Shovels In Spades

by Lone

Original ONGOING Action Fantasy Romance Tragedy Anti-Hero Lead Dungeon LitRPG Low Fantasy Magic Male Lead Non-Human lead Post Apocalyptic Ruling Class Secret Identity Strong Lead Supernatural
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We all have dreams of becoming powerful, becoming the cool mage that rules the world, living as the dashing rogue who can steal a kingdom's entire royal treasury undetected, or perhaps, the valiant knight whose prowess on the battlefield is unmatched by all. 

However, when the apocalypse strikes, you can only use what you have at your disposal, be that guns, baseball bats, your fists, or maybe, just maybe, a shovel.

One young man who goes by the name of Darenzo has just had his world altered into one that is now the focal point of some sort of experiment.

Just at the end of his shift at the skip site, a worldwide announcement was made, that not only changed Darenzo's life, but also the lives of all of the Earth's inhabitants.

Can Darenzo survive and thrive in this changed world? Or will his growing madness best him? The answers to these questions can only be revealed with time.

[Guaranteed 2 chapters per week, the only exceptions being announced breaks or emergencies]


(The new cover art is a courtesy of the very kind and talented ssddx and was designed using the fanart cover of cthulupillar as the base.)


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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Book 1 Prologue: Change and Shovel ago
Book 1 Chapter 1: Building and Fusion ago
Book 1 Chapter 2: Traps and Rage ago
Book 1 Chapter 3: Merits and Sleep ago
Book 1 Chapter 4: Base and Clothes ago
Book 1 Chapter 5: Status and Jewel ago
Book 1 Chapter 6: Rimmy and Robbing ago
Book 1 Chapter 7: Seal and Platinum ago
Book 1 Chapter 8: Temptress and Confusion ago
Book 1 Chapter 9: Faith and Offer ago
Book 1 Chapter 10: Poison and Charisma ago
Book 1 Chapter 11: Question and Return ago
Book 1 Chapter 12: Stupid and Restored ago
Book 1 Chapter 13: God and Crippled ago
Book 1 Chapter 14: Smash and Suspicion ago
Book 1 Chapter 15: Princess and Anacusis ago
Book 1 Chapter 16: Respect and Perks ago
Book 1 Chapter 17: Citizen and Buffer ago
Book 1 Chapter 18: Court and Motivation ago
Book 1 Chapter 19: Wall and Earthquake ago
Book 1 Chapter 20: Cabin and Lighthouse ago
Book 1 Chapter 21: Suggestions and Requirements ago
Book 1 Chapter 22: Upgrade and Charity ago
Book 1 Chapter 23: Exhaustion and Note ago
Book 1 Chapter 24: Box and Safe ago
Book 1 Chapter 25: Syringe and Return ago
Book 1 Chapter 26: Baseball and Event ago
Book 1 Chapter 27: Respect and Transfusion ago
Book 1 Chapter 28: Crocs and Rash ago
Book 1 Chapter 29: Ring and Mithril ago
Book 1 Chapter 30: Leader and Food ago
Book 1 Chapter 31: Conical and Enfield ago
Book 1 Chapter 32: Hamson and Return ago
Book 1 Chapter 33: Matt and Dorian ago
Book 1 Chapter 34: Consumption and Life ago
Book 1 Chapter 35: Rimmy and I ago
Book 1 Chapter 36: Choice and Changes ago
Book 1 Chapter 37: Jesters and Fort ago
Book 1 Chapter 38: Fiona and Villain ago
Book 1 Chapter 39: Fun and Crafting ago
Book 1 Chapter 40: Failure and Levels ago
Book 1 Chapter 41: Pride and Split ago
Book 1 Chapter 42: Cube and Table ago
Book 1 Chapter 43: Tome and Stress ago
Book 1 Chapter 44: Graveyard and Cecil ago
Book 1 Chapter 45: Pala and Gods ago
Book 1 Chapter 46: Candle and Reality ago
Book 1 Chapter 47: Jorden and Harvesting ago
Book 1 Chapter 48: Trench and Volunteers ago
Book 1 Chapter 49: Crusher and Plan ago
Book 1 Chapter 50: Og and Denied ago
Book 1 Chapter 51: Gravity and Tide ago
Book 1 Chapter 52: Illusion and Damage ago
Book 1 Chapter 53: Confidence and Cyanide ago
Book 1 Chapter 54: Fear and Danger ago
Book 1 Chapter 55: Wound and Vine ago
Book 1 Chapter 56: Towel and Smile ago
Book 1 Chapter 57: Mave and Dream ago
Book 1 Chapter 58: Crushed and Conclusion ago
Book 1 Chapter 59: Absolute and Return ago
Book 1 Chapter 60: Punishment and Thanks ago
Book 1 Chapter 61: Mini and Endearing ago
Book 1 Chapter 62: Questions and Luck ago
Book 1 Chapter 63: Design and Past ago
Book 1 Chapter 64: Rankings and Changes ago
Book 1 Chapter 65: Loyalty and Speech ago
Book 1 Chapter 66: Laws and Request ago
Book 1 Chapter 67: Agreements and Butterfly ago
Book 1 Chapter 68: Size and Walls ago
Book 1 Chapter 69: Upgrades and Guesses ago
Book 1 Chapter 70: Mayor and Miller ago
Book 1 Chapter 71: Girly and Knife ago
Book 1 Chapter 72: Departure and Condo ago
Book 1 Chapter 73: Survivors and Soldiers ago
Book 1 Chapter 74: Acquisition and Rearming ago
Book 1 Chapter 75: Kabatay and Demands ago
Book 1 Chapter 76: Shark and Snipers ago
Book 1 Chapter 77: Sentence and M939 ago
Book 1 Chapter 78: Shock and Thoughts ago
Book 1 Chapter 79: Ahab and Threat ago
Book 1 Chapter 80: Relationship and Exchange ago
Book 1 Chapter 81: Barrier and Gab ago
Book 1 Chapter 82: Gloves and Roger ago
Book 1 Chapter 83: Mansion and Rose ago
Book 1 Chapter 84: Warning and Information ago
Book 1 Chapter 85: Emotion and Hindsight ago
Book 1 Chapter 86: Stats and Resistances ago
Book 1 Chapter 87: Training and Database ago
Book 1 Chapter 88: Trust and Hug ago
Book 1 Chapter 89: Guilt and Pipes ago
Book 1 Chapter 90: Meeting and Four ago
Book 1 Chapter 91: Line and Lasers ago
Book 1 Chapter 92: Ease and Phases ago
Book 1 Chapter 93: Plan and Deadlift ago
Book 1 Chapter 94: Defeat and Slice ago
Book 1 Chapter 95: Tears and Hope ago
Book 1 Chapter 96: Struggle and Madison ago
Book 1 Epilogue: Puzzle and Dream ago
BOOK 1'S CHARACTER TABLE SHEET ago
BOOK 1'S BASE AND NON-CHARACTER RELATED TABLE SHEET ago
Book 2 Prologue: Aila and Punishment ago
Book 2 Chapter 1: Beater and Titan ago
Book 2 Chapter 2: Gestures and Broken ago
Book 2 Chapter 3: Watermelon and Whiskey ago
Book 2 Chapter 4: Cute and Tower ago
Book 2 Chapter 5: Lightning and Need ago
Book 2 Chapter 6: Rebuilding and Status ago
Book 2 Chapter 7: Barracks and Smithy ago
Book 2 Chapter 8: Quests and Announcements ago
Book 2 Chapter 9: Useless and Bullies ago
Book 2 Chapter 10: Dungeon and Medals ago
Book 2 Chapter 11: Pursuer and Replacement ago
Book 2 Chapter 12: Books and Bonus ago
Book 2 Chapter 13: Teens and Cages ago
Book 2 Chapter 14: Bravery and Captives ago
Book 2 Chapter 15: Rocky and Vincent ago
Book 2 Chapter 16: Storybooks and Deranged ago
Book 2 Chapter 17: Citizens and Peace ago
CHARACTER TABLE SHEET as of Book 2 Chapter 17 ago
BASE/NON-CHARACTER RELATED TABLE SHEET as of Book 2 Chapter 17 ago
Book 2 Chapter 18: Passion and Underwhelmed ago
Book 2 Chapter 19: Reika and Hamson ago
Book 2 Chapter 20: Rankings and Moustache ago
Book 2 Chapter 21: Stats and Arrest ago
Book 2 Chapter 22: Changes and Chicken ago
Book 2 Chapter 23: Titan and Chips ago
Book 2 Chapter 24: Foot and Bank ago
Book 2 Chapter 25: Changes and Entertainer ago
Book 2 Chapter 26: Food and Concoction ago
Book 2 Chapter 27: Humvee and Smoke ago
Book 2 Chapter 28: Benjamin and Trench ago
Book 2 Chapter 29: Crater and Edward ago
Book 2 Chapter 30: Scouts and Bunker ago
Book 2 Chapter 31: M1 Abrams and Bonus ago
Book 2 Chapter 32: Rebirth and Hand-cannon ago
Book 2 Chapter 33: Snapping and Deal ago
Book 2 Chapter 34: Departure and Return ago
Book 2 Chapter 35: Sister and Parents ago
Book 2 Chapter 36: Barbarossa and Resolve ago
Book 2 Chapter 37: Brother and Anger ago
Book 2 Chapter 38: Evolution and Status ago
Book 2 Chapter 39: Chains and Rage ago
Book 2 Chapter 40: Bonfire and Friendship ago
Book 2 Chapter 41: Citizens and Growth ago
Book 2 Chapter 42: Vibrations and Feeling ago
Book 2 Chapter 43: One Monster and Bound ago
Book 2 Chapter 44: Hollow Victory and Great Loss ago
Book 2 Chapter 45: Newfound Grief and Warranted Guilt ago
Book 2 Chapter 46: Funeral and Phoenix Heart ago
Book 2 Chapter 47: Aila and Text ago
Book 2 Chapter 48: Pondside Talk and Lizardman Attack ago
Book 2 Chapter 49: Slap and Absorption ago
Book 2 Chapter 50: Terms and Distraction ago
Book 2 Chapter 51: Fusion and Voice ago
Book 2 Chapter 52: New Citizens and Bob ago
Book 2 Chapter 53: God Facts and Heat ago
Book 2 Chapter 54: City Lord and Rimmy's Core ago
Book 2 Chapter 55: Morte and Shen Mu ago
Book 2 Chapter 56: Magical Skills and Laughing Skull ago
Book 2 Chapter 57: Lovers Duel and Shovel Arts ago
Book 2 Chapter 58: Ellie Richie and The Watching Gods ago
Book 2 Chapter 59: Mountainous Eruption and Greater Telekinesis ago
Book 2 Chapter 60: Cleaning Up and Second Wave ago
Book 2 Chapter 61: Battle Plan and Death Magic ago
Book 2 Chapter 62: Multicoloured Skull and Diving Titan ago
Book 2 Chapter 63: Reinstated Advisor and Disgruntled Mu ago
Book 2 Chapter 64: Future Project and Useless City ago
Book 2 Chapter 65: Base Upgrades and Keep ago
Book 2 Chapter 66: System's Displeasure and Mu's Arrival ago
Book 2 Chapter 67: Negotiations and It's Not Over Yet ago
Book 2 Chapter 68: Rimmy's Fighting Resolve and Unbridled Rage ago
Book 2 Chapter 69: Morte's Will and Racial Adjustments ago
Book 2 Chapter 70: Teasing Maddy and Expedition to Middletown ago
Book 2 Chapter 71: Lich Stats and Daz's Beginning ago
Book 2 Chapter 72: Teleportation Relay and Ellie's Request ago
Book 2 Chapter 73: Advice and Golden Tickets ago
Book 2 Chapter 74: System's Attention and Esper Abilities ago
Book 2 Chapter 75: Daz's Abilities and Ho Ran ago
Book 2 Chapter 76: Big Bo and Golf Game ago
Book 2 Chapter 77: Charts and Daz's Counteroffer ago
Book 2 Chapter 78: Merit Points and Uriel ago
Book 2 Chapter 79: Fiona's Nerves and The Keep's Rooms ago
Book 2 Chapter 80: The Scottish Full-English and The Lottery Winner ago
Madison Artwork + Poll For Next Artwork ago
Book 2 Chapter 81: System's Description Blockade and Bob's Growth ago
Book 2 Chapter 82: Bob's Words and Mu's Crimes ago
Book 2 Chapter 83: Daz's Crimes and A Clone's Worries ago
Book 2 Epilogue: A Thank You and First-time Lust ago
Book 3 Prologue: Venice and Plans ago
Book 3 Chapter 1: Grave Butchering and Completed Records ago
Book 3 Chapter 2: Rimmy's Fans and Sally ago
Book 3 Chapter 3: Steven's Approaches and Poor Timing ago
Book 3 Chapter 4: Private School and Racial Change ago
Book 3 Chapter 5: Holy Cross and Gambit's Signet ago
Book 3 Chapter 6: Alien Laptop and Dice Set ago
Book 3 Chapter 7: Translation Skill and Fighting Ring ago
Book 3 Chapter 8: Champion of Quarterstaves and Test of Strength ago
Book 3 Chapter 9: Mu's Cardboard and Madison's New Worries ago
Book 3 Chapter 10: Data Tracker and The General Auction's Start ago
Book 3 Chapter 11: Pheldorapod and A VR Capsule ago
Book 3 Chapter 12: Achievements and Cold Reunion ago
Character Popularity Poll ago
Book 3 Chapter 13: Red Lightning and Davido's Joy ago
Book 3 Chapter 14: Skill Cap and Successful Cracking ago
Book 3 Chapter 15: Class Upgrade Token and Larry Billard ago
Book 3 Chapter 16: Nearing Level Three and Merit Ranking ago
Book 3 Chapter 17: Slot Machine Shakedown and Split-consciousness ago
Book 3 Chapter 18: Winning Streak and Strange Family ago
Book 3 Chapter 19: A Request For Crusher and Hsiao-Han ago
Book 3 Chapter 20: War and Total Evolvers ago
Book 3 Chapter 21: Ruler Auction and Final Item ago
Book 3 Chapter 22: Pheldorapod's Considerations and 25-Million ago
Book 3 Chapter 23: Class Change and Existing Skill Upgrades ago
Book 3 Chapter 24: Crystal and Rimmy Gets Some Upgrades ago
Book 3 Chapter 25: Upgraded Classes and Friends Fighting ago
Book 3 Chapter 26: Contracting Gems and Third King ago
Book 3 Chapter 27: Rimmy's Growing Fanbase and Flying Trial ago
Book 3 Chapter 28: Flying Results and Sword Mastery Challenge ago
Book 3 Chapter 29: New Promise and Weakness Trial ago
Book 3 Chapter 30: Krishan Ladakh and Updated Ranking ago
Book 3 Chapter 31: Worldeater and Maddy's Success ago
Book 3 Chapter 32: Mr Barrier and Secret Override ago
Book 3 Chapter 33: Pala's Determination and Hamson The Spade ago
Book 3 Chapter 34: Merit Star and Baggage ago
Book 3 Chapter 35: Tokens Galore and Merit Point Averages ago
Book 3 Chapter 36: Unfortunate Andre and The Second Lot ago
Book 3 Chapter 37: Crusher's Success and Xiao Meimei ago
Book 3 Chapter 38: Grand Proclamation and Headache ago
Daz Art + Rose Art ago
Book 3 Chapter 39: Champion of Cooking and Excruciating Pain ago
Book 3 Chapter 40: Battle Axe and Rose's Warning ago
Book 3 Chapter 41: A Father's Twisted Pride and The Auction's Conclusion ago
Book 3 Chapter 42: Shift Locking and Naming ago
Book 3 Chapter 43: Passives and Pouting Madison ago
Book 3 Chapter 44: William's Loyalty and Third Set of Walls ago
Book 3 Chapter 45: Welcome Speech and B-ranked Base ago
Book 3 Chapter 46: Different Universes and City Choosing ago
Book 3 Chapter 47: Fort Sky and GriD CrosS ago
Fort Sky Art + Crusher Art ago
Book 3 Chapter 48: Crusher's Threat and Rose's Visit to The Station ago
Book 3 Chapter 49: Visit to Turtle Island and Talks of Tea ago
Book 3 Chapter 50: Pool and Madison's Status ago
Book 3 Chapter 51: Alteration and Fiona's Struggle ago
Book 3 Chapter 52: Praying and Status Tweaking ago
Book 3 Chapter 53: New Quest and Choice Selections ago
Book 3 Chapter 54: Bei Fan and Secret Observers ago
Early Davido Hamilio Art + Minor Announcement ago
Book 3 Chapter 55: Scavengers and Jeremy ago
Book 3 Chapter 56: Mirroring and Soul Independence ago
Book 3 Chapter 57: Sovereigns and Candy ago
Book 3 Chapter 58: Daz's Solution and Useless Gloves ago
Book 3 Chapter 59: Amanda & Alek and Airship Engineer ago
Book 3 Chapter 60: Promises and The Loser Fool ago
Book 3 Chapter 61: Daz's Offer and Evil Ruffians ago
Book 3 Chapter 62: Resurrection and Spirit Formation ago
Book 3 Chapter 63: Soul Corrosion and First Official Complaint ago
Book 3 Chapter 64: Idris' Upset and Madison's Hug ago
Book 3 Chapter 65: Rose's Plans and Big Bo's Second Contract Offer ago
Book 3 Chapter 66: Talks of Loans and Bank Upgrades ago
Book 3 Chapter 67: Fighting Clones and Personalities ago
Book 3 Chapter 68: Cycle Three Starts and Goals ago
Hsiao-Han Artwork + Announcement Reminder ago
Book 3 Chapter 69: Crusher's Loyalty and Greg's Decision ago
Book 3 Chapter 70: SSS-ranked Item Token Usage and Tough Choice ago
Book 3 Chapter 71: Racing Ridomochi and Estranged Espers ago
Book 3 Chapter 72: Wheelchairs and Dormitory ago
Book 3 Chapter 73: Taxation Plans and Greg's First Orders ago
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Setskar
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My main issue with the novel is the MC's decisions of how to use his points, the way he acts, his personality and the nonsense that goes throughout the whole story.

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 I understood that you got quite offended by my review, it was never my intention to offend you so i apologize for that. I tried to soften my message to be less offensive and added a few things I actually liked in the story, good luck.

Inferi
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First off, the intent of this review is primarily to analyse what I did not like about the story as I enjoyed a good deal of it and would like to see the author improve. Also understand that my only credentials are a healthy addiction to books and my own views. I am on chapter 40. This review contains spoilers.

That said, what truly kills this story is character development and world balance. 

By 'WORLD BALANCE' I mean the degree that the rules of the story's world affect everyone else compared to the degree they affect the main character. I.e. How much plot armor the m.c. has. Mostly, this imbalance is displayed through the distribution of merit points. For example, the mc constantly attracts the attention of gods which nets him about 50k merit points every time. This is fine by itself, but he usually catches interest of said gods by doing very little. The god of madness, for example, is interested in him because he talks to a clearly intelligent and actively communicative golem. This is a problem because, as of ch.40 no one else has caught the attention of gods. One dude stabbed a wooden dummy until exhaustion and uses a syringe as his main weapon not to mention his fanatical loyalty and the god of madness doesn't care. 

Another issue along the same vein is that the 40 survivors lead by the red haired lady "just barely" had enough merit points to buy the zombie cure at a cost of 1500. As evidenced by Ger's merit screen, simply surviving for 12 hours is a reward of 3000. Not only had those survivors lasted 24 hours, but they had done so under constant strain and even successfully killed several of the monsters. The red haired lady alone should have had thousands of points simply from extended resistance of the zombie virus while fighting zombies AND leading survivors the entire time. 

The issue is that Dez's returns indicate that the system is incredibly generous with merit point and rewards basically everything, so it SHOULD be giving a lot of points to a lot of survivors. In a world where you can buy a permanent summon with enough strength to tear a bank vault door off its hinges for a paltry 7k, that means almost every survivor should be basically at Dez's level or at least close and have their own unique powers. They are not, and do not.

CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT is the other major failing of this story. It has many tie-ins with the issue of balance, but many characters have little to no depth. I think this is perfectly demonstrated by our main man Rimmy because he is actually VERY WELL DEVELOPED at this point in the story. RImmy is a huge crystal golem with a couple of slits for a face. Despite being completely unable to speak, Rimmy demonstrates through casual actions like giving the mic a thumbs up not only how he feels about complicated issues like murder, but also reveals that he both emphasizes with the mc's pain AND is familiar with social norms on how to cheer up a friend. It's brilliant. Add to that the novel idea of using identification to give characters a quick backstory and we basically know everything about a seven foot mute statue. If every side character was like that it'd be perfect.

Unfortunately, many of the other side characters feel forced. Ger, for example, at one point looks at his daughters interacting and says something along the lines of 'she likes to tease others but can't handle being teased herself'. This is a violation of that old adage 'show don't tell'. We'd already seen the daughter blushing at being teased so the information was useless. It would be like if Ger had seen Rimmy give Daz a thumbs up and monologued 'he is supportive of his friend'. 

As a quick last example of the issue with character depth is the scene with Daz throwing the red haired woman into a door. The woman later forgives Daz immediately after he apologizes with some line like who couldn't forgive you in this situation? I apologize for being blunt but that makes absolutely no sense. Imagine if you were thrown into a door hard enough to take half your health. In the real world that might be equivalent to being grabbed by the hair and thrown hard enough to break ribs and perhaps cause internal bleeding. Would you just hop up and say 'oh no worries it happens every Sunday can we all go stay at your place?' Of course not. This woman is in charge of not only her own saftey but also 40 other people. She wouldn't risk those lives for some clearly violent stranger simply because he killed some mons. Daz had shown his strength so maybe she wouldn't demand compensation but she would be far more likely to simply thank Daz for his help then attempt to find he own base with the other survivors, especially since they apparently had someone with a skill to reinforce barricades. Why risk their lives with some apparently insane, violent stranger? On top of that, why would 40 other people want to follow someone who introduced himself by nearly killing their leader? These aren't a bunch of goblins who only follow the strongest but a scared group of day to day citizens who already had some semblance of confidence they could defend themselves? 

overall I did like your story and especially in how thorough and creative you were with the system I was pleased, but I need more depth to my side characters yo.

 

EDIT:: I've read past chapter 40 a bit and was pleased to see that my review was somewhat premature. The author does much better on world balance than I thought.

jpat1988
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When I read the first few chapters of this story it was pretty fun. And I was really looking forward to how it would develop and how Daz would adapt to his new world.

But as the story goes on I am starting to have the same issues with the MC that I do with the MC's of the other storys by this author. They dont react in a way that I feel a real person would in the same situation. And while it could just be that the MC is very unique.... I just dont see it.

Normally when reading a story of any kind I want to identify something with the MC. Have some kind of connection. And this story just doesnt have that connection.

A story to read while waiting for others to get updated but not something I would go out of my way to recommend to anyone. Definitely not something I would Patreon with how hard he seems to push it.

 

Evrin
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Everyone likes apocalypse stories

Fun read, if still a bit short at this point.

I look forward to future chapters.

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Even if the MC's name does make me feel like it should belong to a muppet.

Darenzooo~~ 

Not that I'm really criticizing. It's seriously hard to come up with names that are somewhat original.

I mean, I read this one story with a MC named Randidly.I couldn't help but think that the poor kid's school life must have been hell.  

*Stares hard at random space*

That's right, I'm talking about you Ghosthound.

patlıcan
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Fun story, bad characters

The premise is good and the story is fun, but all of the characters feel half-assed and they don't feel like real people. Grammar is pretty good with few errors.

If you like litrpg, you're likely to enjoy this, just don't go into it expecting too much.

The_Gentelman
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Good story, but not for everyone

Trying to avoid spoilers

Alright there are two big reasons I stopped reading this story shortly after getting to book 2. Upfront this is a pretty good book, it has some rough edges however I have noticed an increase in quality. Firstly the military is just... wrong. While it’s probably not the authors fault since most civilians barely know anything about the military, but because I know a great deal about the military reading their parts is like having a migraine and a massive cringe along with wanting to strangle something all at once for me. Again not really the authors fault it’s just very far off the actual real world U.S. military. Secondly I despise the mc’s character. This is not due to bad writing or the mc being an idiot ( he made some mistakes but he ain’t stupid). It is because his character and actions make me genuinly disgusted with him. Many other readers really like the guy and that’s ok, but to me he is someone that once I understood what kind of person he is I would never to try to befriend. I won’t put any spoilers since the military one is already one to many but I just can’t root for the guy. I wish this story and its author good luck but I will not be sticking around to see how it goes.

Zethuron
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Annoying first book, but gets much better

Generally i would say the premise is not much different from the other Apocalyptic litRPG novels on this site, but it can hold on its own.

The story so far has been fine, through there were moments in book 1 and 2 that i did not like reading at all, and those books could be improved a lot, the later books have shown much improvement over the first 2, that it does even out. Through im waiting for the most likely incoming rewrite to form a final opinion on the first 2 books.

The characters, oh god, here we have the same problem as with the story. The MC at first is fine and quick at adapting to the Apocalypse and establishing his base, but later on his personality takes a large turn for the worse and near the end of book 1 the MC made a choice that really annoyed me. Took some time, but since then it got better, althrough that moment still remains as a problem for whoever is going to read this novel. The other characters are decent, but could be improved on althrough they are nowhere near as bad as the MC was near the end of book 1.

The writing of this story has been overall of a good quality, so no problems on that front althrough word choice could be better and some small mistakes fixed.

 

Keep writing like you are now, you have improved much since the start of this story, and please do keep improving since later chapters are so much better to read than the early ones.

 

Lysate
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Normack16
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An interesting story in growth.

If you like a heavily detailed System and some majorly crunchy stat blocks alongside an MC that has legitimate emotional growth...then this is the story for you.

The first section of this story should be read and assimilated as a new auther getting his feet under him and tackling a story type that has effectively limitless potential. Push through the painfully awkward MC inner dialogue and the seemingly bad Stat allotment because I GUARANTEE you that it makes a sharp turnaround by book 2. Past decisions come back in meaningful ways and paper thin side characters pack on some meat. 

All in all, I enjoyed it thoroughly past the 50% mark and started to become invested in Daz (MC) and his journey, would recommend reading this story. 

Finairo
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Decent story, but terrible characters

Decent story and creative world but the characters are unrealistic. The main character has episodes of extreme psychosis, or breaks from reality, without clear reasoning. The only reason we are given for him being crazy is that he’s going through a lot. The characters don’t have a clear personality and will often do things that go against all the actions they had made previously.