wife.