A Snake's Life

by Kenaren

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Sci-fi Anti-Hero Lead LitRPG Male Lead Non-Human lead Reincarnation Strong Lead
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The Afterlife isn't always what you think…

The loving father of three children, Alfred lived a life of few regrets. He served his country far from home. He outlived his soulmate. He died alone.

However, Albert's intentions about a peaceful eternity, reunited with his wife, are thrown out the window when a meddling god digs his fingers into Albert’s afterlife.

The positive? He has a chance to make things right—to live the life that was so cruelly taken from him the first time. Reincarnating into a world full of magical evolutions, monstrous deer, and sassy ten-year-old elves, Albert worries he doesn't have a chance of surviving the three-hundred-years the god promised it would take to reunite him with his beloved.

But if life has taught Albert anything it’s this: If something is worth having, it's worth fighting for. And he intends to fight.

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Dustyacer
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Meh. Typical monster reincarnation

So I've only read 15 chapters or so, but it feels awfully typical. Just a monster reincarnation that grows stronger by evolving. The power system is very standard, nothing new. 

 

The story is kinda meh, he wants to meet his wife, but other than that all he seems to do is eat and eat. There really is no thought, strategy, thrilling action or anything like that really. Although, when you get to his wife it may be a bit more interesting. Also like the way the worlds work and such, thats pretty interesting. 

 

The style and grammer are pretty good, havent noticed any grammer mistakes really. The style is decent, the use of green is annoying on the dark background that i had to change to white theme. It is heavily dialogue based story which less descriptions and everything which is fine by me i guess.

 

The characters don't really feel like anything, he seems rather unconsistent, at first he kills humanoid beings and said he doesn't feel anything by eating them, but later one (like a few days later) he tries to avoid eating them? Why? the MC seems to also lack personality, like all i know he is a person that likes to eat with a typical reincarnation personality. 

 

dima bajadze
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Definitely worth your time!

There is only one thing I can complain about: Please don't stop writing, I started having expectations :D

The idea is new, unique and has a lot of potential ( 300 years is a lot of potential :D ) 

Your story-telling flows smoothly and there's no grammar mistakes that distracts one from it

So keep up the good work, I'll be waiting for more

dbp
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The popularity of this story confuses me.

TL;DR: Amidst the constant *sigh*s and monologuing, there seems to be a resemblance of a decent premise. I would reccomend it for a quick read, but not if you're looking for something great.

I have only read up to chapter 9, which was a major turn off for me. I doubt I would continue to read, unless the dialogue and *actions* improve in later chapters.

Spoiler warning.

 

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The story flows pretty fluidly. I'm guessing this is a combination of the formatting, with separate sentences rather than chunky paragraphs. While this might be a good thing for some, this makes the story seem to progress very fast. 

I detest the way the character constanly monologues and talks to the reader. The author does not provide reason for the main character to do so, by putting them in a narrator position, or a storyteller position. It's an awkward attempt to break the 4th wall. The story makes the main character out to be completely senile, with him talking out loud constantly, most likely so the druid child can conveniently overhear him. 

The author also uses *double asterisk* to indicate motion like some emo kid from 2009. "...*sigh* You know what? It isn't worth the trouble it would bring if I attacked them." Would the MC pronounce this 'asterisk sigh asterisk'? Try actually indicating the action taken, such as 'I sighed. "You know what? It isn't worth the trouble it would bring if I attacked them."

 

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The grammar is pretty good. Here and there there are a few mistakes, such as at the start of chapter 5, "Not being about to see or hear anything for an entire day, would have driven me crazy, otherwise." thhe about was probably meant to be be "able", but there isn't a very big problem.

 

Story:

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Is the MC really an old man? His personality is more like your typical, light novel, power trip mc rather than an elder. If the 'god' stripped everything from his personality, it would make more sense to be like a baby or a gluttonous snake. 

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Belga
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I don't get why people like this.

This story isn't great. The characters interactions are cringy as hell, I can barely read a dialog without shaking my head.

The destination is given in the first chapter, there are no real surprises on the way: the latest chapter with the "gods" fighting it out is not entertaining, with rules made up as the author goes along.

The idea at the beginning of the story is nice, the concept could be very well used to write something entertenaing. This isn't it.

randompeeps
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For once, there is a non-human MC who doesn't turn into a human and live among them. He actually stays a monster and acts like one by eating humans and monsters alike. 

Several people complained about this, however. Obviously, as he was previously a human, he should at least show some compassion for the humans and not become completely heartless, right? But the God from before clearly stated that he will lose much of his memories, besides knowing about his wife and his goal of finding her. This happened in order for the mind to adapt to his serpent body. The being never mentioned that he would still remember being a human. 

Anyway, the only complaint I'd have to say is that the characters need more depth. So far, it doesn't seem like they have a personality, really, and it just seems sorta forced. But overall, it's pretty great! 

I don't get why the other reviews are being so harsh by saying it's shitty. I never seen such critsicim. Just ignore those, alright, and check it out first! Then you'll know the answer yourself. 

Have a nice read! 

DeadGuysAttempt
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Great Book, unfortunate that the chapters are limited.

Reviewed at: Chapter 2

Overall, this is a good book and web novel. It brings a tear to my eye that I couldn't see it all for free but the chapters that are here are superb. I like the style of the book and it does what many authors fail to do which is write a sucessful reincarnated as a monster-type book.

Daryl76679
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Great story. I binged it. Its definitely a unique take on isekai tales and I love the idea of evolving while staying the same gender!                                

13lack12ose
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Did someone say food?

Reviewed at: New Story!

An imaginative tale which involves a hungry snake and a whole lot of tasty meals.

Note: Meals may or may not include animals, monsters, people and small planets.

Namelesswanderer
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Late I always forget to write reviews

Just a great book. short sweet to the point read some if you like it you do if you don't you don't.

Dractyle
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A worthy read! Always love a big snake story

The primary complain that you might currently see in some of the negative reviews, is the lack of character building + and complains about "logic". What they clearly didn't consider is the simple fact that our protagonist is currently a cold-blooded reptile. Why would it need deep emotions for its actions? As for gods and actions, we hardly yet know anything so at the moment I can only consider it rash to judge if actions taken by gods in the overall arc of the story is logical or not in the context of this story.

The latest chapters have also shown growth to both character and world-building. A logical progression that matches the evolution of our main character and his journey as he learns more about the world he is in.

I am personally glad that we are getting a story with a proper flow, and not just enormous amounts of info dumbs and unrealistic amounts of emotions (given the context).

I can only hope that the author can keep this up and I am truly looking forward to see where this fun ride will take us.