Praying For My Downfall

by Bonemage

Warning This fiction contains:
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  • Profanity

Mike Nelson is old. His health problems are getting worse and worse all the time. Luckily, there is a new VRMMO technology with extreme time compression that will allow him to make the most of his remaining years. The new game K.O.R.A.L. promises to be the most immersive MMO of all time, with many of the traditional tools of players stripped away and a permadeath system for their characters. The only problem is the Alpha phase two years ago has made the NPC population of the game extremely paranoid about Travelers, and likely to kill them whenever they are discovered.

 

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Nerocarson
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 When will you continue/publish? I love this story and i need more!! 

mooseman531
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I would reccomend this story. I like the direction it is heaing in, the MC is relateable, and at the time of review a little overpowered, but the Author has implied that this may not be the case for long.

MadHat3r
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Definitely worth a try

It's a tried and true subject/concept that's easy to follow and even comes in understandable English