Universe Online

Universe Online

by Viken

(Thank you Drakannon for the Cover Art!) My name is Allec Renn, and I was born with ALS. For those of you who don't know what that is, it stands for Amyotrophic Lateral Sclerosis. It basically means that I lost the ability to control my muscles. Its just like Lou Gehrig and Stephen Hawking. By the time I was 6 years old, I was living in a hospital, and from there things progressively got worse. I cannot walk, talk, eat or even go to the bathroom by myself. But there is one thing I can do. Playing games. The advent of Virtual Reality during my early teens greatly alleviated my problems. In the games I can be who I want, what I want. A mighty warrior, a powerful spellcaster, the charming rogue. The crafter. The builder. All sorts of games have come and gone over the years, rising and falling with each advance in VR technology and the ever-increasing power of the Artificial Intelligence's that control them. But now a new actor has taken to the stage. Solar Dynamics, Inc. has unveiled not only the first fully immersive 'deep' Dive Pod, but their flagship game puts all other VR games to shame. Universe Online. No longer are players stuck on a single large world to explore. No longer is there a limit to what you can do, what you can be. Fly spaceships across the universe, conquer planets, create custom technology. Mine, Build, Destroy. Explore. Rule. Do you have what it takes the control the Universe? I'm going to do my best to find out! -NOTE: This story is MATURE, and such has graphic fight scenes, blood and gore. Also cursing. Quite a bit of that in some cases. Sex may also be involved. -NOTE: Like my other story, UO is a work in progress. The storyline, characters, and other things are still in the drafting stages. Also, excuse my spelling and grammar errors!

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Main character is great. I like the story. Keep it up.


i rarely personally give reviews to new fictions  and even more so to ones in the top 50# but yours is a special case.


Style:  you have a nice way of progression and transitioning things what i enjoy most is that you detail how things are done and not have ass things such as  fixing a console isnt a simple case of plugging in a cord and hacking it. 


i enjoy the way you manage to keep the excitement of the chapters in a decent flow there isnt a dull moment is the best way to put it.


Story: now i have seen an enormus ammount of fantasy & VR and even more so Fantasy + VR its good to see a new change of pace and something different. i myself have not dared to do VR or fantasy because of the stats and tables i would find it to annoying. 


but you took something that requires more thought then fantasy which is sci-fi which has an infinite ammount of potential to work with when it comes to tables so it is much harder to find the right ones to add but you seemed to have so far done this well. story is a 5 because since this is the first sci-fi/vr story i have seen that in itself deserves the score for inovating i suppose so keep it up :)


Grammar: in all honesty im no one to speak even i have to get someone to pr my story but this is directed to words you use in the story. you manage to use a more advanced vocabulary and add witty and more interesting words to the fray which is something i enjoy 


Charecter: i guess this requires real thought. it is to early for me to make a judgement on this but so far im enjoying his personality someone who doesent seem to give up and has funny moments of frustration and suprise he has potential to grow so im looking forward to how he advances.



Overall: allthough this review is subject to change you deserve full 5/5 stars for everything. i just hope you know the direction your story is going one thing some storys do which annoys me is introduce annoying side charecters that want to be with the mc just because he is interesting or are romanticly involved with him.


if you manage to make the side charecters likeable and not make the mc sensetive to romance towards his opposite i will be amazed. other then that so far im enjoying it hopefully you upload more chapters soon good job :)


A good Si-fi adveture it seems

The story is off to a good start, the MC might be able to spend his life in the game and get around that whole real life getting in the way of the game.  Setting looks good and the writing is solid, cant wait for more! 


This story is one of the few I love.

It doesn't have a dense main character, the main character is great, the story is great and the MC is also balanced. Also no terrible romance.

Also one of the few fictions that have sci-fi. This is a must read for all sci-fi lovers (or any reader in the world.)



 It's an VRMMORPG in a fantastic sci-fi universe.  Overcoming hardships of the body with the power of the mind.  


Scifi lives, and you must read it!

Maybe not with a doctorate like the old masters, but A realistic Scifi offering is found within these threads(pages).

I have no idea what I'm saying right now, but I'm loving this story. I can feel the struggle. Reveling in every victory, and cursing every defeat... not that there's too many of those yet.

The start is very balanced. the MC has to think his way out of death, but the tools necessary to do so are within his reach. a very solid highly recommended read. The surprises and twists keep you on the edge of your seat...

and craving more!



Amazing, original story after a long time. :D


Such a great and refreshing story.

This is a fantastic read, I wait constantly for the updates on the very very few Fan Fics I read...

I am very particular about what I read, and the style it is written in and such.

This is high on my read list, because not only is it appealing to read, Nothing is so over the top it doesn't seem rational or realistic. It keeps everything grounded and cool. Not just that though, the grammar has been great with the most minimal errors, that even the brain ignore while we read. I only noticed them cause I am a programmer and have gotten good at seeing mistakes, but even then, perfection mate. 


The main reason that I like this story is because it ditches the conventional storylines that are easy to follow or create. Viken, with a Sc-Fi Story, your following a very hard path indeed. With space being unexplored, and unknown, It adds a bit of a struggle for creation for some. What you have done with a hard genre like this is fantastic, I can't stress that enough. An absolutely great work.

Keep on writing, I hope donations start to raise your writing time, cause not many writers and novelist will be able to fully compare with what your able to put out mate. Have a good day, and if you read this all, thanks. I didn't do an advanced review because I think stressing each point of the Fiction will take away from its quality as a whole.



[Nicholaus "Nick"]


Worth the read, first Sci-Fi LitRPG Space Opera! There are no other books in this specific category.


In a world of fantasy based FFs a sci-fi fiction rises to the surface.

A good, almost great science fiction FF that has great world building and character development.  A fun read.