Crystal Guardian

Crystal Guardian

by nBosega

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An unassuming object from the Heavens Strikes the Earth, and in its wake the new age of man begins. The impact of the Objects Gives Birth to 2 new species of Neo-Humans, and one of the newly created Neo-Humans gives birth to a Hybrid of Human and Neo-Human. The 2 Neo-Humans are sometimes good and sometimes very-very BAD.

The world is changed forever as the 2 Neo-Humans go to war with each other over the right to determine the destiny of the world. The war draws in the Hybrids and the Humans escalating it to the point where the survival of life on the planet hangs in the balance. An unexpected resolution and peace is restored; for as long as a tentative peace holds.

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This is a story of Men of Honour and Women of Virtue. A story of Armies of Light and Soldiers of Darkness; A story of Great Battles. A story about the Home of the Warriors, the Reasons they Fought and How they Died.

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Author's Note:

I started this Work of Fiction before Realm Eternal, but at the time Realm Eternal was burning to get out of my head and onto paper/screen so I couldn't focus on Crystal Guardian, and now that the Realm Eternal itch has been scratched I can begin releasing Crystal Guardian Arc 1: Between the Darkness and the Light.

To be honest despite my dislike of Overpowered Characters my Protagonists are OP. I try to balance it out by making quite a few other people OP.

?Written in South African English which means closer to the British Standard.?
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Warning: Mature Content ?Violence, Language and Adult Themes ?

List of My Novels:


?Realm Eternal?

?Crystal Guardian ?

?Exiled Nomads of the Galaxy?

?Soul Vessel Psyche?

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96 Chapters
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter: Foreword ago
Chapter 01: Origins ago
Chapter 02: Evolution of the Crystal ago
Chapter 03: Progress ago
Chapter 04: In the Name of Crystalorb ago
Chapter 05: The Legend of Heart ago
Chapter 06: To Arms ago
Chapter 07: Strike Force ago
Chapter 08: Pre-emptive Attack ago
Chapter 09: Sidelines ago
Chapter 10: The Return from a Different Dimension ago
Chapter 11: Impact ago
Chapter 12: A constant called Change ago
Chapter 13: The Light of Knowledge ago
Chapter 14: The Hour of Darkness ago
Chapter 15: The New Weapon ago
Chapter 16: Bridging the Gap ago
Chapter 17: The Gathering ago
Chapter 18: The Cost of Benevolence. ago
Chapter 19: The Quest for Revenge. ago
Chapter 20: The New Path. ago
Chapter 21: Perspective ago
Chapter 22: Criminality ago
Chapter 23: Power Politics ago
Chapter 24: The Pain of Loss ago
Chapter 25: The Heart is Lost ago
Chapter 26: Fire and Lightning ago
Chapter 27: Rebuilding ago
Chapter 28: The Nature of Crystalan ago
Chapter 29: The Honourable Path ago
Chapter 30: The Path Home ago
Chapter 31: Giver of Light ago
Chapter 32: A new Dawn ago
Crystal Guardian 【Vision of an Alternate Future】 ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 1 ─ Prologue - Being Part of a Greater Good ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 2 ─ Chronology ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 3 ─ Aftermath ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 4 ─ A Step Forward ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 5 ─ Propaganda ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 6 ─ In the Darkness Between the Stars ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 7 ─ O'ltana ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 8 ─ Egalitarian Response ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 9 ─ Strategy ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 10 ─ Manoeuvres ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 11 ─ Tactics ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 12 ─ Political Expediency & Commerce ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 13 ─ Colony ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 14 ─ Crystalorb Moon ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 15 ─ Crystalorb’s Boon ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 16 ─ Pride ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 17 ─ Duty ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 18 ─ Generals or "Lords of War" ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 19 ─ Transition ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 20 ─ The Old and the New ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 21 ─ The power of a Guardian ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 22 ─ The New Hope ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 23 ─ Echo in the Dark ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 24 ─ Encounter ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 25 ─ Into the Fire ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 26 ─ The Doctrine of Unintended Consequences ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 27 ─ Probing Force ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 28 ─ Instinct ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 29 ─ Migon ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 30 ─ Returning to the Beginning ago
【VAF】 Arc 2: Forward ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 31 ─ Prologue 『Despair』 ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 32 ─ High Protector ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 33 ─ Entig ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 34 ─ Negative Psionic Energy ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 35 ─ One Heart ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 36 ─ Communion ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 37 ─ Genocide ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 38 ─ Divine Energy ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 39 ─ Crystalorb System ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 40 ─ Crystalorb Inter-Dimensional Realm ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 41 ─ Galactic History ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 42 ─ Conference of Guardians ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 43 ─ Memories 1 ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 44 ─ Memories 2 ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 45 ─ Memories 3 ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 46 ─ Memories 4 ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 47 ─ Memories 5 ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 48 ─Ascended Protocol ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 49 ─ A History Lesson ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 50 ─ The True Power of an Ascended Crystalan ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 51 ─ True Crystalan ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 52 ─ Before Chaos ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 53 ─ Movements ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 54 ─ Days of War ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 55 ─ Provocation ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 56 ─ Warship Statistics ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 57 ─ Consultations ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 58 ─ BattleMoon ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 59 ─ Diac ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 60 ─ Elder Might ago
【VAF】Chapter║: 61 ─ The Power of a Crystal Guardian ago

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Rolandor
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This is a Good Start to what will undoubtedly turn into a Good Story.

 

From just the first Chapter [Origins] it's clear that something Epic is about to unfold.

 

Good Luck! 

 

 

Nalen
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As always your Storytelling is very Good!

 

This is yet another well thought out story, and linking history through an engaging story line is very interesting. As it is I don’t know who the MC is but I hope it’s Nalen (Wink wink nudge nudge).

 

I’m waiting with keen interest to see where the story goes and will update my review based on performance.

 

Keep up the good work!

dakingk
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 I really like the story and the placement of the pov 

Especially the beginning of the story of where the crystal originated from and so on i can tell a lot of planning came into process with this story that i am  utterly enjoying 

so far things are spicing up im at chapter 8 and the pace of the story seems just right even with the info dumps here and there its still a good read that i can actually sit back and take my time to enjoy

i wont put any spoilers in this but i will say i really like the main character(s) especially for his  intelligence,  inpredicableness (not a word but you get the meaning) and care for his family and race as well for her direct forward attitude, strategic measures, care for family and the opness they’ve both shown so far 

so continue on with your great work i enjoy both your story’s by the way

BadGenuis
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The way it started is not good. The format is like a throwback like in anime when they awoken super powers, it shows the authors intent to make it purely for establishing premise but it took so long.

The way author wrote the name before the dialogue became uncomfortable fast.

Technological advancement is overrated. Just because you use electricity, atmospheric pressure, biomechanical, and crystal tech in one sentence does not make the gadget impressive. You can make alien like tech using more mundane words and make it no less awesome.

(E.g. wristwatch like device created by the most smart person of the most intelligent alien species in the multiverse. It copies DNA of any sapient being it encounters and enable user to transform into them. Or a full body suit created using the most advance technology present in earth, streamline in shape, have sonic propulsion in all limbs, flight booster, and AI assistent HUD system)

Possibilities are not explored. Population count is suppose to be exponential. Crystalan(?) Are Illogically stupid in the premise that they are crystal mutated. 

Lastly, the Goal is bullshit. Going out to be accepted in the world? Why would you do that like you're going to war? Asking for trouble?

You can deploy crystalans in groups or individuals to integrate in the society. The crystalorb is the perfect sanctuary, those who want to go out will go out. Why would you need to go out as one? They are connected to the source so all that go out are acocunted for. Why would you need recognition? For Vanity? 

uiytt
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Good idea but some problems

First thing to say, i'm not english, as so I have no idea of the grammar score....

This story has two main parts : 1. The main part 2. The space part, I will not say the same things for each part. 

Story 

The main idea is very interesting and original. We follow a civilization on earth and it's relation and interaction with the different governments through time. This story is 100% magic sci-fi.  The world building is good (but not incredible) but i really like if we had seen more details of the earth government pov. And also for the second part of the story, there is too many useless information such as every details of each ships or indigestible texts. 

Character score

For the first part, everything is ok for the characters. We're interested in them and they are reliable. The only problem is apart from the main characters, nobody is a minimal well developed.

as for the second part, they are not any characters left, we lost all interest in the name that appears and consequently in the main civilization. It's just details and details everywhere ! 

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Here is one of the main problem :/ 

There is a lot of repetition and all the discussion are wrote like this : 

Person1: Hello 

Person2 : Blablabla

There is no real constructed phrases for the discussion :/ I can't really stay focused on the story :/ 

 

Overall 

Good idea but suffer from bad writing :/ I can't go further 

Aquablivigia
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Crystal Guardian is an incredible work of art. I loved reading each and every chapter of it. One thing that makes it stand out compared to most other story's is the chapter length. Each chapter is very long, and as such reading each one last's a pretty good period of time. The story is expansive, and colorful(If not complicated at times). It was so enjoyable i just had to make a review. This is the first review i have ever left on any story i have ever read. I really hope that you will continue this incredible novel that you have made sometime in the near future!   

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Sandsforever
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The premise is good but I just didnt enjoy it so sadly I dropped it 

I didnt read far enough to truly rate everything (so take my review with a grain of salt)